Message-ID: <20884eli$9903310438@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: <URL:http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20884.txt> From: Lee Vine <leevine@pair.com> Subject: Rogue Reviews Digest No. 34 - March 30, 1999 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: <usenet-approval@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Story-Submission: <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Original-Message-ID: <37018546.698FEAE1@pair.com> X-Is-Review: yes Rogue Reviews Digest No. 34 - March 30, 1999 NOTICE If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not read what follows. CONTENTS Mailing List Information Ratings Note Reviews "Archaeology" by Gordie D "The Call of Desire" by DG "Consanguinity" by MichaelD38 "Donna's Summer Golfing Vacation" by Heatheranne "Flash" by Waldo "Flight to Heaven" by Richard B "The Mating Game" by Joanna de Brito "The Shaver" by Al Steiner ***** MAILING LIST INFORMATION I send my reviews individually, when I finish them, to the Sex Stories Discussion List. If you are interested in joining there is a form for doing so on my home page. * Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/rogue-reviews/ * E-Mail - santiago@switchboardmail.com ***** RATINGS Part 1. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS SCORE = AROUSAL SCORE + STORY SCORE AROUSAL SCORE 0 Not 1 Barely 2 A Little 3 Somewhat 4 Very 5 Extremely STORY SCORE 0 This barely resembles a story 1 Definitely lacking, but its possible it has a redeeming quality 2 Effort is evident, but I have some problems with this story 3 Nothing exceptional, but on the other hand there are no major flaws 4 Well crafted, but is missing something, or something does not work entirely 5 Beautifully crafted, it does not seem to be missing anything Part 2. SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS Not Good = This was a waste of my time, don't bother reading it Good = This is a good attempt, but I don't recommend it Very Good = If you have the time or like this variety of story then I recommend this story, otherwise I would go with something that I rate as Excellent or Outstanding Excellent = I recommend that you read this story, and I really liked it, but it did not give me the same feeling that an outstanding story does. Outstanding = This story was not only enjoyable, but it also gave me a special feeling that I cannot describe ~~~ Note that there is not necessarily a direct correlation between the objective analysis and the subjective analysis. On the other hand the terms objective and subjective as I have used them are relative and not absolute terms. In other words the objective analysis is more objective than the subjective one, and vice versa. This new system may not work in the long run, but for the moment I am going with it. This still does not get to one of MichaelD38's criticisms, which is how much better is an Outstanding than an Excellent, and Excellent than a Very Good, etc. To be perfectly honest I'm not sure myself. All I know is that I like Outstanding stories better than Excellent ones, etc. I have a hard time quantifying "like", or "love" for that matter. I can tell you if I liked something better than something else. I can tell you why I did. I can't put on a number on it however and say that I liked it 20% more or twice as much. That just does not work for me. BTW you may have noticed that I have dropped Grudgingly Good from my rating system. That rating really represented a case where I did not like a story, but only because I was revolted or disgusted by the subject matter. With the new system I'll just say under the Subjective Analysis that a story was Not Good. The Arousal score is somewhat subjective, so that score may suffer, but I think that I can recognize good writing even when it revolts me. ***** REVIEWS ----- Rogue Review No. 333 - March 20, 1999 The Mating Game by Joanna de Brito M/F Length: 5,000 words Objective Analysis: 7 (out of 10) Arousal: 2 (out of 5) Story: 5 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Excellent SUMMARY Wolf is one of the few remaining humans left alive. Like the rest of his kind, he is kept in a zoo. Judy, a mind, is in charge of looking after him at the London Zoo. When Lois is brought in from the Chicago Zoo, to mate with Wolf, things do not go exactly as planned by the minds. COMMENTARY This story is not all that arousing. There is a scene or two that perked me up, but for the most part I was more entertained by the plot than I was by the sex. It is a beautifully written story. I liked all three of the characters. I liked how the story begins with out much of an explanation. As it evolves the author does reveal more and more, but does so primarily through indirect references. It reminded me of the classic Star Trek two parter, The Cage. This is one of the more creative stories that I have read on ASS* in a long time. It kept me entertained and thinking throughout. I am partial to sci-fi, but this is much more than just another science- fiction story, it is also a commentary. The commentary is not explicit, but its definitely there. On the down side I did not find this story very arousing, despite the fact that it is well written. Normally I would not put such a story on my A-list, but this one is exceptional and that's why I gave this story an Excellent, under Subjective Analysis. LINKS The Mating Game * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=454492318&fmt=raw * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20521.txt ----- Rogue Review No. 334 - March 21, 1999 Archaeology by Gordie D M/F Length: 3,500 words Objective Analysis: 8 (out of 10) Arousal: 4 (out of 5) Story: 4 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Excellent SUMMARY Jack and Emily, a married couple, are the advanced party for an archaeological dig in Kenya. They don't do much digging, but they do seem to enjoy themselves. COMMENTARY I found this story to be very arousing. There is not all that much actual sex in it, but I found the intimacies that Emily and Jack shared to be quite arousing. It has its graphic moments, but for the most part this story is more romantic than it is graphic. This is a well written story. The author uses flashbacks to give background information on the main characters. I think this is done rather effectively. I liked both the characters. I liked the authors descriptions of their interactions, both verbal and nonverbal. On the down side the story is a bit short on plot. This is a wonderful story. It is told with a light touch. I found it very arousing. It is an Excellent story. LINKS Archaeology * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=454493872&fmt=raw * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20529.txt ----- Rogue Review No. 335 - March 22, 1999 Donna's Summer Golfing Vacation by Heatheranne F/M, Teen Length: 9,000 words Objective Analysis: 7 (out of 10) Arousal: 3 (out of 5) Story: 4 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Good SUMMARY Donna breaks up with her boyfriend, goes to work with her distant cousin, and gets some golf lessons. In the process of doing all this, she also help her cousin get off when his wife isn't very obliging, and teaches her golf instructor a thing or two about how to please her sexually. COMMENTARY This story is somewhat arousing. The sex happens, but it seems a bit gratuitous. In other words it does not seem to be tied all that strongly to the plot. The story could stand on its own without the sex. The story is well written. The characters aren't too deep and the plot isn't very complex, but the story does have a nice flow to it. At times it almost seems to flow too smoothly. I think I would have preferred to see Donna having a harder time overcoming some of the obstacles that are thrown in her path. I was somewhat aroused by this story, but for the most part this story was just a bit too soft for me. After the scene where she helps her cousin out, which is relatively early in the story, Donna does not seem to be challenged at all. That is why I have given this story a Good, under Subjective Analysis. LINKS Donna's Summer Golfing Vacation * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=456851036&fmt=raw [1/2] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=456851044&fmt=raw [2/2] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20669.txt [1/2] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20670.txt [2/2] ----- Rogue Review No. 336 - March 23, 1999 The Shaver by Al Steiner F/F Length: 7,100 words Objective Analysis: 8 (out of 10) Arousal: 4 (out of 5) Story: 4 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Excellent SUMMARY Jen gets her pussy shaved by Charlie, her sister-in-law. COMMENTARY This is a very arousing story. It was the combination of Jen's horniness, which is evident before her sister-in-law enters the story, and her trepidation, which becomes a factor once Charlie offers to shave her cunt, that made this story very arousing for me. I think it also helped that the author took the time to set the story up. The story is well written. Both characters seem realistic enough. They aren't extremely deep, but the author does do a good job of showing the internal turmoil that Jen experiences when she finds herself aroused by Charlie's handiwork. The plot follows a logical course and flows smoothly. Having said all this, I should also mention that this is a stroke story. Jen's life does not seem to revolve around sex, but the story certainly does. I really enjoyed this story. It is well put together and rather arousing. It definitely makes my A-list. LINKS The Shaver * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=455161572&fmt=raw * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20583.txt ----- Rogue Review No. 337 - March 24, 1999 Consanguinity by MichaelD38 M/F, Teen, * Length: 16,500 words Objective Analysis: 8 (out of 10) Arousal: 3 (out of 5) Story: 5 (out of 5) Stroke: No Subjective Analysis: Excellent SUMMARY Carolyn brings Shelby, her roommate, home with her from school. Will falls for Shelby and trouble ensues. COMMENTARY I found this story to be somewhat arousing. The sex scenes are arousing, but for the most part I found the scenes where Shelby and Will are getting to know each other more arousing. This is a very well composed story. The characters seem realistic. They are all dynamic. The plot is well paced. I thought the author did a good job showing how Will and Carolyn's relationship suffers after Shelby enters Will's life. I was hoping for a different ending, but the one the author provided seems logical, although it is bittersweet. This is an Excellent story. There are some arousing scenes, but for the most it is the author's skill in relating the tale that make it Excellent. It is possible that showing the sex isn't necessary to the plot. On the other hand, showing Shelby and Will in the sack probably made the ending that much more bittersweet. This is not stroke material, so if that's what you are interested in then I advise you look elsewhere. LINKS Consanguinity * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=457915141&fmt=raw [1/5] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=457915131&fmt=raw [2/5] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=457915121&fmt=raw [3/5] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=457915136&fmt=raw [4/5] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=457915127&fmt=raw [5/5] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20735.txt [1/5] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20733.txt [2/5] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20731.txt [3/5] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20734.txt [4/5] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20732.txt [5/5] MichaelD38's Bibliography * http://www.bitbard.pair.com/library/michaeld/ ----- Rogue Review No. 338 - March 26, 1999 The Call of Desire by DG M/F, M/F/F Length: 5,700 words Objective Analysis: 10 (out of 10) Arousal: 5 (out of 5) Story: 5 (out of 5) Stroke: Yes Subjective Analysis: Excellent SUMMARY DG is married to Cindy. DG wants to have phone sex with Desire, a phone sex professional who liked one of his stories. Cindy lets him, but then insists on listening in. COMMENTARY This story is extremely arousing. There is a lot of sex in it, and not much build up before the sex, but I still found it extremely arousing. I think it helped that the author only includes those graphic details that are necessary and leaves the rest to the reader's imagination. This is a stroke story, but it is a very well written stroke story. The characters seem realistic. I enjoyed the dialogue. It helps to define the characters. The author also uses it to inject some humor in the story. The plot is well paced. Its basically divided in two. In the first part DG proposes that he have phone sex with Desire. In the second part he actually does. This sounds awfully simple, but it works. I think the author's handling of his characters is what impressed me the most. OK, lets see, uh, I really, really, really liked this story? Its arousing and its well written? Yeah, that about sums it up. Does it make my A-list? Ay, if you can't figure that out then look at what I scribbled under Subjective Analysis, above. OK? LINKS The Call of Desire * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=316371083&fmt=raw * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/7340.txt DG's Story Page * http://baird.pair.com/dg.htm ----- Rogue Review No. 339 - March 29, 1999 Flash by Waldo M/F, TG, Transform, MC, NC Length: 36,800 words CHAPTERS 1 - 4 Objective Analysis: 7 (out of 10) Arousal: 2 (out of 5) Story: 5 (out of 5) Stroke: No Subjective Analysis: Very Good CHAPTERS 5 - 9 Objective Analysis: - (out of 10) Arousal: - (out of 5) Story: - (out of 5) Stroke: - Subjective Analysis: Not Good SUMMARY Captain Browning, a crusty combat veteran is stationed at Rocket Base Z-Alpha. He receives a call distress from Corporal Joseph Hurley, ship's cook and only survivor of a collision between a spaceship and a meteor. Capt. Browning sends a message to Flash Gordon and Dr. Hans Zarkoff informing them of the incident and asking them to rescue the cook. They do so. Once in the cramped quarters of Explorer 1, Cpl. Hurley learns that there is also a woman on board, Dale Arden. The woman is actually Flash Gordon. Dr. Zarkoff explains to Hurley how it came to pass that every 29 hours Flash is transformed into Dale Arden and then after another 29 hours back into himself. Hurley has a hard time dealing with the reality of the situation, seeing as that he is having withdrawal symptoms from taking an anti-arousal drug and that he has not seen a woman in months. At first Dale/Flash refuses to consider the cook's advances. She begins to weaken after Dr. Zarkoff informs her that having sex, something that Dale/Flash has not done as a woman, would probably improve her mental health. Meanwhile, the real Dale Arden is the prisoner of Ming the Merciless. Flash/Dale is determined to rescue her and cure his condition. Capt. Browning is more than willing to help. COMMENTARY Chapters 1 - 4 So far this story is not wildly arousing. It has its moments. The fact that both Hurley and Dale/Flash are attempting to resist temptation makes the story a bit more compelling, and for me at least, more arousing. There is some sex play in the first half of the story, but for the most part there is a lot more story than there is sex. This is a very well written story. At times the characters seem a bit too whole wheat, but then again I think that was part of the desired effect. The story is nicely paced and seems to follow a logical progression. There are some spelling errors, but they are few, relative to the length of the story. If you don't care for transgender stories then this may not be your kettle of fish. There are not that many scenes that I found arousing, but it is a good read. For right know it is on my B-list. Chapters 5 - 9 In the second half of this story the author introduces an element that I really don't care for, mind control. I don't think that I can objectively judge the second half of this story. Mind control stories are a real turn off for me. I enjoy seeing how characters react to given situations, but once a character has no "free will" they cease to be a person and become an object instead. What I said about the first four chapters stands. If you like mind control stories, then maybe you'll like this one. Personally I was turned off by it. I suppose that it is also worth mentioning that I read this story in two sittings. I wrote the review of the first four chapters before I read the last five chapters. Otherwise, I probably would not have written as much about the first four chapters as I did. LINKS Flash * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=423894159&fmt=raw [1/10] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=423892523&fmt=raw [2/10] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=423892516&fmt=raw [3/10] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=423894163&fmt=raw [4/10] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=423892533&fmt=raw [5/10] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=423892540&fmt=raw [6/10] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=423892553&fmt=raw [7/10] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=423892547&fmt=raw [8/10] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=423892561&fmt=raw [9/10] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=423892530&fmt=raw [10/10] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/18128.txt [1/10] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/18120.txt [2/10] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/18119.txt [3/10] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/18129.txt [4/10] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/18123.txt [5/10] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/18124.txt [6/10] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/18126.txt [7/10] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/18125.txt [8/10] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/18127.txt [9/10] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/18122.txt [10/10] Waldo's Bibliography * http://bitbard.pair.com/library/waldo/ ----- Rogue Review No. 340 - March 30, 1999 Flight to Heaven by Richard B. M/F Length: 6,000 words Objective Analysis: 9 (out of 10) Arousal: 5 (out of 5) Story: 4 (out of 5) Stroke: Yes Subjective Analysis: Excellent SUMMARY Jack and Mary, his mother-in-law, crash land a small airplane in the Mojave Desert. Mary is at least twice Jack's age and has been divorced for quite some time. In the end, two people who are related by marriage end up sharing intimacies that two such people normally would not share. COMMENTARY I found this story to be extremely arousing. The author takes his time and sees to it that Jack is properly tested before he finally gives into his carnal desires. I prefer a story in which the author allows the tension to build between two or more characters. This is such a story. This is also a well written story. The plot is not very complex. The action revolves around what happens in the 24 hours after the plane crash, but it is well paced and seems to follow a relatively logical progression. The characters are not extremely deep, but they are more than adequate. This is a stroke story after all. I found this story to be extremely arousing and well written. Personally I find myself turned on by these sorts of stories. That does not mean that I like every incest or in-law sex story that I read, but that I am probably a bit more forgiving when it comes to judging them. My objective judgment of the story still stands, it is very well written. My subjective judgment is that this is an Excellent story. LINKS Flight to Heaven * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=456507740&fmt=raw ***** 3/30/99 -- Lee Vine * E-Mail - santiago@switchboardmail.com * Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/rogue-reviews/ -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> | <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | <http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/>----<http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/faq.html>