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Celestial Reviews 284 - May 30, 1998
Note: Several people have inquired about my recent absence. No problems....
My husband just made me an offer I couldn't refuse and took me away for a
sudden vacation, which in turn required me to plan school activities before I
left and to catch up when I got back. My husband's sudden romantic interests
reminded me of the following story:
A man comes to a doctor and, twitching his fingers and stuttering, finally
managing to say, "Doctor, I have a sexual performance problem. Can you help
me?"
"Oh, that's not a problem for us men anymore!" announces a proud physician.
"They just came out with this new wonder drug, Viagra, that does the trick!
You take some pills, and your problems are history."
So the doctor gives the man a prescription and sends him on his merry way.
A couple of months later, the doctor runs into his patient on the street.
"Doctor, Doctor!" exclaims the man excitedly, "I've got to thank you! This
drug is a miracle! It's wonderful!
"Well, I'm glad to hear that," says the pleased physician. "What does your
wife think about it?"
"Wife?" asks the man, "I haven't been home yet."
Second note: An Irish gent came into the pub and said to the barkeep, "Mike,
I'll be havin' three whiskeys."
Callahan set up three glasses and began to pour. "Now, Timothy, it's not the
usual thing for you to ask for three whiskeys. Is it celebratin', you are?"
Timothy sighed: "Ahh, ye know me too well, Michael, ye do. Truth, and I'm
celebrating me first blow job."
Callahan smiled benevolently and set a fourth glass on the bar. "Now, that's
special," he said. "For an old customer like y'rself, here's a fourth on the
house, so I may be sharin' your celebration with you."
Timothy shook his head, and replied "Tis verra kind of ye, Michael; but I'm
thinkin' if three won't get rid of the taste, four won't either. "
Third note: A little old lady with blue hair entered the marital aids shop and
asked in a quivering voice, "Yy-young man, dd-do y-you sell-dildos h-here?"
The salesman, somewhat taken aback by the little old lady's appearance in his
shop, answered "Uh, yes, ma'am. We do."
The little old lady, holding her quivering hands about 10 inches apart asked,
"D-do y-you ha-aave any ab-bb-bout th-this l-long?"
"Well, yes ma'am, we do. We have several that size."
Forming a 5" circle with her fingers, she then asked, "A-are an-nny of th-them
about thi-is b-big ar-round-d?"
"Well... Yes, a few of them are about that big."
"D-do aa-ny of th-them ha-ave a vv-ii-bra-a-ator?"
"Yes, Ma'am, one of them does."
"W-Wel-ll, h-how d-do y-you t-turn it off?"
Fourth note: A priest and a minister walked into a bar. After sitting down,
ordering, and some chit chat the priest said, "Have you noticed there are no
women in this bar?" He then realized the truth, "I think we're in a gay bar."
A man approached and tried to flirt with the priest. The priest was
dumbfounded, and didn't know what to do. The minister leaned over and
whispered something in the man's ear. The man nodded and walked off.
The relieved priest said, "Thanks. What did you tell him?"
The minister replied, "I just told him we're on our honeymoon."
Final note: Remember: even though someone else may be posting my reviews for
me, my e-mail address is still Celeste801@aol.com.
- Celeste
New Reviews:
"One o'Clock Jump" by Taria (music & sex) 10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=353594030
"Diary" by Bruce AKA mcbeam (mind control & breast gtowth)
8, 8, 8
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=288338722
"A Yank in the Outhouse" by David Shaw (war-time sex)
10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=357058762
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=357058773
"Taxi Tales: Lost and Found" by Delta (quietly sexy episodes)
10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=357044183
"Diary of a Voyeur" by J.Reynolds (voyeurism & exhibitionism)
10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=357058740
Guest Reviews:
"Cleanliness is Next to Ecstacy" by John Galt (ff sex)
10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=346712557
"The Cruise" by Tonya (shipboard teen romance) 8.5, 6.5, 6
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=351990866
"My Sexual Odyssey" by darla (sexual escapades) 9, 7, 6
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=352431683
"The Japanese Student Nurses" by Gordie D (naive but
naughty nympho nurses) 9, 7, 8
http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11090.txt
"Under the Moons of Eden" by Christopher Leeson
(sci fi sex) 10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355696861
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355700493
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355700522
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355696882
"Hypno-tricked Wives" by Watcher (entranced matrons)
10, 10, 10
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"In the Moon That Is Always Rising" by o_rofrano@hotmail.com
(lyrical sex) 10, 9, 8
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=354649368
"Susan Jennings" by Morgan (triumph over extreme evil) 10, 8, 7
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=347041782
"Amy Swallows" by Walker (oral sex) 7, 7, 7
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355958875
"Rush Hour" by Robert Mitchell (public sex) 10, 9, 8
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=354407609
Reposted Reviews:
* "Fantasies" by BitSlinger (sexual fantasies) 9, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355958917
* "Friday" by Uther Pendragon (anon584c@nyx.net)
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355490674
* "Funhouse" by RC (mind control) 10, 9.5, 9.5
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355961906
* "Mating Flight" by D.A. Ignatius (dragon sex) 10, 8, 5
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355961902
* "Not Quite Hidden" by Fin Haddie (exhibitionism) 9, 8, 9
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355961900
* "Dating Ritual" by Michael K. Smith (rough adolescent
sex) 10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355961879
* "Chosen" by Tom Bombadil (ff passion & sex slavery) 10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355700567
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355700572
* "Exquisite Error" by Eric Shon (mistaken identity) 10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355700579
* "The Birthday Party" by Losgud (romantic birthday weekend)
8, 8, 9
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=354649361
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=354649357
* "Feed the Night" by Brother Cadfael (lesbian vampire sex) 8, 9, 8
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Since Last Time and Now in Celestial History
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CR#85 - May 18, 1996
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* "Midnight Symphony" by D.A. Ignatius (dreamlike sex)
10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=240147597
* "For Celeste" by Grammaticus (poetry) 10, 10, 10
Not Archived -- lost forever?
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CR#86 - May 22, 1996
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* "Commencement" by Vickie Tern (coerced feminization)
10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=222237936
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CR#87 - May 25, 1996
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* "The Gathering" by Patrick Donovan (romantic group sex)
10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=207060844
* "Cocktail Table" by Sue (orgy) 10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=206953281
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=206874490
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CR#88 - May 29, 1996
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* "A Night at Suzy's" by Mark Aster (tasteful orgy)
10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=212405663
* "Angelic Interlude" by Joe Parsons (meeting the cyber-
lover) 10, 10, 10
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=340917605
"One o'Clock Jump" by Taria (tariat@aol.com).
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=353594030
She went to a dance,
Looking for romance,
Saw Barbara Ann....
Ooops! Right spirit, but wrong song.
The novel twist of this story is that it involves the reader in the seductive
mood of the music.
It's Dirty Dancing on alt.sex.stories. No wonder the bible thumpers object to
dancing.
This is a good story, but it's impossible to describe it properly in a prose
review. Hungry for the right combination of music and sex, the woman goes
into what I'll prosaically refer to as a dance emporium. She meets a man and
dances seductively with him. He wants to take her to a quiet place for some
sex, but she instead goes with him to an adjacent dark room, where they have
sex to the beat and rhythm of the nearby music. Then they go their separate
ways.
A very nice story indeed.
Ratings for "One o'Clock Jump"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Diary" by Bruce AKA mcbeam (Bmauger317@aol.com)
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=288338722
The author describes this as an experimental attempt to tell a tale with no
dialogue. There is indeed none. The narrator is some sort of clinician who
takes women under his control and makes their breasts grow extremely large.
I think mind control authors have the odds stacked against them. They have to
make sexual activities sound interesting without any free will or seduction,
and those elements are what make sex most enjoyable for most of us. The
author tries to put some seduction into the story, and is fairly successful in
this effort. However, the awkward grammar and extremely objective style
sometimes become tedious.
This is a decent but not great story.
Ratings for "Diary"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"A Yank in the Outhouse" by David Shaw (shaw_david@hotmail.com).
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=357058762
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=357058773
First, let's clear up a linguistic ambiguity. An outhouse in England is not
the same thing as one in America. In England, the term appears to refer to
any house outside the main house. In the United States an outhouse is a
primitive toilet facility employed in areas where there is no running water
for flush toilets. Aside from the hole through which one shits and pisses and
the aroma that pervades the place, the most familiar characteristic of the
American outhouse is the crescent-moon-shaped window on the front door. I
would add that in the United States the outhouse usually contains a crapper,
whereas in this story the outhouse contains a copper; but you would have to
read this story to understand what that means.
This story takes place in England during World War II. The narrator is a very
conservative British lady who lives in a very rural area, stays away from
bars, and teaches Sunday School. A fortiori she's a virgin. The men are off
fighting Hitler, and war is hell on the homefront too. Our Heroine is
assigned to deliver a bottle of wine as a gift from the Vicar to two
distinguished ladies who have moved to the countryside to avoid the blitz; and
she is surprised to discover when she peers through the window of the wash
house that they are really nothing but a couple of prostitutes servicing the
serviceman who has come a-calling.
What she sees resembles getting a bull aroused for a tupping session with a
cow.
After she watches for a while, she gets caught; but what the heck - that just
means that she gets to join the action.
This story makes some far-fetched assumptions - for instance, not all pure
little voyeuristic Sunday school teachers become enthusiastic courtesans the
moment they get caught and threatened with rape; but they won't strain the
credulity of people who frequent alt.sex.stories. But overall, this was a very
good story.
Ratings for "A Yank in the Outhouse"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Taxi Tales: Lost and Found" by Delta (delta@nym.alias.net).
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=357044183
The cab driver is working on the Fourth of July. I don't think they have a
Fourth of July in England - go straight from July 3 to July 5, or so I hear
anyway. The cab driver is driving a young couple who are ignoring him and
making out very heavily in the back seat. I think they do that sort of thing
in England as well as in the colonies, or so I hear anyway. It's called
voyeurism or exhibitionism, depending on your point of view.
And then the night just rolls along.
This story isn't blatantly sexy - just quietly sexy - full of the ordinary
things in the life of a taxi driver - things like finding a pair of panties on
the floor of the back seat after a young couple departs, having to air the cab
out before the next customer, and then having the last rider tell the driver
to take her to his own address.
This was another very good story.
Ratings for "Lost and Found"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Diary of a Voyeur" by J. Reynolds (cepheus42@hotmail.com).
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=357058740
This author made one of the most common mistakes that occur on this newsgroup:
he posted the story without title in the textfile and with his name only at
the very end of the story. I downloaded the story; but since it was a long
one, it was identified simply as 49f46c77.txt. By the time I went to read it,
I no longer knew what I was reading. It's surprising how many authors do this
- and how many readers simply ignore otherwise good stories simply because
they're not labeled correctly. The point is this: always put the title of
your story and your name and e-mail address at the beginning of the actual
textfile that readers will download; do not assume that this information will
be available just because you think it is listed on a title line - those title
lines disappear and cause inconvenience when stories get downloaded.
Having said that, I'll add that this is a very good story. As its title
suggests, this is the journal of a man who likes to look at women, resorting
to such strategies as arranging furniture so that his secretary will be
positioned for proper observation, peering through binoculars, hanging out in
the mall's food court with a newspaper as a prop and perhaps a duffel bag
concealing a video camera, and riding escalators at just the right distance to
see a woman's panties - or the absence thereof, as sometimes is the case. His
imagination is also quite active, and he also gets hard and shoots his wad at
what I would consider to be awkward times.
But then the story takes an unusual twist - or several unusual twists, as
fantasy merges with reality and the hunter becomes the prey. To find out what
that means, you should read this story.
Ratings for "Diary of a Voyeur"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Cleanliness is Next to Ecstasy" by John Galt (email not stated). Guest review
by Baird Allen (aka The Bear, thebear@io.com).
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=346712557
The author states that this story is a continuation of prior stories about the
residents of Hornville, Celeste's hometown. I haven't followed the earlier
stories, so I can't say anything about how well this one fits in, but it is a
fine story all by itself. Martha is a divorcee in her late thirties who has
not had any romance in her life since her husband ran off some years ago. She
accidentally walks in on her cousin Rose while Rose is pleasuring herself in
the bathtub. Martha is surprised at how stimulated she is by the sight of
Rose, and fantasizes about the event afterward. The story moves along, teasing
and tantalizing, as Martha and Rose each realize that they are sexually
attracted to the other. The climax, when it comes, is worth the wait.
I'm not a big fan of FF stories, but for some reason Celeste keeps on sending
them to me. This one was actually a pleasure to read. Not only was the story
well-written, but the sex was romantic and exciting. I expect that a person
who really likes FF stories will especially like this one.
Ratings for "Cleanliness is Next to Ecstasy"
Athena (technical merit): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Bear (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Cruise" by Tonya (tonya@dialnet.net). Guest review by jubjub.
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=351990866
Story Summary: True story of two teenagers on a ship.
The author of this story claims it is true. You wouldn't know it from the way
this story is told. There is a singular lack of emotional impulse. Some of
the descriptions seem good, but the lack of emotional build-up in these scenes
kills much of the eroticism. The style is flat with some stilted cliches.
There were also a few annoying punctuation errors and some spelling errors.
The characterization in this story is vital to its success. With liberal
hints about exhibitionism from the start, I expected to read something about
how the narrator felt about being watched. Instead--nothing: one short
segment with a greater emphasis on the fact that she was only fifteen (he was
seventeen) and a postcoital mention that they were being watched by a couple
who were doing the same thing.
Another problem was some of the expected plot disappeared. The cruise was to
the Bahamas (note to author: it's NOT the Bahama Islands) with a mention of
walking on the beach. But none of this materialized. For all the reader
knew, they spent most of the cruise keeping their hands OFF of each other.
This was said explicitly in the one short paragraph that described the
majority of the cruise. I felt cheated. There is so much potential in the
idea of exhibitionist sex on a cruise to the Bahamas.
That said, the sex described is fairly good. The major problem I had was that
the scenes seemed cut short. With the rest of the plot virtually nonexistent,
this left me feeling blah. Nice story with vastly unrealized potential.
Technical: 8.5 Very good but stylistically flat. A few annoying
punctuation mistakes.
Characterization and Plot: 6.5 Exhibitionism/Voyeurism not
played up enough
Appeal: 6 Sex scenes need more emotional buildup
"My Sexual Odyssey, Pt. 1" by darla. Guest review by Nick (e-mail:
Nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk).
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=352431683
This is a little difficult to review because it is to be continued. So many
stories stand or fall by the ending (or "denouement") - particularly short
ones. So I have to assume that there is no ending and that this may run and
run.
"First, let me describe myself. I'm 5' 5" tall, 110 lbs, blonde and
36DD-26-35."
This is not generally a promising start. A story is about describing events,
not images. Readers are perfectly capable of drawing their own favorite
images; and if they happen not to like the image that the writer describes,
then the author has lost them to the rest of the story. I, for example, am not
turned on by 36DD breasts (it does turn out that these are implants, but I
don't like those either).
The first part of the story is spent drawing up a sexual profile of the
subject and her menfolk, which is quite interesting; but I couldn't quite get
the "Barbie and Ken" image out of my head. These characters have only one
dimension and are rather plastic.
The rest of the story chronicles various sexual exploits which have
contributed to her sexual development. Again quite interesting, but there
appears to be no central theme - nothing to pull this together.
Now, just keeping my eye on the ball, here, this *is* a sex story posted to
titillate the reader, which it does reasonably well. So what if it doesn't
have much conventional literary appeal? Many people who will read this will
find this a thoroughly enjoyable piece. It is well enough written and there
were some definite buzzes in it.
My own marking system would give it 7 for technique, 4 for plot and character
(again, without an ending I can't really give it much more) and 6 for personal
appeal. Normalising for Celeste the ratings are:
Athena (Technical) 9
Venus (Plot & character) 7
Nick (Appeal to Reviewer) 6
"The Japanese Student Nurses" by Gordie D (gordond103@aol.com). Guest review
by DG.
http://www.qz.to/erotica/assm/Year98/11090.txt
This is a pleasant, reasonably hot story about an American guy traveling in
Japan who finds himself in the enviable position of instructing a pair of
18-year-old Japanese sisters in the basics of sex. The sisters are student
nurses; and when the narrator wakes up in the hospital after a minor traffic
accident, he finds one of them peeking under his blanket at his morning woody.
Turns out the poor gal was raised in a rural area with little social
interaction, and doesn't know anything about the birds and the bees. The
American manages to set up a date for dinner that night, overcoming the
nurse's shyness and embarrassment at being caught peeping. At dinner time,
the nurse shows up with her twin sister, who is equally uninformed about
matters of the flesh but much more outgoing. From that point things progress
rapidly in the predictable manner.
What I liked best about this story is that the narrator is a good guy. He
takes things slow, respects the girls, and ends up having a great time. No
Ugly American syndrome or underage exploitation in this story. The only real
flaw in the story is that the inexperience of the twins is overdone to the
point of unbelievability. Virgins who have never heard of oral sex I can
believe, but these 18-year-olds don't even know that a penis gets hard or that
people have sex for pleasure. That quibble aside, I found this an enjoyable
read.
Ratings for "The Japanese Student Nurses"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 7
DG (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Under the Moons of Eden" by Christopher Leeson (cdl25@usa.net).
Guest review by Robert (Citizen@GalaxyCorp.com).
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355696861
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In the 22nd century, humanity is at war with the alien Asymmetrics. During a
pitched battle, a human troop transport ship is captured and towed to an alien
world. The soldiers are then abandoned on the surface with no way to return
home.
The planet seems nice enough - an agreeable climate and an ecology not unlike
Earth's. The troop is getting along fairly well until, one day, two men
disappear. The next day, two women are found.
This is the sort of story that, for me at least, defines transgender fiction.
Christopher's stories tend to explore the emotional consequences of
transgendering, and this one does so exceedingly well. The characters are
sympathetic and believable; they react and suffer in real, human ways when
something inexplicable happens to them. In fact, the tale reads like a good
SF novella.
What this story _isn't_ is a silly masturbatory fantasy. There are few sex
scenes, and the first doesn't even occur until well over halfway into the
story. Though infrequent, the sex is tastefully done and occurs at points
that are logical within the context of the tale.
If you enjoy engaging, realistic characters who are forced to come to grips
with emotional and mental trauma, then this is the story for you.
Ratings for "Under the Moons of Eden":
Athena (technical quality): 10 (no complaints)
Venus (plot & character): 10 (keeps the reader engaged; very
difficult to put down)
Citizen (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Hypno-tricked Wives" by Watcher (llxzt@hotmail.com). Guest review by Sandman
(sandman@bitsmart.com).
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On the May the 15th I signed off the net, sure that I wouldn't return until
the middle of June. But I found myself with four unexpected days off at the
end of the month and so had some time for the net. When I signed off, I had
printed out a few stories to tide me over while I was gone. One of those
stories was this small novella by Watcher.
The premise of the story is that our hero and his friend use hypnotism to
create several sexually provocative situations among the neighborhood wives.
Normally I'm not a fan of mind control stories because they are usually a
crutch to avoid things like plots, conflict, and resolution all very important
elements to any story in my opinion.
Really when you boil this story down to it's core, it's little different from
other mind-control stories in that the Mind Control element is used to bypass
the normal restrictions that prevent everyone from just immediately stripping
and having a grand old time. What is different is the way Watcher chooses to
execute the mind control.
Yes the women are exploited, although current theory suggests someone doesn't
do anything under hypnosis that they really wouldn't do in real life. But the
hypnotism is used to do horribly trivial things like giving the guys a good
view of a women in her (gasp) panties! What you ask? No, you are my slave,
bend over and service me commands?
Nope. What we have here is very, very effective peeking and the occasional
copped feel. Compared to the other stories here and especially considering
the genre this story was almost PG-13 compared to the normal XXX. Why then
did I get so excited when a guy copped a feel of a woman through her blouse?
Sometimes a story like this comes along and reminds us all that less sometimes
really is more. There's sex in this story, and there's an amazing amount of
very exciting voyeurism. I found myself anticipating and looking forward to
the next situation our protagonist would set up next and I found this a
refreshing and wonderfully well written story well worth the read on those
long, lonely nights when you have to forgo your network access.
Ratings for "Hypno-tricked Wives"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Sandman (appeal to reviewer): 10
"In the Moon That Is Always Rising" by (o_rofrano@hotmail.com). Guest Review
by Morgan Preece.
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=354649368
This is an unusual story. The author claims that it is a first erotic story,
but I think obviously not a first story. Few writers could achieve such an
effect on a first attempt at writing a story of any kind.
Not to praise the piece too highly, but this is my favorite story of those I
have reviewed for Celeste. It has a lyric quality that would not work in
another context for the story has it's own musical accompaniment.
Encourage a promising new talent, read the story and send your own honest
opinion to the author. Please.
Athena (technical quality): 10
(My first ten. So shoot me.)
Venus (plot & character): 9
(Plot. Uh, well the story isn't about plot. I've said that before and I find
it is true of most erotic fiction. The characters are romantic ideals as
befits a story about romantic ideals.)
Morgan (appeal to reviewer): 8
(My highest rating here, also. Maybe it was my mood, I lost my current job
about twelve hours ago and I needed some fun reading.)
Grade for a hypothetical class in writing for ASS would be an "A" and "I dare
you to do it again" with a smiley. :-)
I am large, I contain paradoxes.
Guest Review: "Susan Jennings" by Morgan. Guest review by BillyG
(hayden@mindless.com).
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=347041782
The story "Susan Jennings" - quite long at almost 39,000 words - is a very
emotional tale of the triumph of good over near-incomprehensible and
despicable behavior. The wrongdoing initially found its origins in the
behavior of military commanding officers in a Vietnamese POW camp and later in
a broad-based conspiracy to shift blame and suppress evidence.
Three senior officers, two men and one woman, colluded with the enemy for
their own gain at the terrible and unbelievable expense of their fellow men
and woman in the POW camp. One woman, an Army nurse named Susan Jennings, at a
terrible price, attempts to save the lives of her fellows, and almost dies in
the effort. Still, among others, she saved the life of one woman certain to
die and suffers the price of that attempt by being flogged with a bull whip
and then crucified.
She's saved from that near-death by a Marine officer, but the gods aren't
finished with her, for she and the Marine end up in a cave, hiding from the
enemy. The Marine is shot in the leg and Susan performs mind boggling surgery
under primitive conditions to save his life. The details of her subsequent
heroics are long and impressive.
Both the woman she saved in the POW Camp and the Marine officer go on to
extraordinary successful lives, but Susan Jennings unexplainably disappears
for years, only to surface, emaciated, worn, ill and tattered, the victim, it
would appear, of a concerted effort to keep her suppressed.
Her friends, the Marine officer and the woman from the POW camp have both
become extremely wealthy, powerful and remain steadfastly loyal to her. They
move mountains to successfully bring about her recovery and clear her name by
uncovering the plot perpetrated by the evil officers.
If you enjoy a story of righteous retribution, you may like this one. The
good people are wronged to incomprehensible depths and then win out over the
bad guys in the end. I didn't much like the story, but nevertheless found
myself becoming emotional several times.
First, while there are a couple of token and even pathetic sex scenes, this is
not even close to an erotic story. The sex scenes could be taken out entirely
and the story would lose none of its emotional impact. I've spent just enough
time around the military to appreciate how thin and contrived that portion of
the story was, and more than enough time in operating theaters to smile at the
heroine's battlefield surgical technique. Still, this isn't a story about
tactical warfare and it isn't a medical story, so we can overlook those
shortcomings.
I suppose I reacted to the exaggerated characters in this story. Everything
and everyone was simply too much. Too much to believe and too much to be
real. Susan, for instance, emerges as a cross between Joan of Arc, Wonder
Woman and Job. Too many times I thought, 'Oh, come ON.'
The story has a Hardy Boy, ferry tale quality that employs exaggeration over-
much to the point where reality flies out the window and Marvel Comics barges
in the front door.
Ratings for "Susan Jennings"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
BillyG (appeal to reviewer): 7
"Amy Swallows" by Walker. Posted by Kristen78 (Kristen78@aol.com) Guest
reviewed by Poison Ivan.
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=355958875
Walker's high school girlfriend Jamie fucks, sucks, and does anal. But there
is one thing Jamie absolutely refuses to do: she _never_ swallows. When I was
in high school, refusing to swallow was not a problem we dwelled on much. But
I suppose times change.
Fortunately for Walker, Amy is available as a soft shoulder to cry on. They
have a telephone relationship, and it eventually comes out that Amy has no
hang-ups about gulping goo. A little flirty back and forth, a few starts and
stops, and eventually Amy and Walker end up on the roof. Walker gets the blow
of his life.
This story could have been a very good one. Where did Walker's sexual
expectations come from? Why did he feel compelled to cheat on his girlfriend?
Was it really just the swallowing? I got a hint of guilt feelings, but just
barely a hint. And his telephone relationship with Amy felt unreal to me. I
give the author a lot of credit for setting up something that could have been
great. I just wish he had followed through better.
The spelling and grammar were not great, but the sex on the rooftop was
reasonably well described. But ultimately, this story left me feeling a
little cold.
Ratings for "Amy Swallows"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 7
Ivan (appeal to reviewer): 7
"Rush Hour" by Robert Mitchell (). Review by Nick (e-mail
Nick@cassandra.demon.co.uk)
http://search.dejanews.com/getdoc.xp?AN=354407609
This is a short story about an encounter between the narrator and a girl in a
crowded tube train in rush hour.
Who hasn't been here before? Men and women crushed together in confined space
- something's bound to happen, even if its only inside the head! Well the
subject matter certainly appeals to me.
The scene setting is good and, as I said, I'm sure most people would empathize
with the situation. It's certainly realistic enough, although one wonders if,
however confined the space, the "contact" described wouldn't be carefully
avoided.
But here:
"Maybe she would think it was just an elbow or something" (referring to his
hard-on pressed up against her bum.)
I started to laugh. An elbow!? For the rest of the story the smile didn't
quite disappear - not really the intention I think!
His fly is unzipped, her skirt lifted and she has an orgasm ....in a crowded
tube carriage with no one noticing. Nice work if you can do it, but I'm afraid
I couldn't quite handle it.
My own ratings are: 8 for technique - good enough, but short. 7 for plot and
character - nice story, well described characters, but credibility suffered. 7
for appeal to me.
Normalising for Celeste:
Athena (Technique) 10
Venus (Plot and Character) 9
Appeal (to me) 8
* "Fantasies" by BitSlinger (bitslinger@hotmail.com). I believe this is this
author's first story. It's also an entry in my Celestial Christmas story
contest. I am happy to have stimulated the author to enter upon a promising
writing career.
The basic plot is that the wife has become interested in fulfilling her
husband's fantasies; but he's reluctant to share them, because he's afraid
he'll scare her off. Most recently she has noticed his interest in a sexy
little elf at the mall, and so tonight she has seduced him in an elf costume.
Eventually she manages to pry some fantasies out of him, and she rewards him
by acting them out with him and enjoying them herself.
The fantasies are actually pretty tame by a.s.s. standards, but I enjoyed
them. Except for a few occasional flaws in verb tenses, the author shows a
good sense of timing in his integration of the fantasies and the real-time
sexual activity. I look forward to seeing more stories by this author.
Ratings for "Fantasies"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Friday" by Uther Pendragon (anon584c@nyx.net).
{Note: I originally reviewed this extremely short story as "Mind Games" back
in CR 248.} This is one of those really good stories that I can't tell you
anything about. The best I can do is give you a related anecdote. Back when
my husband and I had been married for two years and I was heavily pregnant
with our first daughter, we went to a wedding. I introduced him to two sweet,
religious, elderly ladies who know me from long ago. One of them politely
commented that it had been a lovely wedding. My husband replied, "Yes. I
hope ours goes as well next month." The expression on the ladies' faces as
they glanced at each other and tried to avoid my gravida stomach was
priceless.
This story is sort of like that, but with strangers on elevators. And with an
unusual twist at the end.
This would have been an excellent entry for my 500-word story contest, except
that it has 802 words.
The main problem with this story is the title. At the top of the title page,
the title is "Friday." In the Postings, however, the title is "Mind Games."
Since you'll never find it if you look under "Friday," I have chosen to label
it "Mind Games" for this review.
Don't do this with strangers - the part about sheep, that is. The elevator
part is perfectly OK with strangers. It can enliven elevator rides. As well
as what comes later.
Ratings for "Mind Games"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Funhouse" by RC (74734.271@CompuServe.COM). If you have ever ridden the
"funhouse" ride in an amusement park, you have no doubt noticed that there is
a side track that does not follow the normal route. You have perhaps wondered
where that track goes. The two women in this story find out. As their car
nears the entrance, the female operator smiles mysteriously and pulls a lever
that sends them into a dark, hypnotic area that Deirdre would be proud to call
her own.
This is a good story, but it does not exhaust the full potential suggested by
its setup. Since it has been over three months since my last Annual Celestial
Writing Contest, I hereby proclaim another. The only requirement is that the
story has to include a funhouse theme. Any sort of funhouse theme that
includes sex will do. Send entries to me by April 30. I'll announce the
winners and review all entries shortly after the deadline. Authors will be
encouraged to post their stories at that time as well. In the previous two
contests we've obtained some great "Locksmith" stories and "In Flight"
fantasies. I look forward to receiving your entries. If you submit early,
I'll even give you feedback that might help you improve your story.
Ratings for "Funhouse"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9.5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
* "Mating Flight" by D.A. Ignatius (jash@kuhub.cc.ukans.edu). The sex in this
story is a little more animalistic than that to which I am accustomed -
literally. By that I mean that this story describes a mating ritual between
two dragons. Authors have a right and I guess maybe a need to stretch the
wings of their imagination, but I'm not a dragon person. In spite of what I
just said, this story did hold a certain fascination for a while; but I just
didn't know or care enough about those creatures to remain permanently
interested. I suppose a person married or engaged to a dragon or who keeps
one in the back yard might find this story more interesting than I did.
Ratings for "Mating Flight"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
* "Not Quite Hidden" by Fin Haddie (sgoodman@primenet.com). David heads for
the beach and is turned on by the attractive women he passes. He lies down by
himself in a secluded spot and notices a woman working over her lover in the
grass nearby, where they are unobserved by everyone except David. As he
watches and gets turned on, the woman turns toward him; and this causes David
to explode into a very pleasant orgasm.
This story was posted as Florida2. I suppose it goes with the preceding
story, but they are relatively independent. Even when they are combined, they
are not a complete story; but the sex in each is still pretty hot.
Ratings for "Not Quite Hidden"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
* "Dating Ritual" by Michael K. Smith (mksmith@metronet.com). This is a vivid
description of a date during which the fifteen-year-old girl is forced by peer
pressure to engage in sex that isn't very pleasant for her. I'm sure many
people will read this as a description of a really great date or of the "good
ole days." I found it to be a brutally realistic but sad story. I never went
out on a date with a boy who forced me into anal sex or made me lick his cock
clean after he stuck it into my ass. {I might add that although I myself
enjoy consensual anal sex; anal rape is likely to be painful and unhealthy.
The anal orifice doesn't self-lubricate during arousal, as does the pussy; and
so when some jerk forces himself in, the activity is likely to tear tissue.
This may sound like fun; but it can lead to medical problems. In addition,
anal rape in real life is a very good way to get and give AIDS.} I never
dated anyone just to prove that I could take his cock just as well as any
other slut could. I know girls who acted like that, and I don't know any of
them who look as happy at this time of life as I feel. I guess I'm lucky I
bought into my parents' system of morality and self respect.
I try not to do moral lectures, and I know there are no teenagers reading this
review or this story. Here is my lecture. Don't do what they do in this
story. Have sex only with someone you love and trust. But it's OK to read
this story as soon as you're old enough so that nobody is breaking any laws.
This is still a good story. I just suggest that you think twice if you think
this sounds like a lot of fun. I don't think the author saw it that way, nor
did I.
Ratings for "Dating Ritual"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Chosen" by Tom Bombadil (stbush@iglou.com). The woman is a lawyer
aspiring to become a partner in an important law firm. She receives a letter
telling her that she has been "chosen." She thinks it's a joke and tosses it
aside, but then she discovers that several other people (including her boss)
know about her selection and consider it to be an important honor.
At this point I paused and noted to myself that this author is on a Deirdre
binge. If he's trying to imitate Deirdre, I told myself, then the least I can
do is imitate my reviews of Deirdre. That means I should try to predict the
ending. This shouldn't be hard. The woman will resist briefly but within a
day will accept the invitation and arrive at the designated place. She will
be met by a stern woman whom she will eventually learn to address as Mistress.
She will find herself naked in a room with lots of other naked women, and
within a couple of weeks she will learn to answer to the wishes of whoever
happens to be her Master or Mistress. This whole new lifestyle will make her
eminently but mysteriously happy.
Well, I was close. I won't bother you with the details of where I went
astray. The interesting thing is that even though I had a pretty good idea
where the story was probably going, the author held my attention all the way
up to the end of the story. The constant state of tension was really well
maintained. The author himself said he was disappointed with this as a
"Deirdre-esq." It's a bit long for the Deirdre genre, but I thought he did an
excellent job. In fact, I think he did a better job here than in "Deck,"
where he thought he had finally reached Deirdre euphoria. Like Deirdre's
stories, this one lets the narrator make seemingly logical choices that get
her into a really bizarre situation involving sexual taboos. Also like
Deirdre, the author maintains the tension of the story masterfully; and most
importantly, at the end all of the details make perfect sense. With many of
Deirdre's stories I have been left with the impression that "this is a silly
story but I can't explain why." That's the reaction I experienced at the end
of this story: it made no sense, but yet it made perfect sense.
Ratings for "Chosen"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Exquisite Error" by Eric Shon (EricShon@aol.com). The man met the woman
via email and telephone conversations. They are just good friends (not
lovers), but he visits her and stays in her daughter's bedroom, since the
daughter is out of town at her father's house. Since he has the same first
name as the daughter's boyfriend, when the 17-year-old returns unexpectedly in
the middle of the night and finds him in her bed, he has no idea how he is
going to get out of this predicament, but he knows for damn sure WHAT he is
going to get out of it!
To learn more, you'll have to read the story. It's a good one!
Ratings for "Exquisite Error"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "The Birthday Party" by Losgud (lushgod@hotmail.com). Guest Review by DG.
I reviewed a story by losgud a while back, and while I liked the story, I
complained about the jumpy, stream-of-consciousness style, which I found a
little distracting. In this story, the author has reduced the aimless
rambling and concentrated on the narrative, and the result is, in my opinion,
a better story.
The narrator and his wife have birthdays a week apart, and he is trying to
arrange a romantic birthday weekend alone without the kids. But his sister
seems determined to ruin his plans. First she refuses to look after the kids.
Then, when he finally gets everything arranged, she comes over to visit with
his wife and refuses to leave. I don't think any longtime a.s.s. readers will
be astonished to find out what happens next, but suffice it to say that the
weekend lives up to expectations after all.
Losgud has a flippant, casual narrative style that I enjoy, and I found the
sex in this story to be quite arousing. There's nothing spectacular about
this story, but it's a good, sexy read.
As a side note, losgud mentions that this may be his last story, because he
feels he is wasting his time and isn't getting much feedback. Although I feel
as an a.s.s. author that the writing has to be its own reward, there is
something very uplifting about receiving email from people who enjoyed your
stories, and if losgud isn't getting any (pun intended) I can see why he would
get discouraged.
Ratings for "The Birthday Party"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 8
DG (appeal to reviewer): 9
* "Feed the Night" by Brother Cadfael (Brother_Cadfael@earthcorp.com). Guest
review by DG.
I always like to see some originality in a sex story; so when I realized that
"Feed the Night" was a tale about a pair of lesbian vampires, I was intrigued.
One vampire, Jezebel, makes a habit of picking up exotic dancers at a local
strip club and feeding off them. The none-too-bright owner of the club is
always complaining that his dancers never show up for work again after Jezebel
takes them home. As the story opens, Jezebel picks up a dancer named Andi and
takes her back to her place for a drink. But Jezebel likes Andi so much that
she turns her into a vampire instead of feeding off her, and they begin a
torrid affair. Then they both start having strange, ominous dreams about the
same dark man, and it is up to the new vampire, Andi, to save Jezebel from her
past.
I liked the plot and characters in this story, but I thought the execution
could have been a lot better. The middle section, when Jezebel and Andi are
both recovering from the conversion of Andi into a vampire, drags a bit. And
I didn't really find myself getting into the sex scenes very much. As much as
I enjoy watching women have sex with each other, I really don't enjoy reading
about it all that much, especially when it's written in the third person by
male writer. I guess I need to be able to identify with one of the characters
to really get turned on. On the positive side, the story does have a
mysterious, gothic atmosphere and an ambitious plot. If you are a fan of
erotic vampire stories, a la Anne Rice, you will enjoy "Feed the Night."
Ratings for "Feed the Night"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 9
DG (appeal to reviewer): 8
* "Commencement" by Vickie Tern. The four pairs of husbands and wives have
gathered at one of their houses to celebrate Super Bowl Sunday - the men in
one room doing manly things like watching the game, drinking, belching, and
making fun of their wives; and the women in a nearby room doing more cerebral
things but hearing and being offended by the coarse discussion in the adjacent
chamber. Something needs to be done to teach these assholes a lesson.
So how do we get from what I've just described to "Commencement," the title of
this story? The women develop a strategy to educate their husbands - not just
to get even with them, but to rehabilitate them; and the completion of an
educational program calls for a commencement. Hence the title. I'm not going
to try to describe the entire rehabilitation program to you, except to say
that it involves both hormones and careful training. And a butt plug - for
those of you who know about such things. It's an ingenious program; read
about it for yourself. The plan worked so well that one of the wives
eventually began thinking she might rent her husband out as a call girl for
perverts when the project was finished.
The story is presented in the context of one woman talking to another. While
telling the story, the narrator is functioning in a world in which
stereotypical male and female roles have been reversed - for example, she's
running the business that her husband used to operate, while she gives orders
to an effeminate male secretary who is kind of dimwitted but functions well if
she instructs him carefully and while her husband stays at home and keeps
himself and the house pretty.
The manuscript contains several typos, which I easily ignored. In addition,
verb tenses were sometimes confused; but I assume the author was doing that on
purpose to simulate the erratic conversational context in which the story was
being presented. I have learned to expect from this author really clever
plots with an eccentric feminist twist; and this story did not disappoint me.
The plot is farfetched, but it's so crazy it just might work! The part I
found hardest to believe was that the women could do this to their husbands
without laughing in their faces.
This is the fourth story I have read by this author, who has also written
"Sooo Sweet," "Nice!", and "Girls' Night Out." I liked all three of the
others better - but that's pretty high-class company! {I liked Julius Caesar
best of all of Shakespeare's plays; but I wouldn't want him to feel that I was
saying the plays he wrote after Caesar were "bad." Some acts are hard t
ofollow.} My favorite has been "Nice!" What this one lacked was the surprise
twists in the plot that I found in the eralier stories. Maybe I'm just
catching on to the author's style and am not so easily surprised any more.
One thing this author does extremely well is cover all the possible
explanations for what is happening in an exceedingly complex plot; and she
accomplishes this without making the story tedious. This is not a turn-me-on
story; but it is a highly enjoyable, funny, thought-provoking tale.
Another excellent story!
Ratings for "Commencement"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "The Gathering" by Patrick Donovan (drwho@world.std.com). The man's lover
has come from a distant city to visit him in Indianapolis. After he and
Kathryn have made passionate love several times, another couple arrives
unexpectedly for a visit. Kevin is a professional masseur, and his girlfriend
is one of his best students. After the spend the evening out, they return to
the apartment, where Kevin and Nancy offer to give Kathryn a massage. The
narrator joins in, and the massage becomes much more than simple physical
therapy - it becomes VERY physical therapy indeed.
I'm not going to try to describe in detail the ensuing orgy - except to say
that it's some of the hottest sex I've ever read. A potential turn-off to
some readers (but not to me) is the fact that there's male/male sex as well as
variations more common to group sex stories in this newsgroup. I suggest that
you just be open-minded and enjoy it, even if that's not your style; otherwise
you'll miss a great story.
Ratings for "The Gathering"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
*"Cocktail Table" by Sue. Sue accepts an invitation to a party from some
graduate students who admire her literary work. After the initial fuss over
her arrival, everyone sits around in a quiet circle with their hands on their
laps while Sue reads "Slippery When Wet" to the group. Everyone gets turned
on by the splendid reading, and the spokesman for the group suggests that Sue
may want to leave before the ensuing orgy begins. Sue chooses to stay.
Actually, Sue tells it better; so read the story.
I shall now respond to the one unanswered question in Sue's story: the plural
of "clitoris" is "clitorises". Interestingly enough, my spellcheck recognized
this plural, even though it failed to recognize "anally," "Sistine,"
"dominatrix," and "supermodel." I verified this plural in my unabridged
dictionary, where the word is found right after "cliticize" (the meaning of
which may surprise you) and on the same page with a picture of a cloister.
Talk about a screwed up value system! The dictionary defines clit, clitoris,
and cliticize (and 101 pages later gives three definitions for cunt, which
happen to come right before Mario Cuomo - now there's a coincidence for you),
but it gives a picture of a cloister instead of a clitoris! I mean, how many
readers in all of history have looked at the definition of a cloister and
said, "Damn! I wish I had a picture to clear this up for me!" Sorry about the
digression; but Sue did raise the original question in her story.
{Well, now that I have already digressed, I might mention that I did a double-
take during proofreading - 101 pages of definitions between clitoris and
Cuomo? Yes, that's right. Yesterday a prissy student came up to my desk and
told me that another student - who was disgruntled over her grade - had called
me "the c-word." I asked her to be more specific, but she couldn't utter "the
c-word" out loud. She doesn't realize how truly ambiguous her accusation
was!}
This was a very enjoyable story. I have only one problem with it, and that
problem is akin to the play within a play theme that often occurs in
Shakespeare. When Sue has six guys shoot their jism all over her body (never
mind the cunt juices that are flowing like milk and honey) - when she gets her
pastry frosted by six guys at once, whose record is she breaking? (Not mine,
certainly!) She compares it to the four guys whose snorkels she cleared in
"Slippery When Wet," but that's a work of fiction, and is recognized as such
even in the present work of fiction. Sue herself is actually a most demure
person who probably isn't even named Sue and almost certainly has not
participated in Onan's Olympics with more than two male partners at the same
time. So what we have here is a fiction within a fiction and how do we know
that even that is not fiction? In other words, that that is not is not that
that is. (I was tempted to replace "in other words" with "that is" in the
preceding sentence, but then the thought would have become confusing.)
Sorry. Even though I am a most cunning linguist I just never had a chance to
say that last sentence in a meaningful context before. If you're ever in
danger of premature orgasm, try repeating and understanding that sentence, and
it will probably keep you from coming at least until your partner catches up
with you.
Ratings for "Cocktail Table"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
*"A Night at Suzy's" by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com). It's Orgy Night at
Suzy's, and the gang has prevailed upon a renowned goddess of a.s.s. to bring
some high quality stories from her extensive collection to read aloud as a
mood setter. By coincidence the author of Celeste's Pick of the Week happens
to be present; and as luck would have it, everyone likes everyone else and a
good time is had by all.
I have to admit that I am flattered to become part of such a hot evening of
sex, but I want to assure you that flattery in no way influences my ratings.
The author knows this, and I suppose that's why he toned down my sexuality a
little. No offense taken. There's not much to say about this story: read it
- you'll get your bang for your buck.
This author follows a practice that few others follow. He writes his story,
lets a couple of weeks pass, and then revises the story before he posts it.
This takes discipline, but it is often worth it. I know Mark does this,
because he sent me a copy of the draft three weeks ago, asking for permission
to defame me in the way he has done in this story.
Ratings for "A Night at Suzy's"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Angelic Interlude" by Joe Parsons (jmp@cyber-mall.com). The man and woman
have communicated for some time through cyberspace. They have never met, but
she has described her fantasies of what she would like to do to him. Now she
is coming to visit him in person, and he is waiting for her plane at the
airport. Her name is Angel; hence the title.
I guess almost everybody who reads stories on this newsgroup has a fantasy of
this happening - even those of us who have no intention of ever consummating
such a relationship. Of course, this is just the cyberspace version of the
old honky-tonk romance that the country-western singers tell us about. The
odds are actually pretty remote that a guy will have the three best orgasms
of his life within an hour after getting out of the car in a wilderness
clearing after picking up his mysterious lover at the airport. But isn't it
pretty to think so?
So the storyline is trite, but it's well written and just plain hot sex.
Ratings for "Angelic Interlude"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
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