Message-ID: <20153eli$9902220743@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: <URL:http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/20153.txt> From: Lee Vine <leevine@pair.com> Subject: Rogue Reviews Digest No. 31 - February 21, 1999 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Transfer-Encoding: 7bit Content-Type: text/plain; charset=us-ascii Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: <usenet-approval@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Story-Submission: <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Original-Message-ID: <36D04E05.CD71F1F4@pair.com> X-Is-Review: yes Rogue Reviews Digest No. 31 - February 21, 1999 NOTICE If you are easily offended, not of the required legal age, or material of an erotic nature is illegal where you are, then do not read what follows. CONTENTS Mailing List Information Ratings Note Reviews "Ballbuster" by E. Z. Riter "Coaching the Coach" by Losgud "Encore!" by Sundance "The Gallery" by Prufrock54 "Locksmiths" by Uther Pendragon "The Man Who Ate Women" by DG "The Needle and the Dungeon" by MichaelD38 "Stepsister, Stepsister" by Thor4u "Theresa the Elder" by Al Steiner "A Valentine Story" by Ashley ***** MAILING LIST INFORMATION I send my reviews individually, when I finish them, to the Sex Stories Discussion List. If you are interested in joining there is a form for doing so on my home page. * Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/rogue-reviews/ * E-Mail - santiago@switchboardmail.com ***** RATINGS In order from best to worst I rate stories as follows: Outstanding Excellent Very Good Good Grudgingly Good Not Good The "Outstanding", "Excellent", "Very Good", and "Good" ratings indicate, to varying degrees, that I like the story. The "Grudgingly Good" rating indicates that I think the story is well written, but that I find some of the elements in the story so disturbing that if I were to review the story based solely on my personal tastes I would give it a "Not Good" rating. The "Not Good" rating indicates that I do not like the story. ----- Arousal Factor - This is a measurement of how arousing I found a story to be. Story Factor - This is a measurement of how good I found a story to be, devoid of whether there is a lot of sex in it or not. In determining the story factor I take into consideration the plot, the characters, and other more technical aspects, such as spelling and grammar. Possible values for Arousal and Story Factor are, in ascending order: Nonexistent, Low, Average, High, Ultra ***** REVIEWS ----- Rogue Review No. 306 - February 8, 1999 Encore! by Sundance M/F Length: 13,100 words Rating: Very Good Arousal Factor: Average Story Factor: Average SUMMARY Josh runs into his old girlfriend when he returns to his hometown for Christmas. COMMENTARY This is a nice story. There is more romance than there is sex. There is nothing extreme about the sex. If you want a stroke story, then I advise you look elsewhere. Other than misspelling the last name of a professional boxer, this is a very well written story. It is well paced and not too predictable. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19740.txt http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=441610675&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 307 - February 9, 1999 Ballbuster by E. Z. Riter M/F, B&D Length: 4,700 words Rating: Outstanding Arousal Factor: High Story Factor: High SUMMARY Ellen wants Jack back, but he will only come back if it is on his terms. COMMENTARY This story sizzles. It is hot, hot, hot! There is not much actual sex in it, but I still found it very arousing. I loved the interplay between Jack and Ellen. E. Z. has done a wonderful job creating tension in this story. It worked for me. There is some bondage and discipline in this story, but I don't think that there is too much or that it is too extreme. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19797.txt http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=442366318&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 308 - February 10, 1999 Coaching the Coach by Losgud F/M Length: 7,200 words Rating: Very Good Arousal Factor: Average Story Factor: High SUMMARY Linda's coach wants to fuck her. She gives him what he wants, but things don't go exactly as he planned. COMMENTARY I really liked the first half of this story. I found it extremely arousing. This was despite the fact that there isn't any sex in it. The second half was another story. >From the outset it was clear that Linda doesn't really like her coach. It was not until she got him into her apartment that it became clear to me that she wasn't about to change her mind. So basically I went through the first half of the story thinking that if she is going to sleep with him, it must be because she wants to, and in a way I guess she did, but it wasn't for the sorts of reasons that I would hope she would want to. Put another way, her reasons for sleeping with him are anything but romantic. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/18734.txt http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=435485041&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 309 - February 11, 1999 Theresa the Elder by Al Steiner m/F, Teen Length: 6,400 words Rating: Excellent Arousal Factor: High Story Factor: High SUMMARY Mark helps Theresa, his older brother's girlfriend, take care of Greg, his older brother, after he has passed out drunk. This good deed does not go unrewarded. COMMENTARY This story is about how Mark got to boink his older brother's girlfriend. It is easy enough to botch a story such as this. All you have to do is begin the story with Mark and Theresa in bed, or at the very least have them in the sack by the beginning of the third sentence. I am happy to report that Mr. Steiner has taken a different approach. He lets the story develop on its own and does not seem to force it at all. The personalities of the characters seem plausible. The plot is well paced. The sex is arousing. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19733.txt http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=441305056&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 310 - February 14, 1999 Stepsister, Stepsister by Thor4u M/F, Inc? Length: 10,400 words Rating: Good Arousal Factor: Average Story Factor: Average SUMMARY Michael and Sherry's decision to move from Texas to Colorado brings him closer to his step-sisters, Helen and Kristi, both physically and emotionally. COMMENTARY This story is too sex-heavy and story-light to suit my tastes. I also don't believe that this is incest. Michael did not grow up with Helen and Kristi. They did not become step-siblings until they were in their thirties. In all fairness to the author, he does take the time to set the scene and does not begin the story with Michael's cock buried in either Helen or Kristi's pussy. It is possible that my lack of zeal for this story has something to do with the way the author/narrator introduces the female characters, by describing them physically, to a tee. LINKS http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=440693542&fmt=raw [1/4] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=440696230&fmt=raw [2/4] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=441842202&fmt=raw [3/4] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=441842532&fmt=raw [4/4] ----- Rogue Review No. 311 - February 14, 1999 The Gallery by Prufrock54 M/F Length: 5,500 words Rating: Good Arousal Factor: Low Story Factor: Average SUMMARY A nameless, male narrator describes how he met Karen, who inadvertently modeled for a sculpture that he is very taken by. COMMENTARY What this story has going for it, is the fact that the author realizes that there is more to writing an arousing story than just sex. On the other hand, I did not find this story very arousing. I also would have liked to have seen more dialogue and less description. If you are looking for something romantic, this might be something for you. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19798.txt http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=442366325&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 312 - February 15, 1999 A Valentine Story by Ashley f/F/M, Teen, Inc Length: 3,400 words Rating: Very Good Arousal Factor: High Story Factor: Average SUMMARY Ashley gets an erotic massage from Erica, a hired masseuse. The massage is a Valentine's Day present from her father. COMMENTARY This is your basic stroke story, with a little bit of incest thrown in on the side. I think the author handled it quite well. I found it very arousing. The author does a good job of building up to the sex. If you don't like incest stories, then you may not like this story. On the other hand, this story does go light on the incest. Ashley and her dad don't actually "do it". This story is part of a series of stories about Ashley and her dad. While I haven't read any of the other stories it is apparent from reading this one that there are other stories where daughter and pops "prove their love to each other". LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19808.txt http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=442366313&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 313 - February 16, 1999 The Man Who Ate Women by DG M/F Length: 4,500 words Rating: Excellent Arousal Factor: High Story Factor: High SUMMARY Steve loves to eat pussy. At a party one night he agrees to eat every pussy that plants itself on his face. COMMENTARY I enjoyed this story quite a bit. DG has written a tale that is arousing, but the way it begins and ends make it seem more than just erotic. It actually seemed somewhat realistic. To be honest when I first saw the title I almost went right past this story. It sounded just a bit too direct. It also made me think of cannibalism. I'm glad I did read this story. It was very entertaining. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year99/19875.txt http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=444217768&fmt=raw ----- Rogue Review No. 314 - February 18, 1999 Locksmiths by Uther Pendragon M/F, Teen Length: 9,800 words Rating: Very Good Arousal Factor: Average Story Factor: High SUMMARY On Valentine's Day Dan and Lori reflect on the past while Cheryl, their daughter, is out on a date. COMMENTARY This is an intelligently written story. It is about the past as much as it is about the present. I think the author shifts back and forth between the two, past and present, quite effectively. Another technique that Mr. Pendragon employs is shifting the point of view between Dan and Lori. Most of the story consists of flashbacks, so by alternating the point of view between husband and wife, we get to see not only how Dan remembers things, but also how Lori does. If you are looking for stroke material then this might not be the best choice. If you are looking for something more romantic then I think you should enjoy this. LINKS http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=443916151&fmt=raw [1/2] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=444210404&fmt=raw [2/2] ----- Rogue Review No. 315 (1) - February 19, 1999 The Needle and the Dungeon by MichaelD38 Part 1 of 3 F/M, F/F, Teen, BDSM Length: 20,600 words Rating: Excellent Arousal Factor: High Story Factor: Ultra SUMMARY Ashley is curious about "deviant" sex. David has built a virtual reality device. The device is designed specifically for sexual experimentation. It allows Ashley try quite a few things out that she would have been too afraid to try in real life. COMMENTARY So far I really like this story. Whether the last two thirds of the story are as good as the first one third is another matter. I like both Ashley and David. Both seem to be seeking something through experimenting with the virtual reality devices. Their lives are incomplete. They need something more, but are not quite sure where to find it. Then again, I might just be seeing things. The supporting cast is just as well drawn as the main characters. If I were to single out one of them, it would have to be Jasmine. She is the artificial intelligence that runs David's virtual reality machines. She is only a computer, but she exhibits some behaviors that make her seem like more than just a machine. Read the author's warning at the beginning of the story. It should give you an idea if this is something that might squick you. I highly recommend what I have read so far. It is entertaining, arousing, and thought provoking. I cannot think of a better combination. On the other hand I can accept that some people might be revolted by some of the scenes in this story. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15382.txt [1/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15387.txt [2/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15386.txt [3/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15383.txt [4/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15384.txt [5/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15385.txt [6/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392351187&fmt=raw [1/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392354600&fmt=raw [2/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392354597&fmt=raw [3/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392354580&fmt=raw [4/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392354587&fmt=raw [5/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392354593&fmt=raw [6/6] Rogue Review No. 315 (2) - February 20, 1999 The Needle and the Dungeon by MichaelD38 Part 2 of 3 F/M, Teen, Caution Length: 17,200 words Rating: Very Good Arousal Factor: Average Story Factor: High SUMMARY Ashley and David begin to develop a special relationship. Ashley finally tells her parents about what she has been doing and where she has been. Their reactions are not very supportive. COMMENTARY There is more plot development in this part of the story than there is anything else. There aren't any significant characters introduced. Everything pretty much grows out of what MichaelD38 set up in Part 1. It does seem that in this segment the story shifts from one that is solely about personal exploration and sexual experimentation, to one that is also about two people growing together. Ashley is still the focus of the story, but David seems to become an important part of her life. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15453.txt [1/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15448.txt [2/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15449.txt [3/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15452.txt [4/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15451.txt [5/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15450.txt [6/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392685232&fmt=raw [1/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392685208&fmt=raw [2/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392685212&fmt=raw [3/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392685225&fmt=raw [4/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392685221&fmt=raw [5/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=392685216&fmt=raw [6/6] Rogue Review No. 315 (3) - February 21, 1999 The Needle and the Dungeon by MichaelD38 Part 3 of 3 F/M, F/F, Teen, Caution Length: 17,900 words Rating: Excellent Arousal Factor: Average Story Factor: High SUMMARY Despite being pregnant and against David's wishes, Ashley attempts to complete the most difficult virtual reality program that he has built. COMMENTARY This segment wraps up the loose ends that were left exposed at the end of the last segment. While there are some arousing scenes, I found this third of the story to be more like the second one than the first. In other words it was not about sex, but about something else. Part Two seemed to be about plot development. Part Three seems to be about character development. LINKS http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15520.txt [1/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15521.txt [2/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15524.txt [3/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15523.txt [4/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15522.txt [5/6] http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/15525.txt [6/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=393587656&fmt=raw [1/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=393587660&fmt=raw [2/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=393587676&fmt=raw [3/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=393587672&fmt=raw [4/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=393587666&fmt=raw [5/6] http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=393587681&fmt=raw [6/6] Rogue Review No. 315 (C) - February 21, 1999 The Needle and the Dungeon by MichaelD38 Complete F/M, F/F, Teen, Caution Length: 55,800 words Rating: Excellent Arousal Factor: Average Story Factor: Ultra COMMENTARY I enjoyed this story quite a bit. To paraphrase what I said earlier it is arousing, riveting, and touching. I was not aroused more than I was riveted and touched, so I would have to say that if you are looking for stroke material then you should look elsewhere. One thing I really enjoyed about reading this story was visualizing the various VR scenarios that Ashley was experiencing. Some had horrific elements in them and some did not. In the end this story is a romance of sorts. The more extreme activities might frighten off some who like romance. If you are such a person then I encourage you to attempt to read this story. It about much more than just sex, and for that matter it is also about more than just romance. At its heart I think this story is about "coming of age" or growing up. ***** 2/21/99 -- Lee Vine * E-Mail - santiago@switchboardmail.com * Home Page - http://www92.pair.com/leevine/rogue-reviews/ -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> | <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | <http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/>----<http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/faq.html>