Message-ID: <17954eli$9812110442@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: <URL:http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/17954.txt> From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews, 12/10/98 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-transfer-encoding: 7bit Content-type: text/plain; charset=US-ASCII Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: <usenet-approval@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Story-Submission: <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Original-Message-ID: <f6205092.36709c3b@aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes I have a larger than usual load of stories this week, ripped through in boredom if nothing else. The nights are dark and it's too cold to go out or do much. I'd like to thank everyone who responded to my question about the origin of "Millamber." This only proves what I've always thought--that fantasy and SF fans are also erotica fans. The two genres are a lot alike. For the record, Millamber is the grown-up identity of Pug, a magically talented kitchen boy who grows up to be a mage in Raymond Feist's "Riftwar" series of books. Along the way he's enslaved in a neo-Aztec world, but sadly there's no BDSM involved. That will have to wait for a more adventurous writer, I think. The stories: Fresh Produce, by Bernadette (M/F, humor) The Bellboy, by Hotscribe (F/m, wife) Hot Tub, by Hotscribe (M/F, hot tub) Dream, by Mark Aster (M/F, mast, dream) Demoted into Depravity, by Zawackyj Zabum (F/M, BDSM, blackmail) Mall Strut, Parts 1 and 2, by Maria Gozales (M+/F, F/F, exhib) Dark Angel, by Inkstain (M/M rom, vampire) Ruthie's Christmas Story, by Gary (M/F, BDSM, Christmas) Merry Christmas Baby, by Cee Jay (M/M, Trek, Christmas) Cam's Holiday Treksmut, by Cameron Burnell (dirty Christmas carols, Trek humor) Fresh Produce [A] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 12/1/98 Author: Bernadette Address: bybernadette@my-dejanews.com In this story, which consists mostly of witty double-entendres exchanged in a grocery store, an older woman meets a handsome man when she falls on her ass in a puddle of spilled chocolate milk. Then the puns start coming fast and thick: With the speed of a dribble of Heinz Ketchup slowly emerging from a bottle in a TV commercial, Henley reached over and kissed Nora briefly but passionately on the lips. Her ice cream was beginning to melt. Any minute now it would be turning to liquid and start seeping out of the edges of her box. There's more. Then the couple finally has sex in the meat department: He raised his body to her beautiful face, touching her cheeks lightly with his Oscar Myer Wiener. Nora took his penis into her open, full mouth like a popsicle. She sucked him hard and ran her tongue along his needy shaft, until he was begging for mercy and his hot, hearty soup came out like an open floodgate, filling her mouth as it dribbled everywhere else too. In sum, very silly and enjoyable, showing the naughty things that can be done with the English language. The Bellboy [A] The Hot Tub [A] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 11/27/98 Author: HotScribe Address: mikaal@hotmail.com It looks like HotScribe is one writer who's out to step into Dulcinea's shoes, with a series of short stories narrated by a man who tells his female companion all the things she does. They're hot, slightly more porny than romantic, and more dialogue- oriented than Dulcinea's offerings were. In "The Bellboy" the narrator watches his wife seduce a young bellboy in their hotel room, after which they have three-way sex; in "The Hot Tub" the narrator and his wife have sex in a hot tub with a little bit of rimming. Take a look at these if you're in the mood for something short. It looks like we have a worthy successor. Dream [A] Where posted: ASCEM When posted: 11/30/98 Author: Mark Aster Address: MyFrThAl@aol.com This story might be Aster's entry into Dulcinea territory. In what is intended to be a dream sequence, a woman in a disconnected mental state enters a restaurant where she gives a hand job to a waiter, then eats a gourmet meal while she watches him fuck the blonde hostess on a table. Brief and erotic, though I wonder how you can eat and masturbate at the same time. Demoted into Depravity [A-] Where posted: ASSB, ASSM When posted: 11/30/98 Author: Zawackyj Zabum Address: zawackyj_1@hotmail.com An unscrupulous boss manipulates his sweet young thing of a secretary into becoming a sex slave for the firm by showing her some bondage pictures and ordering her to go without underwear. He then has his partner drive her to the warehouse where she is to serve, which at this point consists of her being suspended upside-down, having her heinie lashed, and her pussy eaten. Doesn't sound so bad to me. The buildup of this story was very good, as the secretary squeaks and stutters as things began to get out of hand: The young blonde felt extremely reluctant to comply, instinctively knowing there would be some kind of unpleasant surprise in store for her. But she cautiously reached over and slipped her hand into his pocket, feeling around inside it and pulling out a handful of cloth strips that made her gasp with fright. He had the remains of her underwear in his pocket and her reaction of dread made the wicked old man laugh out loud. However, half the tale was missing: namely the beginning and the end. The story begins in mid-conversation and ends rather abruptly with the line "Her life as a sex slave had begun." Surely there's more to it than that? This was too bad, as the writing here was pretty good; the author could spin a longer tale if he or she wanted. Mall Strut, Parts 1 and 2 [B+] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 11/26/98 Author: Maria Gozales Address: maria1971@aol.com In this story, the author's first, a woman loses a bet with her husband--one of those ever-so-popular "be my slave for a day" deals--so she has to walk through the mall dressed as tramp. She undergoes a transformation from bored housewife to sex fiend and has an encounter with a group of three athletic men and a lesbian she picks up in the ladies lounge. This story was more of a personal fantasy than a story, but fairly interesting and readable in spite of it; like all personal fantasies, the interest comes from conjecturing what the writer is like as a person. The mall-strutter's feelings were vivid and well described as were the acts she committed (exhibitionism, public sex, a four- way, etc.) and this is probably enough for those who want a quick, easy read. Dark Angel [A] Where posted: ASSGM When posted: 11/27/98 Author: Inkstain Address: inkstain@peachworld.com A young man living on his own in the big city acquires a guardian angel of sorts who saves him from a robbery in the 7-11 where he works. At the same time, he's trying to deal with his sexuality and making the leap from M/M cybersex on the IRC to real-life attraction and lovemaking with a coworker. In the midst of all this the "angel" reveals himself and shows he is not what he seems. I liked this story a lot, as it dealt with the common themes of loneliness and looking for love in a way that was clear and uncluttered. The author wrote well and knew how to hang a plot twist up on the line. I would have liked to see a more creative hand in the writing, but like all creative endeavors, that will come with practice. Read this if you want something sentimental without being sappy. Ruthie's Christmas Story [A-] Where posted: ASCEM When posted: 12/1/98 Author: Gary Posted by: Ruthie Baby Address: RuthieBaby@aol.com In this story Mr. and Mrs. Claus go at it on Christmas night after he makes his deliveries. As if that wasn't sacrilegious enough, Mrs. Claus has a thing for being tied up in a leather harness and being whipped and sodomized on a footstool. Luckily the characters' advanced ages weren't mentioned; the picture given was of a spry, nubile Mrs. Santa in lacy undies who could endure all this without having a heart attack. That said the story did an excellent job of setting the scene as Mrs. Claus prepares herself for her man, the descriptions mingling the nostalgic and the erotic: There she waited for him, her head pulled proud and straight, the cock-sized bit firmly settled in her teeth, her long strong arms held up and behind her, and her thighs spread by the stool. She could smell her cunt, feel it throb, and feel her nipples harden. The only sound was the howl of the wind and the soft jingle, jingle, jingle of the bells on the harness and an occasional snap from the flames in the fireplace. She was afire. To the south she could just make out the snort of his lead reindeer and the clacking hoofs getting louder as the team strode the night to get home to oats and rest. The bells of the sleigh getting louder and the crack of the whip in the air driving them home filled her mind. All she could hear were bells and cracks and bells and cracks. The whip and he were almost home. Unfortunately, this playful, magical, erotic mood was punctured when Mrs. Claus announces: "Good evening, my fucking whore." I know many people consider talk like this sexually stimulating, but somehow, hearing it from Santa Claus really threw me out of the story. I'd think he'd say "Good evening, my saucy tart," or some such. In sex stories words like cock and cunt and asshole are neutral, but whore and slut tend to be negative, because they can be used to degrade. Although I liked the idea of the story and the naughty-goings on, profanity from Santa Claus was just too out of character, and I had to shave off half a point off because of it. Merry Christmas Baby, Parts 1 and 2 [A+] Where posted: ASCEM When posted: 12/6/98 Author: The Enigmatic Big Miss Sunbeam Address: bigmisssunbeam49@yahoo.com In the alternate universe that is Star Trek slash, Capt. Picard of the USS Enterprise and his arch-nemesis Q have become lovers and set up house together in New Orleans, accompanied by a pet bulldog named John Q. Apparrantly neither Dr. Crusher nor Starfleet Command has batted an eye at all this. Anyway, the two have a spat concerning Picard's former female lovers, and Picard has to coax Q out of his moping before the two can celebrate Christmas together. Like many slash stories, the sex isn't the reason for the story or the high point; the character relationships are, and this author has done her work in writing the prim and proper captain and arrogant yet hysterical alien to a T. Fans of P/Q fiction should like this very much, and people who hate the show will like it very much too, as the redoubtable Jean-Luc humiliates himself in dialogue like this (he's waiting for his pet dog to take a crap in the park on Christmas Eve): "John Q, let's walk home after Daddy Q, and if you . . . do that thing that you need to do . . . then . . . Pere Noel will come tonight, as you have been a good boy." Later Picard and Q make up and have sex, slash style, with all the accouterments of gayness straight women find so mysterious/appealing: Adam and Steve sex catalogs, handcuffs, ropes, costumes. Thoroughly in character, and thoroughly side- splitting. If you like the show, or want to see how witty slash can be, check this out. Cam's Holiday Treksmut [B+] Where posted: ASCEM When posted: 11/29/98 Author: Cameron Burnell Address: cameronb@juno.com Here's more Treksmut in the holiday style, which means Christmas carols rewritten in naughty ways to reflect the naughty fun some fans have with their characters: Jingle Bells - big cock swells It's blowjobs all the way Kira's sucking Sisko off and Worf thinks Dax is gay - HEY! Fun to sing around the schoolyard if you're not in hearing range of the nuns. If you can find this, you have my permission to sing it. Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> | <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | <http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/>----<http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/faq.html>