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Celestial Reviews 345 November 10, 1999
Note: I have a lot of reviews this week. That's because (1) I'm trying to
finish off the Halloween stories for this year; (2) I'm trying to review as
many stories as possible for the a.s.s.m. Grand Opening, (3) I had some extra
time, and (4) my guest reviewers helped out.
I want to thank Techguy for his help in getting the links together. Some of
them are missing mostly because some stories had not been formally posted
when I reviewed them. Most of these will be available right away in the newly
opened a.s.s.m.
I hope the new a.s.s.m. works out well. It will be convenient to have an area
that contains only stories. A.s.s. and even a.s.s.d. have become so filled
with spam and other nonsense that it's very difficult to find good stories
there.
If you want me to review your stories, I suggest that you post them in
a.s.s.m. with the <*> signal {an asterisk in brackets} to catch my
attention and that you also send me a copy asking for a review. I feel I have
a right to review any story that's posted, but I have no interest in picking
on people who don't want to be picked on. I plan to keep crossposting my
reviews to a.s.s., because not everyone will have access to a.s.s.m. I
suggest that others follow this practice when posting their stories.
My goal is simply to supply some useful and interesting information to people
looking for stories and to have some fun while doing so.
Second note: Age and Womanhood
1. Between the ages of 13 and 18,
she is like Africa, virgin and unexplored.
2. Between the ages of 19 and 35,
she is like Asia, hot and exotic.
3. Between the ages of 36 and 45,
she is like America, fully explored, breathtakingly
beautiful, and free with her resources.
4. Between the ages of 46 and 56,
she is like Europe, exhausted but still
has points of interest.
5. After 56 she is like Australia,
everybody knows it's down there,
but who gives a damn?
Age and Manhood
1. Between 16 and 26:
Tri-weekly
2. Between 27 and 46:
Try weekly
3. Over 47:
Try weakly
Third note: A Texan buys a round of drinks for all in the bar because, he
announces, his wife has just produced "a typical Texas baby boy weighing 20
pounds." Congratulations shower him from all around, and many exclamations
of "Wow!" are heard. A woman faints because of sympathy pains.
Two weeks later, he returns to the bar. The bartender says, "Say, you're the
father of the typical Texas baby that weighed 20 pounds at birth. How much
does he weigh now?"
The proud father answers, "Ten pounds."
The bartender is puzzled, concerned. "Why? What happened? He already weighed
20 pounds at birth."
The Texas father takes a slow swig from his long-neck Lone Star, wipes his
lips on his shirtsleeve, leans into the bartender and proudly says, "Had him
circumcised."
=====================
Celestial Reviews Index:
=====================
"Reflections" by Harry Tasker (Barroom pickup) 10, 9, 9
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=523028730
"Night Fire" by Jedi Knight (mystery woman) 9.5, 9.5, 9.5
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=330613612
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=330613619
"Convention Town Girl" by Ms. Screwloose (transition to slut) 9.5, 7, 6
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=473298477
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=473298500
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=535811796
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=524576808
"To Tame a Dragon" by Virago Blue (orgy) 10, 9, 9
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=536467423
"Out of Sync with the Sixties" by Bernard Sagon (1960s college sex) 9.5, 9, 9
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=526337483
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=526342568
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=526342627
"Sunday Tease" by Monocle (romantic rough sex) 10, 10, 10
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=510879533
"The Beach Was Never Like This! " by Lambchop (mind control) 9.5, 7, 7
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=524327618
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=524327673
"Ms.--No, Dr. Bobbie Johnson" by BillyG (medicinal sex) 10, 10, 10
"Let Us Now Praise Ordinary Women" by Marc Proust (romance) 10, 10, 10
"Making My Daughter Mine" by Crazyfuckr (pedophile torture) 4, 2, 1
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=543616835
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=543617949
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=543621422
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=543624413
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=543625087
"His Taste" by Artie (mind control sex) 10, 10, 10
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=520800588
"Final Dawn" K.Vagabond (vampire fantasy) 10, 8, 8
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=541724440
"Autumn Sunday" by Elena (romance) 10, 10, 10
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=542842814
"Vengence" by Alden Bradley (infidelity & wife watching) 10, 9, 9
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=538688927
"Grammar Lesson" by Allison George (college sex) 10, 10, 10
"The Right Wrong Spell" by Souvie (Halloween sex) 10, 9.5, 9.5
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=542663140
"Janey's September" by Janey (outdoor orgy) 10, 9.5, 9.5
"Bill's Not-So-Secret Urge" by Admiral Cartwright (mm sex) 10, 10, 10
"The Erotic Adventures of Robin Hood" by Ann Douglas (ribald ff sexual
legend) 9.5, 10, 10
"The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue" by Titmouse (cybersex becomes real sex)
10, 9.5, 9
"Replacement" by Nick (romance) 10, 10, 9.5
"Who Said That?" by Sidney Durham (humorous sex) 10, 10, 10
"Can't, Won't" by Spline Duck (tag-team sex) 10, 9.5, 9.5
"History Class" by Uther Pendragon (humor) 10, 8, 8
"Bellavia" by Artie (romance) 10, 9, 9
"Dancing in the Dark" by Sven the Elder (romance) 10, 9. 9
"Dangling By A Thread" by Lambchop (cliffhanger sex) 10, 10, 10
"The Soul of the Party " by jcx (humor) 10, 10, 10
"Cathy's Sentence" by E.Z. Riter (sex slavery revenge) 10, 10, 10
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=
"Sharing Kim" by E. Z. Riter (spouse sharing) 10, 10, 9.5
"Alarms and Excursions" by Vickie Morgan (nearly public quickie) 10, 9.5,
9.5
=====================
Guest Reviews:
=====================
"Night of Privilege" by Kellis (medieval sex). BillyG: 10, 10, 10
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=532466671
"Molly" by Theodore Spoonbender (romantic adventure). Nick: 9.5, 10, 9.5
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=526508113
"One Good Turn..." by Omega13 (threesome). Mary: 9, 8, 9
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=541444219
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=541444266
"Kelly and Her Little Sister" by Typoman (bdsm). BillyG: 7, 8, 6
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=512471783
"Jesse" by Shon Richards (furry sex). Myers: NR
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=521233983
=====================
Here are the Reviews:
=====================
"Reflections" by Harry Tasker (harry-tasker@harry-tasker.demon.co.uk).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=523028730
What are nice people like these doing in a pub like this? Read the story and
find out. There's an interesting twist at the end. I can tell you no more. If
I did, I would have to kill you.
Ratings for "Reflections"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"Night Fire" by Jedi Knight (JediKnight@FarawayGalaxy.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=330613612
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=330613619
The guy comes home one night and finds a mysterious, sexy woman in his
bedroom. We never do find out what she's doing there. Actually, the previous
sentence is ambiguous. It's pretty clear what she's doing there. We're just
not sure how she got there.
This is a very short but very nice story.
Ratings for "Night Fire"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
"Convention Town Girl" by Ms. Screwloose (screwloose2@my-deja.com)
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=473298477
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=473298500
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=535811796
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=524576808
Our narrator is a sexy woman whose husband wants her to be nice to his
clients. They go to nice restaurants at casinos, and the various clients and
their friends have their way with the wife in all kinds of odd places <wink>.
They even have a sort of circle jerk that incorporates a wine bottle as a
phallic symbol. The husband, of course, enjoys the humiliation and excitement.
I still need a little convincing that many normal men and women would enjoy
this idea in real life. The best presentation I have seen on the topic of
spouse sharing was the movie "Indecent Proposal," and there the idea didn't
sound so good after all.
One element that made the story drag a little was the constant repetition of
the wife's astonished comments like, "Are you sure you really want me to do
that?" In addition, Chapter 3 switches viewpoints between the husband and the
wife, but I didn't find the change of perspective to be very productive.
Ratings for "Convention Town Girl"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6
"To Tame a Dragon" by Virago Blue (mdmvirago@aol.comestible).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=536467423
This is a very short segment about a part of an orgy. I found it to be
enticing, but confusing probably because I haven't read any other stories
in the Fantasy Train series. I guess the main purpose of this review is to
point out that this Fantasy Train series exists and to say that it seems to
have potential.
Ratings for "To Tame a Dragon"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"Out of Sync with the Sixties" by Bernard Sagon (bernard_sagon@my-deja.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=526337483
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=526342568
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=526342627
Back in the 1960s, the narrator is doing some work as a stagehand for the
college play. He goes to a party with one of the other workers, and they have
wild and passionate sex. It's his first time, and she's really good at it and
takes pride in her work, and so a good time is had by all.
I enjoyed the allusions to bygone days that set the ambience for some very
hot sex. Those days were before my time, of course; but they appear to have
been interesting.
Ratings for "Out of Sync with the Sixties"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"Sunday Tease" by Monocle (monocle_o@NOTTHIS.hotmail.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=510879533
The author sent me this a long time ago. I put it at the top of my inbox, but
then kept putting more and more things on top of it. I finally dug it back
up, and I'm glad I did.
The man and his wife have just recently procreated. Whilst the little bundle
of joy is sleeping, they go about their daily duties cleaning up the house
and such matters. However, she is dressed to tease him. In the end <g> the
little cockteaser gets what she's asking for.
I have never had sex with a post partum woman whose breasts are engorged with
milk, but I have been present when my husband has done so. This sort of thing
can be lots of fun, and the author conveys the festivities effectively.
Ratings for "Sunday Tease"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Beach Was Never Like This!" by Lambchop (pcd10@my-deja.com )
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=524327618
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=524327673
The girls have purchased new swimsuits. They even got a huge discount from
the cute guys who sold them the swimwear. But the joke's on them. Literally.
Ya see, after the suits have been in the water for 15 minutes, they
disintegrate, leaving the wearers stark naked. The guys know this, and so
they follow the girls to the beach and force them to come back to the guys'
apartment, where the girls hope to acquire some clothing and other
acoutrements, which can be spelled two ways, neither of which was my first
choice.
But when the girls get to the apartment, the joke is on them again.
Literally, once more. Ya see, the guys have put mind control gas in the
ventilation system, which has actually become a titillation system. So the
guys fuck the girls every which way they can; but no harm, no foul. The girls
can't even remember what happened, and they are likely to fall for the same
scam again, which is fine, because they liked it a lot.
Ratings for "The Beach Was Never Like This! "
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
"Ms.--No, Dr. Bobbie Johnson" by BillyG (hayden@mindless.com).
Billy has stumbled and blundered himself into a cast {on his leg, not in a
play} that severely restricts his activities. Meanwhile, the erstwhile and
eponymous Ms. Bobbie Johnson has graduated from med school and wants to have
recreational sex with Billy before she leaves his life forever.
What's a girl to do? She does just fine.
Either use your imagination or read the story for details.
Ratings for "Ms.--No, Dr. Bobbie Johnson"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Let Us Now Praise Ordinary Women" by Marc Proust (proust@usit.net).
Hope Morris is married to an egotistical asshole who is after her money. She
is an ordinary (non-glamorous) person, and her husband has eyes for the more
spectacular sort of person.
There was a song back in my parents' day that had a line in it that said, "If
you want to be happy for the rest of your life/ Never make a pretty woman
your wife." The narrator stumbles upon a similar insight. But he soon
discovers that the ordinary woman is most extraordinary when she is treated
properly.
I think this story was originally in the bible, but it was excluded when the
Puritans took over. The present rendition - which includes a combination of
humor, poignant insight, and good sex - is quite good.
Ratings for "Let Us Now Praise Ordinary Women"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Making My Daughter Mine" by Crazyfukr (crazyfukr@my-deja.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=543616835
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=543617949
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=543621422
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=543624413
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=543625087
A single father is struggling to raise 3 children (2 girls and a boy). He
finds out that one of his daughters is messing around and decides to turn her
into HIS total SLUT. Imagine that.
I saw this title in the listings and wondered if the story could be as bad as
it sounded. It was. I only read the disclaimer plus the first hundred words
or so. Authors get only one chance to make a good first impression.
Ratings for "Making My Daughter Mine"
Athena (technical quality): 4
Venus (plot & character): 2
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 1
"His Taste" by Artie (artie@netgate.net).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=520800588
This is Artie doing an O. Henry story a nice tale with a surprise ending.
As with "The Gift of the Magi," there's even a moral to this story.
Tom and Laura are practitioners of mutual hypnosis. Back when I was in
college, we used to think that only extreme experts could hypnotize people
and that when someone became hypnotized, he would walk around like a zombie
and do whatever he was programmed to do. I'm pretty sure they teach it
differently nowadays. College students now seem to learn that almost anyone
can hypnotize anyone else and that the main purpose of hypnosis is to control
the behavior of potential sex partners. Neither insight is accurate, but the
latter makes for a more willing suspension of disbelief.
But Tom is also an author, and he puts the final touches on his current MC
story before hitting the sack with Laura. You will enjoy this story. You will
enjoy this story. You will enjoy this story.
Ratings for "His Taste"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Final Dawn" by K. Vagabond (kvagabond@mailcity.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=541724440
I am not a vampire, nor have I ever performed as one on TV or in a school
play. So there are some things that I don't know about these creatures, whose
very existence I sometimes doubt.
This is an extremely well written story about a vampire who has been doing
nasty vampire things for a long time but has decided to end his career. But
then he decides to do something else presumably with a female vampire.
The story appears to be well written, and somebody who knows or cares more
about vampires may find this story to be really fascinating.
Ratings for "Final Dawn"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Grammar Lesson" by Allison George (allison_george@hotmail.com).
Jenn spends some time discussing her essay with her classmate Jerry, and then
he invites her to his garret to see the new font he has developed. One thing
leads to another, and soon they are printing out a Shakespearean sonnet in
the new font. This leads to raucous sex.
If it is not obvious to you by now why this story is entitled "Grammar
Lesson," I guess you had better to ahead and read it. Actually, the story is
more about proofreading or typing than grammar. But that's OK. Really.
The style of nesting the story within the conversation of two roommates is
quite effective. This is an excellent story.
Ratings for "Grammar Lesson"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Autumn Sunday" by Elena (silverlink@freeuk.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=542842814
Katie is amazed that she can make love to James so passionately but still not
be able to tell him that she loves him. The entire focus of this story is on
their lovemaking and whether or how she will disclose this information to
him. I'll be damned if I'm going to tell you the answer.
This is a tight, nicely told story. Some would call it vanilla, but vanilla
is good sometimes. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Ratings for "Autumn Sunday"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Vengence" by Alden Bradley (zzztopper@aol.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=538688927
For a story that starts with a misspelled title, this one is pretty good.
LeighAnn's husband has wandered from the straight and narrow, and so she has
the right to a revenge fuck to set matters straight. She picks out a hunk
pretty much at random and invites her friend Stacy along for protection when
she goes to fuck him. A good time is had by all, and they even get it on
videotape.
As you might have suspected, the husband enjoys watching the tape, and we can
see a foursome in the future.
This story uses really simple almost simplistic language to describe the
events, and this style is very effective.
Ratings for "Vengence"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"The Right Wrong Spell" by Souvie (souvien22@yahoo.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=542663140
Three young ladies who halfheartedly believe they are witches have gathered
in San Francisco to conjure up a demon for Halloween. To their dismay, they
actually succeed. Two of the ladies depart in fear, while the third stays to
meet the demon in tight fitting jeans, who appears to possess some delectable
characteristics. It turns out he's not a demon at all just an itinerant
magician, taking advantage of the opportunity.
This is the first story that I have reviewed by this author, and I thought it
was excellent.
Ratings for "The Right Wrong Spell"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
"Janey's September" by Janey (janey98@hotmail.com).
The story starts with Janey and two of her friends talking about, fuck
fantasies, their inhibitions, and expanding their sexual horizons. Pretty
soon we find them relaxing in an orchard in New Hampshire at the vacation
home of one of the couples. Some peach juice gets into an interesting place,
and pretty soon everyone is enjoying peachsicles. Since my spellcheck did not
recognize that word, I guess I have to tell you that what they're doing is
having an orgy. Right there in the orchard. Oh my!
In this story Janey advances the thesis that women get more interested in sex
for the sake of sex as they get older. She and her friends still like
romance, but now that they're older, the idea of an orgy doesn't exactly turn
them off.
When an author writes lots of stories about orgies, she has an obligation to
do at least minor variations on the theme. The three new motifs in the
present stories are the involvement of peach juice, the focus on lots of
skin, and the ambivalence shown by one of the partners. The peach juice theme
works very nicely; 'nuff said. The skin motif is also nicely handled. I don't
do orgies in real life myself; but one of the features that sounds most
attractive about the ones I have fantasized is the availability of lots of
naked skin sometimes belonging to unidentified participants. However, the
ambivalence theme didn't quite make it for me. On the other hand, I really
did appreciate the effort the notion that someone might hesitate and think
over the consequences before plunging into an orgy really does make sense.
This is not Janey's best story ever, but it's still a very, very good story.
Especially if you find it interesting to imagine people licking peach juice
off various body parts while spouses either look on or join in.
Ratings for "Janey's September"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
"Bill's Not-So-Secret Urge" by Admiral Cartwright (admcartwright@my-Deja.com).
I don't review a lot of stories that deal with male homosexuality. The reason
is simple: I'm a heterosexual female; and if I am going to be motivated at
least partly by what turns me on, male homosexuality themes just aren't
likely to do the trick. So I usually just go about my life, ignoring mm
stories except that this time the author mailed it to me and asked me to
review it for the Grand Opening of a.s.s.m. Oh well, que sera sera.
The story focuses on a man exchanging sexual favors with another man in a
booth where they are watching a porn video of guys having sex. While he's
engaged in this activity, he reflects back over the major milestones in his
sex-life with other men.
I didn't find this to be a turn-on, but I did find it to be very interesting.
A reasonable goal in reading this story would be to find out "how gay guys do
it." I really don't know how well this story helped me achieve that goal.
After all, I just reviewed a story about heterosexual couples coating
themselves with peach juice and switching partners during an orgy. I doubt
that anything very close to that has happens to the average heterosexual, and
I suspect that most gay guys don't have sex in booths at video stores either.
The guys in this story have cocks that range from 6.0 inches to 11.5 inches.
This leads me to believe that the author errs on the side of the sensational
or at least the fascinating.
Anyway, the story deals with several interesting ideas that certainly must
influence male homosexual activity, including the likelihood of getting Aids
more likely by swallowing.
Even if the story is comprised of wild exaggerations, it had a tone of
authenticity that kept me interested. If you enjoy stories about male
homosexual activity, you may like this one even more than I did.
Ratings for "Bill's Not-So-Secret Urge"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Erotic Adventures of Robin Hood" by Ann Douglas
(ann_douglas@hotmail.com).
Most people assume that Robin Hood was a guy; but if you think about it, the
name is androgynous. I have been suspicious ever since I first saw Errol
Flynn prancing around in those green sissy tights. Some of those pirouettes
were just a little too much!
Anyway, in this story it's a young woman named Robyn Hood who torments the
bad guys and makes Marian feel like a real woman.
When I was a child, I used to tell my mother on each of my birthdays that
"this has been my best birthday ever!" I guess that could have actually been
true, but I suspect that I was influenced by my more recent interaction with
the current birthday. The same may be true here. I think this may be Ann's
best story ever. On the other hand, it's been a while since I read some of
the older ones. What I do know is that Ann takes a famous legend and does a
good job of infusing into it some really good sex.
Ratings for "The Erotic Adventures of Robin Hood"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue" by Titmouse (NiteSweats@aol.com).
The two people meet on the Internet. They do ordinary things like exchanging
purity test scores and sexual fantasies, and then they decide to meet in real
life. She's 22 and he's 2.5 times her age. Unless all those articles about
American education are correct, you should be able to figure out his age or
at least have the sense to settle for an approximation.
When they meet, the man takes charge and makes every effort to give the woman
the best sex of her life. I think there are some tenuous assumptions here
such as the notion that there really are porn movie theaters that have a
wholesome ambience that will promote romance and that it really is sensible
for a woman to place herself wholly at the mercy of a man she has known only
through the Internet. However, if you accept these assumptions, the story is
pretty good.
Ratings for "The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"Replacement" by Nick (nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk).
As I was reading this story, I became conceited and muttered to myself, "I
could have recognized this as Sven's style, even if it didn't have his name
at the top of the story." So then I looked at the top of the story and
discovered it was written by Nick, not Sven. Oh, well; they live in the same
island near the edge of the Atlantic anyway.
This is a poignant, romantic story about two people whose house burned down.
The insurance money has enabled them to rebuild, and they have come to
examine and initiate the house. There's a lot of interesting stuff in this
story; but I'd ruin it if I tried to tell you most of it. There's also a
surprise twist at the end.
Ratings for "Replacement"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
"Who Said That?" by Sidney Durham (sidney_durham@my-Deja.com).
This story is a little hard to describe. Mostly it's about the narrator and
his cock having a conversation with the narrator's wife, while she's trying
to avoid having sex with either of them. It's really pretty funny.
Ratings for "Who Said That?"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Can't, Won't" by Spline Duck (splineduck@my-Deja.com).
The story begins with the narrator engaged in a passionate pickup at the
local small-town pub. Once the victim is hot to trot, she informs him that he
has to fuck her roommate; but she promises to make it interesting and
worthwhile for him.
The basic idea is that our narrator has been sort of hyperactive on the
sexual scene and needs to withdraw and get some space for herself. Her
roommate, on the other hand, is a somewhat overweight lady, who is horny as
hell but can't get laid. So they work out the strategy by which the narrator
picks 'em up and the roommie beds 'em.
Ratings for "Can't, Won't"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
"History Class" by Uther Pendragon (anon584c@nyx.net).
This isn't a story as much as an anecdote or clever little joke. It's about a
young lady who went down in history as the first student who went down in
history because she went down in history.
Go figure. Or read the story for details.
Ratings for "History Class"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Bellavia" by Artie (artie@netgate.net).
This is a very short story about a first-time experience that took place a
long time ago. The narrator is recalling it while listening to the same piece
of music. It's a very short but very nice story.
Ratings for "Bellavia"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"Dancing in the Dark" by Sven the Elder (sven@brass-neck.demon.co.uk).
The man and his wife take a weekend getaway by automobile. The place they
stop at specializes in dancing, but they make music of their own <wink>.
The story does an excellent job of focusing on the woman's "new decisiveness"
and the man's reaction to her assertiveness and willingness to depart from
previous custom.
Ratings for "Dancing in the Dark"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"Dangling by a Thread" by Lambchop (pcd10@my-Deja.com).
This is a real cliffhanger literally, almost. Allen is out on his platform,
washing windows on the high rise building. He leans over a bit to get a
better view of the beautiful Oriental woman masturbating on the sofa, and he
comes on his platform er, I mean he almost comes off his platform that
is, he is left hanging there about five miles off the ground. His life is
hanging in the balance literally.
The woman's name is Nancy Lee, who seems to be a refugee from an Ann Douglas
adventure, except that the window washer with whom she eventually makes love
is neither a teenage girl nor a sexy grandmother.
After he is rescued, Allen is in shock. If this were literally true, Nancy
should dial 911 and have the paramedics come to take care of him. Shock is
serious business. I know this both from a nun back in high school and from a
myopic guest on the Gerry Springer Show. However, I think the author was
using the term loosely, because Nancy decides to cum for Allen herself, and
he seems to be just fine.
This is an excellent story with a happy ending and a moral to it.
Ratings for "Dangling by a Thread"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Soul of the Party " by jcx (jcx100@hotmail.com)
Although it does contain metaphors referring to tight virgin pussies (among
other things), this story contains no sex at all. It's just a description of
how the author wrote his story for the Gala Grand Opening of a.s.s.m. It's
just a wonderfully creative and well written story.
Ratings for "The Soul of the Party "
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Cathy's Sentence" by E.Z. Riter (ezriter@pdq.net).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=
If I may use the technical terms of American jurisprudence, Cathy has messed
with the Lone Ranger once too often. To put it differently, she has tugged on
Superman's cape when she shouldn't have. In other words, she has used her
sexual wiles in attempt to manipulate and cheat James Thompson. Mr. T doesn't
just get angry, he gets even.
In his unwavering quest for justice, Mr. Thompson hires a major conglomerate
specializing in sex slavery to kidnap Cathy and her sister and turn them into
sex slaves. Cathy's sister gets off easy being turned into a mindless twit
(i.e., "a beautiful virgin sex slave") who becomes happily married trophy
wife of her benign master. Cathy, on the other hand, gets trapped inside the
body of Candy never mind, you'll have to read the story to understand all
the intricacies.
Sex slavery stories usually come across to me as really stupid, because they
require the reader to take seriously so many assumptions that can't possibly
be true. However, I really liked this one. I found the activities described
in this one to be so outlandish that the story became good clean fun.
Ratings for "Cathy's Sentence"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Sharing Kim" by E. Z. Riter (ezriter@hotmail.com).
Kim in Jason pledge their love and fidelity to each other and get married.
But before the wedding, Jason specifies that fidelity has a unique definition
in his life. It means that he will fuck no one except Kim and the women who
belong to his best friend Dave. And Dave has to be allowed to fuck Kim.
Kim agrees to let Jason have sex with Dave's women, but she balks at letting
Dave have her. She wants to be Jason's woman, and his alone. The main tension
in the story is whether Kim will give in and let Dave fuck her, how it will
happen, and what the reactions of Jason and Kim will be.
The idea initially sounded silly to me, but the author built a good case. The
dialogue makes the complex relationship seem believable. I found the story to
be sexy; and by the end I could almost see Kim's point of view almost.
I have thought about this story more than I do about most. I figure I owe
that to an author who has busted his ass to write a 42-page story that kept
my attention and interest all the way. The question I asked myself was what
would I do if the man I loved made this demand of me. After a whole lot of
thought, I decided I'd tell him to go fuck himself, and I'd look for a better
man. I couldn't love a man who showed me this lack of respect. I hasten to
add that I would also walk away from a religion that required an act of faith
like this it would seem to be a degradation of my personality. I think the
decision this woman is forced to make is essentially the same thing a mind
fuck that I think would deny my basic human dignity. I suppose that might
just be my personal hangup; but maybe it's also a desirable aspect of the
story an ambivalence that just has to be there in order to make the story
good. I still liked the story a lot.
Ratings for "Sharing Kim"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
"Alarms and Excursions" by Vickie Morgan (artemis55@hotmail.com).
The fire alarm sounds in the middle of the night, and the narrator has to
vacate the old hotel, in the company of all the elderly clientele.
Fortunately, there is a flaming red-haired beauty who catches his eye and
eventually his cum.
The best aspect of this story was the author's vivid description of the
chemistry between the lovers.
Ratings for "Alarms and Excursions"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
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Guest Reviews:
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"Night of Privilege" by Kellis (kellis@dhp.com). Guest Review by BillyG
(hayden@mindless.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=532466671
A problem I've experienced with many historical stories doesn't surface with
a "Night of Privilege." Too often the so-called historical tales set the
story in a period with no further embellishment, relying on the reader's
image of the era to provide the story's texture. The author Kellis employs
considerable skill in setting his own ambiance.
The time is uncertain -- likely Middle Ages -- and the place we presume to be
feudal Europe. It's the custom then that the baron has a "night of
privilege" where he intimately samples the charms of a bride-to-be. Because
there's so much riding on the success of this union, and, as it turns out,
the virginity of the would-be bride, the mother quizzes her daughter on her
sexual status. Surprise. She's not a virgin. But this is a "fixable"
problem.
Kellis paints a rich and detailed series of images in this story, but there's
more than just appearance to this account. The complexity ratchets up in a
surprising fashion and a series of little disclosures and insights lead the
reader to unanticipated ending.
It's a lush and rich adventure more than a sexually provocative tale. I
enjoyed it immensely.
Ratings for "Night of Privilege"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Molly" by Theodore Spoonbender (theodore@spoonbender.demon.co.uk). Review by
Nick: e-mail nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=526508113
Here we have a Spoonbender story in which nobody gets raped and, indeed, the
heroine actually keeps her chastity intact - well almost. I do hope I haven't
given too much away and that I haven't put off TS fans who 'like that sort of
thing'.
I searched Uther's story codes for 'bodice-ripper' in order to find out what
I was in for, but failed to find it. I therefore had to read blind, uncertain
as to whether my delicate sensibilities would be offended - quite likely
since I have steered clear of Barbara Cartland for precisely this reason. In
my view 'bodice rippers' are a carbuncle on the face of writing and should be
put up against the wall and shot along with peadophilia, rape and snuff.
Anyway, down to business. I read this on the train and it certainly sped up
the journey time. If anyone has ever read George MacDonald Fraser's
'Flashman' books, this reminded me of his style. OK, it may be a tenuous
link. It was just that I felt the same juices flowing as I did when I read
his stuff. The heroine, Molly, undergoes many trials and tribulations at the
hands of various 'men in her life' before she meets Mr. Right. The ending is
happy, and so, in this kind of story, it should be.
Of course there are unpleasant historical echoes, and one is left with the
uncomfortable feeling that for most women in her position the ending would
not have been remotely happy. The PC in me obliges me to say that; but hell,
this is fiction. Read and enjoy!
Points for 'Molly' are:
Athena (Technical) 9.5 (there were one or two awkward points, but don't let
that worry you)
Aphrodite (Plot/Character) 10
Appeal to Nick 9.5 (ref. comments re Barbara Cartland)
"One Good Turn..." by Omega13 (omega13@my-deja.com). Guest Review by Mary
Jorsay Gandmar (maryjg@finebody.com).
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=541444219
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=541444266
This is a first-rate stroke story. It's well told, the sex is super-charged,
and there's plenty of it. The author is a business consultant, winding up an
assignment. An employee, grateful for a positive report, wants to thank him
and contrives to entice two office bimbettes, Trish and Melissa, by leading
them to believe there's something to be had by sleeping with the author. The
ladies arrange a 'farewell' party that's essentially a mιnage-a-trois. Much
sex is had by all. Now there's an element of violence (though not sadism)
here, some bondage and shackling and the sex itself is pretty raw and
unfeeling. The responses are entirely physical, there's no emotional
contrivance. The story is sustained by being utterly raw. The writing's good,
the coding is accurate, but I wish it had been better proofed.
ATHENA (Technical quality) : 9
VENUS (Plot & Character) : 8
MARY : (Appeal to Reviewer) : 9
"Kelly and Her Little Sister" by Typoman (Wrenchman@earthlink.net)
Guest Review by BillyG (hayden@mindless.com)
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=512471783
It's been said that you have one chance to make a good first impression.
That's true with the written word. No matter the content, the appearance,
the formatting of a story is either inviting or off-putting. For example,
the stories without paragraphs are deadly. They're often far too much work
to be inviting. Almost as bad are the formatting styles that allow for no
paragraph indentation or spaces between. Similarly, sloppy use of quotes
serve to slow down the flow of dialog, for we spend too much time trying to
figure who is saying what.
"Kelly and Her Little Sister" suffers from these formatting problems. Had I
not agreed to review the story, I'd have put it aside unread near the outset.
One final complaint before getting into the story: There are a good number
of punctuation mistakes -- those of oversight more than ignorance. It
wouldn't have taken much effort to grammatically clean up the story.
At a superficial level, the story is one of dominance and submission as
played out by an older man and a younger woman. Thrown into this stew is the
younger woman's fourteen-year-old sister. The D&S plot line staggers a bit
initially, for it's not clear just who's the top and who's the bottom. The
ambivalence of the D&S roles fades in contrast to the mixed message about the
morality of involving the little sister. Pro forma stances are espoused and
promptly forgotten as the teenaged girl is pulled into the menage a trios.
The characters remain too blurred for any identifiable definition. The sex,
detailed as it is presented, fails to excite largely because it remains
formulaic and out of focus in light of the contradictory positions of
morality. Trying to be too many things, it fails at being any one thing.
Ratings for "Kelly and Her Little Sister"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 8
BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 6
"Jesse" by Shon Richards (lordshon@aol.com). Guest review by Dave Myers.
http://www.deja.com/getdoc.xp?AN=521233983
There's a famous Zen Koan that asks, "Does a dog have Bhuddha nature?" The
answer is basically no. And it's "No" here too.
At its core, this is not very much of a sex story. It can hardly be called
"sexy" either. This has nothing to do with the main theme, which is
punishment and domination. Believe it or not, this is a story about
dog-fucking. No, that doesn't mean beastiality. And it's not furry sex. It's
a dog-on-dog encounter that the author sought to capture in this short,
science-fiction edged story.
The idea is inventive enough. The dom story embedded in all this isn't too
bad, but I have to say it wasn't that great either. It didn't help me get
over the subject matter, which just wasn't enticing. I'm sure it *is*
possibly to write a story with this theme that is a lot of fun, and sexy.
I've seen furry stuff that I really did like a lot. This time, it falls very
flat.
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