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Happy Valentine's Day everyone. Make sure you give your loved 
one something nice. Lady Cyrrh could do with something nice, as 
her SO is no longer around. Maybe a hot new website listing or 
something.

Last week I was complaining about the XXX-rated banners that 
some sites have been using. The ASSGM archive site has thought 
of a clever way to abuse this visual spam. All visitors to the 
archive are asked to click once on the banner to give it a hit, 
then click back to the archive, with the advertiser being none 
the wiser, I suppose. Not too bright if they're counting hits as the 
measure of advertising success and not sales figures.

Make no bones (or boners) about it though. I'd still rather see a 
banner for a Horizon card or USWest than someone's twat.

Also, the chocolate box gif award is still available to anyone I've 
ever given an A+ story rating to. Created just in time for 
Valentine's Day, these luscious chocolates may be seen on my 
website (http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh) as a black and 
white gif. The official award is in 256 color, and it is quite 
gorgeous. You have to email me for it; it doesn't come 
automatically. This award is meant in goodwill and humor, like 
the "Pick of the Day" stickers you see on so many websites, and a 
fun way to brighten up your website. I don't mean to discourage 
writers or pit them against each other. If anyone thinks I am, tell 
me about, and the sticker will disappear *pronto.*


The stories:

Lord Kinzuburo's Gift, by D.G. Ross (M/m, bond.)
Waiting, by MD (M/F, mast.)
Tease: A Lesson in Understanding, by Myschief (MM/F, cons, light D/S)
Kinky Elvis, by Sydb (humor)
Sue's 9th: Slippery When Wet, by Sue NewHamp (M+F, Jacuzzi)
Saucy Wench #4: Trick or Treat, by Saucy Wench (F/F, F/M, Halloween)
Milkmaid, by Joy Paine (M/F abduction/rape)


Lord Kinzuburo's Gift [A-]
When posted: 2/7/98
Where posted: ASSG
Author: D.G. Ross
Address: duster_15@hotmail.com

A poet in Medieval Japan receives a special gift from his Lord, 
and is surprised to find out it's a young boy. The kid dances for 
him and for encore wheels out an elaborate bondage-chair 
device, into which he coaxes the poet. Once Buto-san is strapped 
in, the adventures begin. This is the first part of a multi-part 
series, so more shenanigans are planned.

This story was both elegantly historical and amusing at the same 
time, no mean feat. For example, the poet, in the manner of 14th 
century Japanese poets, is fond of creating spur-of-the-moment 
haikus to describe his reactions: 

                        The slave captures his master.
                        O, strange night!
                        Night of agony and smiles!

The other historical detail was well done also and seemed 
authentic, and the tone was good-natured without overdoing the 
kink aspect. The author wants to know if there is enough reader 
interest to continue "translating this ancient classic of lust, 
bondage, and forbidden pleasure." I vote yes.


Waiting [B/B+]
When received: 2/1/98
Author: MD
Address: mmd@efn.org

A long-time couple are separated by a family emergency and 
begin to long for each other. They talk on the phone, and a 
discussion ensures about sex. "Is that all you men think about?" 
Lisa says, to which Jake replies, "Oh, so you don't miss sex?" 

Rather indignant by now, Lisa replies "Sex is not that important. 
It's you I miss. Sex I can do without." Unfortunately, a few 
paragraphs later she contradicts herself by revealing  she 
masturbates three or four times a week, and the bet the two later 
make--Jake will be her slave for a day if she can avoid jerking 
off for a week--seems groundless because of it. It also seemed out 
of character for her to put him in a dog collar and leash when 
she wins the bet, as she wasn't built up as a kinky sort.

However, if you can swallow these goofs, the story contained 
some nice female masturbation scenes. If the characterization 
had been better, I might have rated it higher.


Tease: A Lesson in Understanding [B+]
When posted: 2/8/98
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Myschief
Address: myschief@aol.com  

The narrator and her boyfriend AJ spend all day lying around 
the pool, then decide to have sex in the shower. However, she gets 
a surprise when he invites a friend to join him. They have sex 
together (no double penetration). Afterwards, AJ is sore because 
the narrator attended the friend's orgasm without giving him 
one, too. So, he disciplines her by spanking her lightly, and 
forcing her submit, then punishes her further by getting her 
horny and masturbating on top of her. Hmm, not much of a 
punishment to me.

This was an OK story, marred only by vague motivations on the 
part of the narrator and her friends; they almost became real 
people to me, but not quite. If this author gets the knack of 
coming up with an interesting plot and well-rounded characters 
to go along with the sex, he or she would be someone to watch.


Kinky Elvis [B+]
When posted: 1/7/98
Where posted: SSBB
Author: sydb
Address: sydb@twd.net

A film critic specializing in 60s cinema called Elvis Presley 
musicals the most genial movies ever made. No one gets hurt, 
Elvis sings his troubles away, and everyone has a good time. In 
this short humor piece, the lyrics of well-known Elvis songs are 
rewritten to reflect various sexual fetishes:

You know I can be found, sitting home all alone
tied to a chair, can't reach the telephone
Please be cruel to a sub that's true
Baby, if I made you mad for something I might have said
Please, let me make amends, take the spankings ahead
Please be cruel to a sub that's true.

This humor probably didn't take too much time and thought to 
write, but it was genial, amusing, and didn't tax your brain too 
much. Just like an Elvis movie. (My favorite is "Viva Las Vegas.")


Sue's 9th: Slippery When Wet [B-]
When posted: 2/13/98
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: SueNewHamp
Address: suenewhamp@aol.com 

I've got a big bias against stories written in 2nd person voice. The 
only writers that do them well are Adrian Hunter and Dulcinea, 
and Dulcinea is a special case. Her stories are acceptable to me 
because they don't really try to be stories. They're more like ad 
copy, cute, quick little snippets designed to get you horny or 
maybe read out loud to someone you want to make horny...like the 
sorta blurb you might find on a t-card attached to a pair of 
Victoria's Secret silk panties suggesting various sexual fantasies 
to have while wearing them. The tone is soft-focus, with vague 
interruptions of ....s which you can imagine are filled in with 
steamy feminine exhalations. (One of these days, I'll get around to 
reviewing one.)

That said, this story didn't work for me because it tried to be a real 
story, or rather a shared fantasy where the narrator tells the 
unnamed male "you" everything he thinks, feels, says, and does 
to her, and the tone was pretty idiotic at times: "You have 
obviously been talking to your friend George about some of our 
fantasies of the big Jacuzzi, because he has offered you a favor. " 
When and where on earth would a normal person speak in tenses 
like this, using this kind of address?

The plot of that follows is a standard one: the narrator and the 
man sneak into the extra-large Jacuzzi of a college gym and have 
sex, then the man permits the three college kids who sneak in 
after them to have sex with narrator as if she doesn't have a mind 
of her own. The story was pretty porny, with lots of descriptions 
of dripping pre-come and cunts and cunt hairs, and suffered 
from the "Danger! Will Robinson" syndrome where acts are 
described in precisely modulated robot speech: "But I could feel 
the moisture in my crotch all afternoon and evening, and after 
many hours of being a little high on the anticipation, I know that 
the flesh of my cunt has become swollen and sensitive, and that 
my clitoris has puffed up and pushed out from the lips of my 
cunt, so that I could even feel it rubbing against the silk of my 
panties as I walked." Yes, I know this is what is known as a 
"stroke" story; it's not meant to have scintillating prose or 
realistic plots or characters you feel for. But I've enjoyed stroke 
stories in the past, like the overheated Jayant Lund Indian tales, 
while this story just seemed out of whack. The addition of the 
college boys redeemed it a bit for me, but not by much.


Saucy Wench #3: Trick or Treat [A+]
When posted: 2/13/98
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: Saucy Wench
Address: WenchSaucy@aol.com

This Saucy Wench tale was a real treat. The unapologetically bi 
narrator goes to a Halloween party with her girlfriend where all 
sorts of hijinks occur: sex with a female devil in the bathroom 
and a male Robin Hood in the cellar; a blowjob to a scarecrow in a 
pick-up truck; and a doggy-style encounter with Boba Fett, 
interspersed with apple-bobbing, scary stories, and dancing. 
Each encounter was headed with an amusing header derived from 
a well-known quote: 11:30PM, HOW ABOUT A LITTLE FIRE, 
SCARECROW? (OR, SUCKING THE STRAW). Afterwards, the narrator 
trades amusing quips with her lovers, such as this one (the pair 
have been fucking in the utility shed):

 "What's your name?"   I asked.   
"John." he replied.
"Thanks, John, dear." I said, as I climbed off the tractor.

What I really enjoyed about this story, however, was that the sex 
was lighthearted yet realistic (condoms are used) and everyone 
has a great time without feeling guilty or exploiting each other, 
and each encounter had its own individual flavor. I noticed his 
writer posts frequently, but they've always been the same 5 tales. 
Here's to hoping she writes more, or puts together a creative 
website.


Milkmaid [A]
When posted: 2/13/98
Where posted: ASSM
Author: Joy Paine

Like "Slippery When Wet" this story was strictly a fantasy. 
However, the POV of it was handled a lot better. The presumably 
young, high school virgin narrator is telling her story to us, and 
that story is what happens when her friend tricks her into 
becoming part of the "herd"--a group of blackmailed sex slaves 
maintained for the use of the local men. She is raped, out into 
bondage, threatened with pregnancy, and trained sexually. 

My feeling is probably more women than men would enjoy this 
story. The tone was straightforward, and though the poor heroine 
does not enjoy what is being to her, her pain and disgust were 
soft-pedaled, so that someone reading the narrative could 
imagine the acts and imagine them being done to her, and 
become aroused without dwelling too much on realism or 
violence. So, as a female rape fantasy this was pretty good. No 
milking or milkmaids in it, though.


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