Message-ID: <10444eli$9804211144@qz.little-neck.ny.us> From: Lady Cyrrh <LadyCyrrh@aol.com> Subject: The Annex Reviews, 4/19/98 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-transfer-encoding: 7bit Content-type: text/plain; charset=US-ASCII Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: <usenet-approval@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Story-Submission: <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Original-Message-ID: <1aca26c2.353ae827@aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes A few people have been complaining about problems with my website. I reloaded the main page (the "table of contents" one) that seemed to be the culprit, but we'll just have to see. The problem seemed to be the meta code from the SafeSurf link. If problems persist, please tell me. The stories: Little Filly, by EZwriter (M/F ponygirl, romantic) Jungle Ecstasy, Chapters 1 and 2, by Jorgen Karlsson (M/F, cons) My Slut Diaries - Beach, by Babette Chandler (M/F, cons, slut) Nunc Dimittis 5a and 5b, by Andrej Koymasky (M/M wartime romance) ManDance, by Rajah Dodger (M/F, femdom, striptease) The Tape, by Asparrow (M/F, D/S) Little Filly [A] Where Received: 4/9/98 Author:EzWriter Address: dee@onramp.net A woman goes into a singles bar and meets an older cowboy in his 50s. She's attracted to his courtliness and they go back to his ranch, where he informs her, "You are a beautiful little filly. I want to exercise you a little and then put you in the stall with my stallion so he can mount you." The narrator is more than a little alarmed (and aroused) by this, but by the tone of the story, it's clear the cowboy is only teasing her and that the "stallion" is really himself. An expert horseman, he undresses the heroine, feeds her subarcubes, bridles her, and turns her out for a run. All this is done with gentleness and affection, for, as the cowboy says, "Horses are beautiful and sensual creatures." No one gets whipped or strapped in wierd little pieces of leather. In sum, a romantic ponygirl story minus the gear. I liked it! Jungle Ecstasy, Chapters 1 and 2 [B-] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 4/14/98 Author:Joergen Karlsson Address: joergen.karlsson@mbox302.swipnet.se I'm all for multinational sex stories. After all, English- speaking people hardly have a corner on porn. However, the above story makes a good case for choosing one's translater very carefully. The story was the first two chapters of a longer novel translated from Swedish dealing with M/F sex, F/F sex, humiliation, and cruelty, though this excerpt only dealt with the the M/F sex. The setting seems to be a prehistoric hunter/gatherer never-never land. Loukee and Mannee, members of a primitive tribe, go about their daily business and have sex in a river, while Hee, a ripening teenager, kills a wild pig and has an orgasm over it. I'm not kidding. Not intrinsically flawed stuff, and the old world quality of the prose gave it a stately, dignified feel. But what is one to make of passages like "Hee held her breath, placed an arrow in her bow and waited. A flock of pigs, four grown and three babies, closed in on the watercourse. She smiled to herself. "Uncautious pigs", she thought. Like shooting at a tied down prey?" It's almost like a Monty Python parody. I wanted to be generous with this story, because it was trying to convey a healthy, all-natural Scandinavian attitude towards sex in the Iron Age; but, well, something got lost in the translation. My Slut Diaries - Beach [C-] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 4/17/98 Author: Babette Chandler Address: slutbabs@hotmail.com There was no way I could be as generous or insightful with this story as I was with the one above. The piece is of the "look at what a slut I am" variety and purports to be a diary entry. Yeah, right. Like young women really write things like "This weekend I was at the beach. I wore my bright green string bikini, the top had triangles that just barely covered my 36D's and the bottom was a small triangle held on by two strings around my 26"waist, and one running up the crack of my Ass. " The slut runs into an old boyfriend she still has the hots for, but he's with his wife, the slut's former rival who snagged the prize salami by becoming pregnant. Does this deter our heroine? No, for "I moved the material of my bikini bottom aside so he could see my pink shaved Cunt. As he continued to look, I spread my legs wide and started to touch myself there. I rubbed my clit and let him see how hot it got me, I fingered myself and looked straight in his eyes. It was so cool cause Gail was right there. He kept looking and I sucked my fingers and lips, his Cock got real hard I could see it." The rest of the story takes things from there. I know this was supposed to be a stroke story and not bound by the rules of normal fiction, but the whole thing sounds like it was written by a character from "Melrose Place" who's suffering from heavy brain damage. The author also has a penchant for capitalizing really important words like Ass and Cunt, just to let us know this is a sex story. Stories like this are scary. What do they say about the average level of literary sophistication in this country? Nunc Dimittis, 5a and 5b [A] Where posted: ASSGM When posted: 4/8/98 Author: Andrej Koymasky Address: andrejkoymasky@geocities.com Website: http://www.geocities.com/WestHollywood/Village/4159/ On the eve of WWII, a reporter of British citizenry but Italian descent has an affair with a young British Lord whose family owns the London Times newspaper. Real life intrudes, and the two find themselves serving in the Royal Navy on the same ship. This chapter was an excerpt from a longer novel available on the author's web site. Like "Jungle Ecstasy" this story was written by a non-English speaker (Italian, in this case) but the translation was accomplished much more smoothly. I could see the story working very well as a PBS drama, a sort of gay historical drama/romance taking place against the political background of occupied Europe. It sounds like the author is writing from firsthand experience, in the sense of living through the era...such as the revelation that priests and nuns piloted boats to participate in the evacuation of Dunkirk. Interesting stuff, without or without the romance. ManDance [A-] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 4/14/98 Author: Rajah Dodger Address: rdodger@hotmail.com Rajah says this is the first sex story he wrote, and with a birthdate of 1990. that makes it venerable among sex stories. Authors and websites come and go so fast, the shelf life of any neterotica seems to be measured in months, maybe 3 years if it's archived at a popular site. The story is slightly rough as regards style, but still good smutty fun. A guy tries to pick up women by posing as an exotic male dancer. He hits the jackpot when three gals take him home to give a private performance for them. He's never danced before, but so what? He strips to various pieces of music (among them Pink Floyd and Eric Clapton) then the ladies chain him to a bench and assault him most pleasurably. All in all, a nice take on a femdom tale without the cruelty that infests the genre. Tape.1 [A-/B+] Where posted: ASS, ASSM When posted: 4/16/98 Author: Asparrow Posted by: The Master Address: themaster@nym.alias.net As anyone one who reads these postings regularly knows, I have a soft spot for BDSM fiction. When it's done well, it's very, very arousing. When it's done poorly, it's very, very stupid. And when people take it seriously, it's very, very silly. That's the case with this story. It's framed as a transcription of a cassette tape a dom has sent to his sub, a list of instructions of what she is to do and how she is to do it, like: "Ah, yes and now move to one of my favorite parts. Yes, down to your breasts. Ah yes, squeeze them, slave girl. Oh, I am enjoying the sight of this. Squeeze them, slave girl, rub them. Oh, and don't ignore those nipples. No. Mmmmm. Yes, do it just as if I were there, doing it for you instead while you were chained helplessly, unable to resist. Which, in truth you are, whether I bother to chain you or not. Isn't that right, slave girl? Mmm. So nice. Definitely one of your more attractive features. Keep your back straight, slave girl! Keep it straight. No slouching before your master. It would...displease me. Yes, keep playing with those nipples, slave girl. Twist them gently, roll them back and forth. Oooh yes, keep them awake, I like the sight of them. " I get the giggles even *imagining* people in the real world doing this. I mean, it's ridiculous. What else can you say about two people masturbating alone and pretending they're masturbating together, or a woman who takes subbing so seriously she'll follow a set of taped instructions to the letter? Now I'm going to do a 180 degree reversal and say this *was* an unusual and arousing story for those who like D/s, though a bit too repetitive perhaps. But it was funny, too. Very funny. Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com Website---> http://members.aol.com/ladycyrrh -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us |