Message-ID: <17128eli$9811110529@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: <URL:http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/17128.txt> From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews 11/10/98 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: <usenet-approval@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Story-Submission: <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Original-Message-ID: <20c54b33.3648ba47@aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes Here's another batch of reviews, processed while I am still recovering from my crash. The stories: Screen Saver, by mersenne19937 (F/F, mc) Punished Breasts, by Jennifer K (M/F bdsm, no sex) Sharadzi, by Rosemerry (M/F, Science fiction) The Great Mysto, by Walter Ego (M/M, mc) Hot Man for You to Use, by Garth Wells (M/M, M/M+, humil, exhib, BDSM, male strippers) Screen Saver [B-/C] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 11/6/98 Author: mersenne19937 Address: mersenne19937@my-dejanews.com Sarah and Kelly are college roommates, and, as in 99% of all ASS stories about female college roommates, they have the hots for each other. Notice, too, how college roommates who have the hots for each other never have boring names like Anne or Elizabeth or hippy-dippy ones like Sierra Sunshine. Anyway, Sarah invents a screensaver that utilizes stereograms and discovers it has a hypnotizing effect if you stare into it too long. It is this effect that causes the roommates to declare their desire for each other. Though the subject matter (stereograms) could have been interesting and unusual, the story was not. It was woodenly written, dry, and predictable; the characters were cardboard and the sex they have was only briefly described: "Within moments both girls were shedding clothing. They explored each other with their eyes, hands, and mouths. After a while, Sarah was on her back with Kelly's head between her legs, bringing her to ecstasy." Maybe stereograms and sex just don't mix. Punished Breasts [B] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 11/6/98 Author: Jenny K. Address: JennieK@selin.com Website: http://come.to/be.punished Mailing List: http://www.onelist.com/subscribe.cgi/punish In this brief story the narrator and her boyfriend "T" go down the docks for an afternoon outing where the narrator ogles some sailors. It turns out the narrator is a subfem and accepts the warning of her maledom "T" to keep her eyes to herself. The story is confused on this point, but it seems "T" has the means to reinforce his orders using an X-frame, whip, and quirt, and the narrator accepts all this as being good for her in a personal sense as it forces her to act like less of a slut. As a sex story, this one didn't deliver, but if you subscribe to the author's personal philosophy--that women need a man that sets limits on their sexual behavior, and reinforces the limits with physical punishment--it might interest you. Sharadzi [A] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 10/29/98 Author: Rosemerry Address: perigryn@earthlink.net Website: http://home.earthlink.net/~perigryn/ The author says of this story, "This story is the one I always give people when they first ask for a sample of my erotic fiction." Sharadzi is an artificial human being engineered to look like an elf who services clients in a sort of interstellar brothel. Her mind has been altered to always be pleasing and look pleasing for her clients and harbor genuine emotion for whomever she is servicing. One of them, the heir to a large company, becomes infatuated with her and kidnaps her, intending to start a new life in which they are both equal partners. But Sharadzi's inborn programming betrays him. This story was more story than sex, that is, a story in which sex is an outgrowth of plot, background and character rather than being the excuse for them; it should interest SF fans in particular. It was a little too polished maybe; it didn't have that wild, over-the-top events and imagery I read neterotica for. But considering the low quality of most ASS stories, I'd gladly accept my fiction without burrs. The Great Mysto [A] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 10/6/98 Author: Walter Ego Address: gwbridge@hotmail.com The narrator and his wife go see a performance by The Great Mysto, who, as his name suggests, is a hypnotist. The pair volunteer to be subjects and find themselves unable to recognize each other, acting like hookers, and admitting homosexual tendencies. The show ends, but their victimization does not, as Mysto has planted a post-hypnotic suggestion for the couple to visit him backstage. Contrary to what you'd think in such a scenario, he hypnotizes the husband to be his sex slave, turning the wife into a pea-brained hooker-slut to get her out of the picture. Though it wasn't exactly original, the story was very well written, concentrating on what makes mind control story great (the masterful, sinister hypnotist, permanent sex slavery, the inability of the victims to do anything about it) and the cliché of the hypnotist show was handled in such a way that it was amusing, letting us know that it was cliche. The story was also interesting for the revenge of sorts that was taken on the wife; it could have been written by the disgruntled lover of a married man who refused to be "outed." Hot Man for You to Use, Parts 1 -7 [A/A-] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 10/25/98 Author: Garth Wells Address: garth09@ibm.net After being fired from the police force for testing positive on a drug test, ex-Marine Mitch Conrack decides to become a male stripper. Though the writing was rough in places and broke a lot of rules, I couldn't put these chapters down; I just *HAD* to find out what sort of kinky adventure the hero gets into next on his descent into male slut-hood. It was like a role reversal of all those stories about women who start exotic dancing and wind up turned into rabid fucksluts. And like those women, poor Mitch winds up a bisexual (and rapidly approaching full gayhood), buff, shaved, continually horny male fuckslut craving abuse from the powerful older men who frequent the clubs where he is employed. All strippers dress as macho icons like lumberjacks and policemen, and in one club they are even used as objects of revenge (for example, ex-felons abusing a stripper dressed as a cop.) It's as if the Village People suddenly got down and dirty in a way you'd see in the 1970s. There's pre-cum and ejaculations flying all over the place, and whips and rings and assholes begging to be filled. Though the story is categorized as gay, it's really more male bi, as females sometimes take a hand in the proceedings too. In a word, yum! Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- +----------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `--------------+ | <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> | <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> | | Archive site +----------------------+--------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | <http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/>----<http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/faq.html>