Message-ID: <20385eli$9903080453@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: <URL:http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20385.txt> From: leevine@pair.com Subject: Rogue Reviews Digest No. 32 - March 7, 1999 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: <usenet-approval@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Story-Submission: <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Original-Message-Id: <E10Jflr-0006qY-00@winter.news.rcn.net> X-Is-Review: yes To: alt-sex-stories-moderated@moderators.isc.org Path: not-for-mail From: Lee Vine <leevine@pair.com> Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories.d Subject: Rogue Reviews Digest No. 32 - March 7, 1999 Date: Sun, 07 Mar 1999 10:48:20 -0500 Organization: Spam Be Gone Corp. Lines: 846 Message-ID: <36E29FC3.3B1B44E2@pair.com> Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit X-Trace: jiBJ41+6iBnwDZhwSmPK6sCyrl7+xcMIV9T2jzw0HME= X-Complaints-To: abuse@rcn.com NNTP-Posting-Date: 7 Mar 1999 15:47:15 GMT X-Mailer: Mozilla 4.05 [en] (Win95; I) Rogue Reviews Digest No. 32 - March 7, 1999 NOTICE If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not read what follows. CONTENTS Mailing List Information Ratings Note Reviews "Eight Is Enough: And Two's Not Bad, Either" by Uncle Mike "God's Great Plan" by Al Steiner "Planting the Seed of Intrigue" by Hawk Richards "Pure Strip Poker" by Mike CA "A Quick Bite to Eat" by B. Peale "Sharing a Bed for the Night" by J. Boswell "Sheila the Great" by Schulzie "StepSis with the Devilish Hands" by Schulzie "The Term Paper" by Billy G "Wildlife" by Lee Bido ***** MAILING LIST INFORMATION I send my reviews individually, when I finish them, to the Sex Stories Discussion List. If you are interested in joining there is a form for doing so on my home page. * Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/rogue-reviews/ * E-Mail - santiago@switchboardmail.com ***** RATINGS Okay folks, I am modifying my rating system once again. This due in part to MichaelD38's review of my reviews, and in part because I will never be satisfied that I can explain in a few words how good or bad a story is. What follows is the new system. If you are interested in reading MichaelD38's critique then here is the link: http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=449137636&fmt=raw It includes critiques of my reviews and of the reviews of others. Part 1. OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS SCORE = AROUSAL SCORE + STORY SCORE AROUSAL SCORE 0 Not 1 Barely 2 A Little 3 Somewhat 4 Very 5 Extremely STORY SCORE 0 This barely resembles a story 1 Definitely lacking, but its possible it has a redeeming quality 2 Effort is evident, but I have some problems with this story 3 Nothing exceptional, but on the other hand there are no major flaws 4 Well crafted, but is missing something, or something does not work entirely 5 Beautifully crafted, it does not seem to be missing anything Part 2. SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS Not Good = This was a waste of my time, don't bother reading it Good = This is a good attempt, but I don't recommend it Very Good = If you have the time or like this variety of story then I recommend this story, otherwise I would go with something that I rate as Excellent or Outstanding Excellent = I recommend that you read this story, and I really liked it, but it did not give me the same feeling that an outstanding story does. Outstanding = This story was not only enjoyable, but it also gave me a special feeling that I cannot describe ~~~ Note that there is not necessarily a direct correlation between the objective analysis and the subjective analysis. On the other hand the terms objective and subjective as I have used them are relative and not absolute terms. In other words the objective analysis is more objective than the subjective one, and vice versa. This new system may not work in the long run, but for the moment I am going with it. This still does not get to one of MichaelD38's criticisms, which is how much better is an Outstanding than an Excellent, and Excellent than a Very Good, etc. To be perfectly honest I'm not sure myself. All I know is that I like Outstanding stories better than Excellent ones, etc. I have a hard time quantifying "like", or "love" for that matter. I can tell you if I liked something better than something else. I can tell you why I did. I can't put on a number on it however and say that I liked it 20% more or twice as much. That just does not work for me. BTW you may have noticed that I have dropped Grudgingly Good from my rating system. That rating really represented a case where I did not like a story, but only because I was revolted or disgusted by the subject matter. With the new system I'll just say under the Subjective Analysis that a story was Not Good. The Arousal score is somewhat subjective, so that score may suffer, but I think that I can recognize good writing even when it revolts me. ***** REVIEWS ----- Rogue Review No. 316 - February 22, 1999 Planting the Seed of Intrigue by Hawk Richards M/F Length: 3,100 words Rating: Good Arousal Factor: Average Story Factor: Average SUMMARY Jimmy, the gardener, impregnates Catherine. COMMENTARY This story is bizarre. I was shaking my head as I finished reading it. On the one hand the sex was somewhat arousing. On the other I cannot figure for the life of me what was going through Mr. Richards' head when he wrote this story. It is not that it is badly written, it's just that it was not what I was expecting. If you want to read something different then try this, but don't say I didn't warn you. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19827.txt http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=442739087&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 317 - February 23, 1999 Eight is Enough: And Two's Not Bad, Either by Uncle Mike M/F, Teen, Inc Length: 8,900 words Rating: Excellent Arousal Factor: High Story Factor: High SUMMARY Tommy is fourteen years old and Elizabeth, his sister, is fifteen years old. What begins with a fairly innocent kiss develops into much more. COMMENTARY This is stroke material, but it is well written stroke material. The story is based on the television program "Eight is Enough". Unlike Tommy and Elizabeth, the other characters from the show only make token appearances. What makes this story work for me is that the author seems to have injected a bit of reality into it. Tommy and Elizabeth do not have tons of opportunities to get together; their large family tends to get in the way. I also like the pace of the story. It does not begin with brother and sister in the sack, but rather works up to it. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19930.txt http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=444527814&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 318 - February 25, 1999 The Term Paper by Billy G M/F, Teen Length: 4,500 words Rating: Excellent Arousal Factor: High Story Factor: High SUMMARY Billy and Jenny are working on a term paper together. The paper is for a class in 'Erotic Themes in Contemporary Theater'. COMMENTARY This story is a lot of fun. It is about foreplay more than it is about sex. That may turn some people off, but I like to think that there are an equal amount of people out there who will find this story very enjoyable. There isn't too much at stake in this story, but I could still feel the tension as Billy and Jenny began to disrobe. To a degree the story is about exploring possibilities, as much as it is about sex. LINKS The Term Paper * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20238.txt * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=448655236&fmt=raw Stories Written by Billy G * http://www.mrdouble.com/htm/raauthors/billyg.htm ----- Rogue Review No. 319 - February 27, 1999 God's Great Plan by Al Steiner m/F, Teen, Pedo Length: 5,300 words Objective Analysis: 8 (out of 10) Arousal: 4 (out of 5) Story: 4 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Very Good SUMMARY Jason spends some quality time with Sarah, his best friend's mother. She is breast feeding her newborn son and is feeling horny. COMMENTARY I enjoyed this story. It seems to have two things working for it, in my book. Number one is the fact that I found it arousing. The idea of losing my virginity to my best friend's mother, at the age of 13 sounds appealing. That does not mean that it gives me warm fuzzies though, just that I find it sexually exciting. The other thing that this story has working for it is humor. Sarah justifies their relationship by saying that (a) she is teaching him about "God's Great Plan", and (b) she has needs that her husband will not fulfill. Some Christian fundamentalists might feel that their toes got stepped on in the process, but I don't think that this story is too insensitive. It does not suggest scrapping everything and starting over from scratch. It does suggest that one should be more considerate of the needs of others as well as open to new ideas. While I enjoyed this story and felt that it was both arousing and well written, I still can't help but feel that there was something missing. Possibly it was some inconsistencies in Sarah's personality. I'm not sure. Anyhow, I gave this story a Very Good, which is the equivalent of putting it on my B list. If the plot sounds like one that particularly interests you or you have a lot of time on your hands, then I recommend this story, otherwise I would read something that I gave an Excellent or an Outstanding. I coded this story Pedo because Jason is only 13. LINKS God's Great Plan * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19839.txt * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=442739134&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 320 - February 27, 1999 Wildlife by Lee Bido M-solo, F-solo Length: 4,200 words Objective Analysis: 7 (out of 10) Arousal: 3 (out of 5) Story: 4 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Good SUMMARY Theo and Susan, coincidentally, decide to masturbate in the great outdoors. COMMENTARY I like the idea behind this story, but I think that the author missed something in the execution. It alternates between Susan and Theo, describing first what one is up to and then the other. It provides a certain amount of symmetry. I like that. Where I think the story falls short is that Theo and Susan seem to have no other function in life other than to masturbate. Believe it or not I think it would have made the story more arousing if the author had worked up to the sex, instead of more or less beginning with it. I gave this story a Good, under Subjective Analysis, because while it is a nice story, it is also a bit lacking. If there had been more to the plot or some build up before revealing why Susan and Theo were hiking in the hills of southern Indiana, then I might have given this story a Very Good. LINKS Wildlife * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=430807319&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 321 - February 28, 1999 A Quick Bite to Eat by B. Peale M/F, M/F/F, Exhib Length: 3,700 words Objective Analysis: 9 (out of 10) Arousal: 5 (out of 5) Story: 4 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Excellent SUMMARY Sara's husband talks about how she likes to "show him off" for other women to see. COMMENTARY Exhibitionism, if handled properly, is a wonderful element to have in a story. I think this author has done a great job with it. This is still just a stroke story, in my mind, but it is a very arousing stroke story. One thing in particular that I like about this story is the tension. The narrator gets a sexual thrill from being showed off, but at the same time he seems a bit apprehensive. Possibly this is because he is letting his wife decide how much he will be shown off. Another thing about this story that I like is that the plot has a few twists. It isn't too direct. I gave this story an Excellent, under Subjective Analysis, because I enjoyed it a lot. It was not special enough to rate an Outstanding, but I would definitely put it on my A-list of stories. I recommend that you read it. LINKS A Quick Bite to Eat * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19327.txt * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=436623692&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 322 (1) - March 1, 1999 Pure Strip Poker by MikeCA Chapters 1 - 3 Exhib, Voy Length: 25,000 words Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10) Arousal: 3 (out of 5) Story: 3 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Very Good SUMMARY Larry, an eighteen-year-old virgin, manages to get himself invited to a strip poker game. COMMENTARY There isn't any sex in the first three chapters of this story, but I still found them somewhat arousing. On a slightly different note, the story would probably flow more smoothly (and be more arousing) if it were not for the extreme amount of detail. The author seems to feel that it is necessary to describe every hand of poker that his characters play. It got to the point where I felt like I was watching a sporting event, rather than reading an erotic story. Some details are necessary to set the mood, but too many details result in the details dominating the story. It would also help if the story had been proofread a little more closely. Although, considering the length of the story there aren't all that many misspelled words. Despite finding the first three chapters only somewhat arousing and being distracted by the huge amount of detail I enjoyed them enough to give them a Very Good, under Subjective Analysis. This is probably because I liked the premise of the story. If you are looking for stroke material then I would advise you look elsewhere. Rogue Review No. 322 (2) - March 2, 1999 Pure Strip Poker by MikeCA Chapters 4 - 6 M/F, Exhib, Voy Length: 17,800 words Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10) Arousal: 3 (out of 5) Story: 3 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Very Good SUMMARY Larry participates in yet another strip poker game. His relationship with Mary continues to evolve. COMMENTARY There is very little sex in chapters 4 - 6, but I still found them somewhat arousing. As with the first three chapters I felt that the author focused a bit too much on the mechanics of the poker games. I did not find the glut of details quite as distracting, this time around; possibly because I expected them. These three chapters would also have been an easier read if they had been proofread more carefully. In some cases it was a matter of misspelled words. In others it was a matter of words being misplaced or verbs being in the wrong tense. Despite the fact that there is a little bit of sex in this story, it is still extremely tame, for ASS. I enjoyed this segment of this story about as much as I did the last one. The story has continued to develop. The author's depiction of Larry is realistic enough. It is not A-list material, but I am enjoying it enough to give it a Very Good. Rogue Review No. 322 (3) - March 3, 1999 Pure Strip Poker by MikeCA Chapters 7 - 9 M/F, Exhib, Voy Length: 16,700 words Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10) Arousal: 3 (out of 5) Story: 3 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Very Good SUMMARY Mary decides to organize a strip poker game. Larry and Mary both participate in the strip poker game. They also have a side bet going. COMMENTARY In chapters 7, 8, and 9 the story continues to develop. Some new characters are introduced. Mary learns something about Larry's background that she did not know before. I would not say that there is a lot of tension in this story, but there is some and I like it. I did not find the details of the poker games quite as distracting as I did in the first three chapters. This may be because the author is doing a better job working them into the story. It may also be because I have become accustomed to the author's style. I enjoyed these three chapters enough to give them a Very Good. It is nothing over the top. It is rather mild, but I enjoyed it. Rogue Review No. 322 (C) - March 3, 1999 Pure Strip Poker by MikeCA Chapters 1 - 9 M/F, Exhib, Voy Length: 59,500 words Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10) Arousal: 3 (out of 5) Story: 3 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Very Good COMMENTARY This is not the best story I have ever read, but I did enjoy it. It is long. I took three nights to read it all. I do not recommend trying to read this entire story in one sitting. The details of the poker games, if nothing else, will bog you down. The author definitely has an affinity for the mechanics of poker. I do wish that he had integrated the poker details with the rest of the story a bit more smoothly. There is nothing wrong with wanting to give the reader a feel for what the stakes are and how the game is played, but getting too technical can turn some people off. In all fairness to the author these are just the first nine chapters. >From his notes it appears that he is currently working on the next few chapters. The story may not be complete, but for the most part I believe it is both readable and enjoyable. LINKS Pure Strip Poker [Chapters 1 - 9] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20123.txt [1/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20124.txt [2/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20125.txt [3/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20126.txt [4/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20127.txt [5/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20128.txt [6/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20131.txt [7/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20129.txt [8/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20130.txt [9/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20132.txt [10/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20134.txt [11/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20135.txt [12/13] * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20133.txt [13/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446663572&fmt=raw [1/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446663580&fmt=raw [2/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665140&fmt=raw [3/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665148&fmt=raw [4/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665161&fmt=raw [5/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665154&fmt=raw [6/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665179&fmt=raw [7/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665167&fmt=raw [8/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665174&fmt=raw [9/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665187&fmt=raw [10/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665199&fmt=raw [11/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665205&fmt=raw [12/13] * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=446665193&fmt=raw [13/13] ----- Rogue Review No. 323 - March 6, 1999 StepSis with the Devilish Hands by Schulzie m/F/F, Teen, Exhib, Inc, Pedo Length: 3,200 words Objective Analysis: 6 (out of 10) Arousal: 3 (out of 5) Story: 3 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Good SUMMARY A man reflects on the first hand job he ever got. He was thirteen at the time. He got it from his sister. She was eighteen. COMMENTARY I found this story to be somewhat arousing. The buildup was better than the ending. The ending left me feeling a bit unsatisfied. For the most part this is a well written story. The only problem I had was with the flow of the plot. Everything seemed to be rolling along smoothly until the transition to the last scene. It was not smooth enough for me. There is also a character introduced in the last scene for no apparent reason. I think the story would have been better with out her. It left me wondering why she was even in the story in the first place. I did like the two main characters. They both seemed realistic, at least to the extent that the author described them. Due to what I felt was a let down at the end of this story I did not enjoy it enough to consider it A- or B-list material. It is still well enough written and has enough that I do like for me to say that it is a Good story. LINKS StepSis with the Devilish Hands * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15335.txt * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=391325070&fmt=raw Stories Written by Schulzie * http://www.mrdouble.com/htm/authors/schulzie.htm ----- Rogue Review No. 324 - March 6, 1999 Sheila the Great by Schulzie m/ffff, Teen, Exhib Length: 1,700 words Objective Analysis: 9 (out of 10) Arousal: 4 (out of 5) Story: 5 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Excellent SUMMARY A man reflecting on his teen years remembers the summer that Sheila, another teenager, taught him a game called Trust Me? COMMENTARY I found this story to be very arousing. If it had been a little longer I might have even said it was extremely arousing. I cannot find any faults with the story. I like the characters, but then the author does not spend too much time describing them. He did give enough details to get my imagination rolling in the right direction. They did seem realistic. There is not a whole lot to the plot, but what there is seems to flow together quite nicely. I really, really liked this story. The only problem I have with it, is that it is as short as it is. This is another way of saying that I wish that it had been longer, not that there was anything missing. Even though I wish it were longer, I still enjoyed it enough to consider it to be Excellent. LINKS Sheila the Great * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year97/6778.txt * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=310348816&fmt=raw Stories Written by Schulzie * http://www.mrdouble.com/htm/authors/schulzie.htm ----- Rogue Review No. 325 - March 7, 1999 Sharing a Bed for the Night by J. Boswell F/M, Inc Length: 5,200 words Objective Analysis: 9 (out of 10) Arousal: 4 (out of 5) Story: 5 (out of 5) Subjective Analysis: Excellent SUMMARY Rocky, Roxanne Chase, visits Denny, her son, on his 21st birthday. COMMENTARY I found this story to be very arousing. The author does a wonderful job building up to the sex. He does not jump into it from the get-go. Instead he has written a story which ends with sex, instead of being nothing but sex. Its not that hard to see where the story is leading, which can be bad, but the author nudges it along, rather than shove it in the reader's face, which is good. I think this is a very well written story. There was an occasional misspelled word. There were also three places in the text where a sentence is repeated for no apparent reason. While these errors could have been avoided, they occurred infrequently enough that they did not detract from my reading pleasure. I like how the author plotted the story. It has a nice, natural feeling flow. I like the main character, who is the only one you really get to know, and the tone the author has given her. This is definitely an A-list story, and I have given it an Excellent. LINKS Sharing a Bed for the Night * http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year97/6778.txt * http://search.dejanews.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=310348816&fmt=raw J. Boswell's Bibliography * http://www.bitbard.pair.com/library/boswell/ ***** 3/7/99 -- Lee Vine * E-Mail - santiago@switchboardmail.com * Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/rogue-reviews/ -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> | <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | <http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/>----<http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/faq.html>