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Nothing new to add for this week...I've been reading stories like a 
maniac, if I haven't got to yours yet, be patient. It sometimes 
takes a while. I have a day career, y'know.

The stories:

Raven Hair, by Parasol 60 (M/F, Native American, cybersex)
Touring with Hanson, Parts 1 and 2, by Dean Lidster (m/m, teen, celeb,
romance)
Shipwrecked, by Mathis B. Rogers (M/M, romance)
Darkside USA, 1, 2 and 3, by Eileen Stone (M/F, inc, mc, rape)
Rag Doll, by Leanna (M/F, BDSM, revenge)
The Encounter, by Frazier (M/F, BDSM)


Raven Hair [A]
When posted: 3/4/98
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Parasol 60
Address: parasol_60@yahoo.com

This story crossed genres: cybersex, Native American lore, and 
cautionary tale. And it purports to be true. What else can you ask 
for?

Like Maryanne Mohanraj's "Jinsong" the story is told from 
transcripts of cybersex adventures. "Mike," a 34-year-old 
divorced man, meets a woman online named "Raven Hair" who 
purports to be a female shaman in training. They have 
discussions about Native American spirituality and sex ("We think 
enough about hurting the Earth,  we don't think that our 
pleasures are good for her. This is deep wisdom from the Spirit.  
Smelling a flower, tasting a good meal, and enjoying deep and 
ecstatic sex are pleasures that make Her happy.") The two then 
have deep and ecstatic cybersex. Much later, Mike finds out to his 
alarm that the beautiful young shamaness was a phony; in reality 
"she" is a 50-year-old man. The realization triggers a nervous 
breakdown. 

Whether true or fabrication, or some mixture of the two, the story 
was very interesting. It wasn't as polished as the Mohanraj tale 
but I liked it better for the ironies it exposes: they made the story 
into an examination of the human desire to *believe* in the 
sacredness of the sex act rather than being a mundane depiction 
of a New Age stroke session. The Mohanraj tale, by contrast, could 
be a plot of a "Party of Five" episode. 

I guess the final axiom would be: Don't EVER take anyone at face 
value in cyberspace.


Touring with Hanson [A+]
When posted: 3/1/98
Where posted: ASSGM
Author: Dean Lidster
Address: dean.lidster@usa.net
Website: http://members.tripod.com/~Dean_Lidster

Celebrity sex stories are usually about beautiful, unavailable, 
famous women treated as either sluts or conquests: Jennifer 
Aniston, Jamie Lee Curtis, The Spice Girls. Something of a male 
revenge here, I suspect. I haven't seen a male celebrity sex story 
yet, save for this one about the cute little Hanson brothers from 
Tulsa, Oklahoma. Sacrilege! I fully expected this to be kidporn, so I 
was pleasantly surprised to find it well-written, fun, romantic, 
intelligent, AND charming.

The story takes place on the road with a pop group, like the Spice 
Girls stories, but differs in that it's told by a fourteen-year-old 
teenager, the lover of Taylor, the middle Hanson brother. The two 
carry a torch for each other, so when the Hansons come to the UK 
on tour the narrator is sent for to accompany them. There's pizza, 
rollerblading, shopping in the mall, and hanging out; there's also 
sex in the trailer in which younger brother Zach joins in, 
declarations of love, and moments of tenderness. Later it turns 
out all three Hansons are gay (what are the statistical odds of that 
happening?) with sourpuss older brother Ike finally confessing 
his love for a young lighting tech, who the narrator rescues with 
his rock-climbing skills when he falls from a rig and is knocked 
unconscious. The story is even more interesting because the 
foreword indicates it was written by a gay teen who is clearly a 
fan of the group and very familiar with their background, music, 
and videos. Everyone enjoys himself, no one's uptight about his 
homosexuality, and the young rock star's parents are completely 
accepting of all the doinking going on. 

Wish-fulfillment, perhaps, but this young man, if he is a young 
man, writes a helluva lot better than most of the straight adult 
men and women on the alt.sex hierarchy. 


Shipwrecked [A+]
Author: Mathis B. Rogers
Address: Mathis B. Rogers
Available from: http://www.o-c-s.com/gaynet/index.htm

Like the above, this story dealt with romance and the familial 
repercussions of being gay in contemporary society...more of a 
domestic fantasy than a sexual one, though there was a lot of sex 
(they say "I love you" over 50 times.) Kris, the young narrator, 
has been living with Brad, his lover, for two years, but Brad's 
parents haven't realized their son is gay and that Kris is not 
"just" a roomate. When Brad's family invites the two to spend the 
weekend on their boat, they reluctantly agree, knowing how 
hard it will be to keep it a secret. Complicating matters is Chad, 
Brad's identical twin brother, who has also been asked along, and 
complicating things further is the freak storm that strikes, 
washing the boat ashore on a desert isle. (Stop singing the 
"Gilligan's Island" theme.) The rest of the story deals with the 
aftermath, the "coming out" of the young couple, and how Brad's 
parents and twin brother react to this.

It's hard not to like this story even if you don't like gay fiction, 
because the characters were simply so *nice.* I felt I knew them 
as neighbors. There was even a touch of sly familial sexual 
humor running throughout:


     Mr. Peterson turned in his seat and looked Brad up and down as
we climbed into the car.  "No wonder those shorts had a hole in
them, son," he said.  "They're so tight that they'll split if you
get a boner.  Couldn't you find any decent clothes to wear?"
     "Thanks, Mom," Brad chided, before turning to his father. 
"You shouldn't talk like that in front of Mom, Dad."
     Mr. Peterson turned around and adjusted his seat belt.  "Why
not?" he asked.  "She knows what a boner is.  Hell, if she didn't
enjoy playing with mine, you wouldn't be here."


(No, there's no incest!)

All in all, a feelgood story with roots in real life.


Rag Doll [A]
When posted: 2/4/98
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Leanna
Address: kalika@main.provost.msu.edu
Website: http://www.geocities.com/Athens/Academy/2194/

A man comes home from work expecting to fuck his sexy wife, 
but he has another thing coming. She knows he's been screwing 
his secretary, so she handcuffs him to the bed in the middle of 
the act and confronts him with her knowledge while continuing 
to tease him sexually. Then she tells him she did the same thing to 
his secretary. By forcing them both to enjoy their respective 
rapes, she gets her revenge...and then she walks.

The story was well-written and quite suspenseful, marred only by 
the cliches of the genre. The wife has long red fingernails, soft 
full lips, and long legs. Slut material in porn shorthand, yet she's 
PO'd at the secretary for being a slut. If I wrote the story, I'd make 
the wife attractive yet average. After all, who cares if a beautiful 
women gets cheated on in a sex story? She can always go out and 
fuck someone else. But this is a minor nit, and overall the story 
deserves its grade.


Darkside USA, Parts 1, 2, 3 [A/A-]
When posted: 2/19/98
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: KTM
Posted by: Eileen Stone
Poster address: kmcclure@goldrush.com

Shared universe (SU) fiction is a phenomenon that has grown in 
leaps and bounds since the Net took off. It differs from other net 
fiction in that a fictional world is created with its own set of 
physical and social rules, history, and character types, and that 
world becomes the stage setting for the participant's poems and 
stories. SU fiction is often serial in nature, one author picking up 
where another left off, and has its own literary rules and style 
which can be applied to other genres, such as sex stories. 
"Darkside USA" is a prime example of SU fiction.

The premise is the USA has fallen into anarchy somehow (shades 
of "The Road Warrior") and thugs roam the heartland. A gang of 
them (Wolf, Skull, Red, etc....thugs NEVER have polysyllabic 
names) invades a farm. Thirteen-year-old Robbie witnesses the 
death of his father and his mother's and sisters' rapes, which 
causes his first ejaculation. He flees the house and takes refuge in 
a cave, but the floor collapses beneath him. Dying, he finds an 
ancient Native American artifact which promises him great 
power, and when he touches it he is transformed into a good-
looking and extremely well-hung adult man with stupendous 
physical and mental powers. He returns to the farm, blows away 
the bad guys, and tenderly fucks his mother and sister with the 
understanding they are under his protection now. He knocks 
Mom up, and plans to restore the good ol' U S of A by harnessing 
his sister Sissy's (how Midwest!) latent mental powers. The story 
continues for seven more chapters.

This was typical SU stuff...superheroes, psionic powers, and grand 
themes of love, destruction and redemption. And there's sex. Not 
the coy sex you find on the shared universe story newsgroup 
("her nipples became twin peaks of delight") but gobs of rape, 
forced lesbian encounters, mind-controlled incest, and female 
subjugation. The style was a little stiff in places, and it was all 
hard to take seriously...but all in all, an entertaining, reader-
pleasing read, if that reader likes "The Crow" and Fox channel 
weekend fare.


The Encounter [B+]
When posted: 2/18/98
Where posted: SSBB
Author: Frazier
Address: frazier@tidalwave.net

I don't like stories written in second person voice, but I made 
allowances for this one, because I found the sex hot. A man and 
woman flirt at a party, but she's only cockteasing. She leaves her 
scarf behind and comes back the next day to pick it up. The man 
then involves her in a heated BDSM encounter, which he 
describes by telling us what he does to her, in the present tense. 
The narrator went from overwrought ("I'm going to do things to 
you, you will never forget.  You can't escape this, any more than 
I can.  You and I are as one, jaded souls the rest of the world can 
never understand.  I'm going to turn you inside out.  I know this 
is what you want; that this is what you need.") to lecturing ("You 
know, in the terminology of all this, the one subservient is called 
a 'bottom', while the dominant person is the 'top'.") and as it turns 
out the woman planned it all along. She even brought along a 
change of clothes. 

Like most second person stories, it was silly at times, but I did 
enjoy it, perhaps because of all the nipple-sucking. 

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