Grab the back of my head and shove your prick in my mouth.
I'm a naughty girl who deserves a good mouth fuck.
Pump my hot wet mouth until your veins are popping out.
Slide it over my tongue and into the soft darkness.
Your balls tighten and you hold my head still.
Your cock deep into my soft slippery mouth.
You push harder, into my gag reflex and shoot.
Shot after shot of hot cream seeping down my throat.
Pump one last time, emptying your balls into my hole.
Take it out and tell me to lick it clean.
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| Juglore | So hot! Awesome poem. | |
| Dick R. | The poem is short, non-descript and virtually unnoticeable. That's why it's remarkable. As it is it evokes powerful masculine emotion to take the little bitch and make her swallow. It's VERY erotic in the rough. | |
| Why insult me and the try to back pedal into a compliment? It's poetry and poetry is very personal. Have you read any of my short stories? --LadyOfSin |
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| NoOne | A perfect mix of POV's. Alternating so subtly (and so frequently) so as arouse both of us. In a word, eloquent. | |
| Daddy Depraved | I love your stories and I love this poem. Wonderful. It makes my closet pedo cock so hard. I could almost feel the back of a little girl's throat. Why am I cursed with a desire that I can never fulfill in good conscience? Your stories, though, help me find release. |
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| suckem7869 | Love the taste of cum. | |
| Lehunter | 12/7/2015 | Love this poem , although short it is so very erotic and I was getting hard by the 3rd line and was completely hard by the 4th. HOT !!! |
| Vladimir | 3/8/2016 | 'm not the commentator Dick R., above, who started a little exchange with LadyOfSin; but I'd like to comment on that exchange. Dick R. says that the poem is short. How is this an insult? Yes, it's subjective (there are some very short poems, which make this one long by comparison; there also are much longer ones, compared to which this one is short); but how is this description of length an insult? Dick R. says the poem is nondescript. How is it insulting that someone finds it hard to describe the poem in some kind of distinct way? How is it insulting that he or she has trouble thinking of it in a way that makes it extremely memorable? I've read tons of poems that I don't remember; I'd say most are that way: does that mean they're bad? Is that an insult to their authors? I believe it doesn't and it's not. And Dick R. says the poem is hardly noticeable. This is just a guess on my part, but I think that what was meant is that the fact that it *is verse* is not immediately obvious that it reads like prose. How is that bad? Many poems are intentionally written in that way. There even is such a thing as poetic prose, which is not verse at all. The only way, I think, in which it could be disappointing to hear that the verse aspect is hardly noticeable is that such subtlety is not what you intended. If that's the case, remember that different readers are different persons, with different abilities to interpret the poet's intention. How are others' varying abilities an insult to you? The fact that someone almost doesn't notice something that you wanted him or her to notice (but in the end still does notice) is not an insult: it's just reality (I didn't even notice that this was a poem until I read the comment we're discussing). I think that pointing out this aspect of reality also is not insulting unless one is in a mood to be insulted, in which case anything can be an insult. The subtlety of the verse also brings up the possibility that what Dick R. meant by "nondescript" is that the specific poetic form is not a standard: e.g., it's not a Petrarchan sonnet; it's not a limerick. The poem does seem to be of the style known as "free verse", but maybe Dick R. was unaware of this term as a definite description of this style. In the end, this poem is memorable to me, simply because of that exchange of comments and my response to it. |
| lilgirl@heart | 4/30/2016 | It's beautiful and I loved it LadyOfSin. Makes me want to get throat-raped and threatened with a beating if I don't swallow every drop. |
| Arrangements can be made ;) --LadyOfSin |
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