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Celestial Reviews 215 - September 10, 1997
Note: Remember: even though someone else may be posting my reviews for me, my
e-mail address is still Celeste801@aol.com.
- Celeste
"Three's Company" by Damya (threesome) 9, 8, 7
"Description of Woman Masturbating" by Damya
(Masturbation) 10, 8, 8
"Old Friends" by Damya (ff quickie) 9, 8, 8
"I Want You So Bad" by Unknown Author (sleepy sex)
9, 5, 5
"Closer" by Unknown Author (exhibitionism & voyeurism)
10, 9, 9
"Adventures on Gilligans Island" by Erneym (sitcom
parody) 6, 5, 5
"Our Private Island" by Unknown Author (romance)
10, 9, 9
Guest Reviews:
"The Neighbor's Pool" by DevoSpudC (poolside romance)
9, 10, 10
"Writer's Block" by MC Woodsmoke (mind control & sex
slavery) 9, 9.5, 9
"Dana's Weekend" by Unknown Author (threesome)
9.5, 9, 8
"Ursula" by Friar Dave (emerging adolescence) 10, 10, 10
"Higher Education" by Stephen Parker (sex with teacher)
6, 7, 5
Reposted Reviews:
* "The Surprise" by Charles Kessler (bdsm) 9.5, 8, 6
* "Surprise" by Damya (spouse watching) 9, 5, 5
* "Rain" by Damya (romance) 10, 10, 10
* "In the Middle of the Night" by Damya (romantic interlude)
10, 8, 8
* "Victoria" by Unknown Author (quickie) 10, 8, 9
* "Sex in the Great Outdoors" by Unknown Author
(voyeurism & outdoor sex).9.5, 9, 9
* "Gilligan's Island" by Shelby Bush (sitcom parody)
10, 10, 10
* "Alt.Gilligan's Island" by Leo Sanderson (sitcom parody)
8, 10, 10
* "Gilligan Mashukah" by Richard Dunstan (sitcom parody)
10, 10, 10
"Three's Company" by Damya (Repost by Bookman Archives
<readebks@wolfenet.COM>). Someone has reposted several of Damya's stories,
and so I'll repost my old reviews and write new reviews for as many as
possible of the ones I missed. Damya was one of the best authors on this
newsgroup when I started reviewing. I suspect that her stories currently
will not make the Top 20 list for this month. I say that merely to suggest
how many good stories have appeared within the past couple of years.
In spite of its title, this story has nothing to do with the TV show of the
same name. Raven's two closest friends are men, and on her 21st birthday
they surprise her with an emboinkment. This threesome is a little different
from most that we see on this newsgroup: the two guys are obviously hot for
each other as well as for Raven.
Ratings for "Three's Company"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
"Description of Woman Masturbating" by Damya (Repost by Bookman Archives
<readebks@wolfenet.COM>). The only thing wrong with this story is that it is
extremely short. If I write much more, this review will be as long as the
story. I'll let you guess what it's about.
Ratings for "Description of Woman Masturbating"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Old Friends" by Damya (Repost by Bookman Archives <readebks@wolfenet.COM>).
The narrator is awakened in the early morning by her distraught friend,
whose lover has left her. What can the narrator do? Well, she can make love
to the distraught friend. This story seemed to be a lot better when I first
saw it a couple of years ago, before there were so many stories with better
character development available on this newsgroup.
Ratings for "Old Friends"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"I Want You So Bad" by Unknown Author (Repost by Bookman Archives
<readebks@wolfenet.COM>). I think there's another part of this story
entitled "Later That Night." One of the problems of posting stories in parts
is that sometimes they become separated, especially when the titles show no
relationship. I suspect that the ratings for this story would be much higher
if I weren't left hanging at the end.
As it is, the guy wakes his lover up, telling her how much he wants her.
He's already pretty hot, and then he gets her really going. Then he takes a
break and goes to the bathroom. And then the story ends. See what I mean?
Ratings for "I Want You So Bad"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
"Closer" by Unknown Author (Repost by Bookman Archives
<readebks@wolfenet.COM>). A closer is a pitcher on a baseball team who comes
in to pitch the last inning or so when his team is ahead. He replaces either
the starter or the set-up man. For his services, he gets credit for a save.
That has nothing to do with this story (in which the title is the
comparative form of an adjective), but I thought I should convince you jocks
out there that I know something about baseball.
In this story the man comes home and catches his wife masturbating. She
encourages him to watch and then to join the fun. A good time is had by both.
Ratings for "Closer"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
"Adventures on Gilligans Island" by Erneym (erneym@cvn.net). This is the
weakest Gilligan parody I have seen. The problem is that it reads like a
summary rather than a story. My advice to this author would be to go into
more detail and plot development surrounding a smaller number of sexual
escapades. To cover the present number of sexual events, it would be
necessary to have a much longer story.
Three better Gilligan stories are "Gilligan's Island" by Shelby Bush,
"Gilligan Mashukah" by Richard Dunstan, and "Alt.Gilligan's.Island" by Leo
Sanderson. I'll repost all three reviews, and perhaps someone will repost
the stories.
Ratings for "Adventures on Gilligans Island"
Athena (technical quality): 6
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
"Our Private Island" by Unknown Author (Repost by Bookman Archives
<readebks@wolfenet.COM>). If those people who advertise island vacations
were allowed to promote their R&R holidays with sexually explicit material,
they could use this story. It describes the way any sexually vibrant couple
would like things to go during their week in paradise. The sex is really
very romantic and very hot. The main thing I would do to improve this story
would be to replace the second person (you) frame of reference with a simple
third person narrative.
Ratings for "Our Private Island"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"The Neighbor's Pool" by DevoSpudC (cwilson9@ix.netcom.com). Guest review by
BluePencil.
It's always nice to have good neighbors.
Home from college for the summer, Adam volunteered to house sit for his
parents while they are gone on vacation. As nice as the peace and quiet were
after finals week, Adam was getting a little bored. And, thanks to a heat
wave and a rather anemic cooler, a bit too hot. Since new neighbors, with a
daughter his age, had moved into the house next door - the one with a pool -
it seems that introducing himself might be the answer to both problems.
How do you introduce yourself to your next door neighbor when she is
beautiful, naked, and masturbating beside the pool? After some initial
fumbles, Adam comes up with an answer.
This story didn't go where I expected. A setup like this just screams "hot
mindless sex!", but the plot and characterization developed at a much more
leisurely pace. The sex, though hot, was far from mindless, and worked quite
well with the oddly sweet conclusion. A very likable story.
Ratings for "The Neighbor's Pool"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot and character): 10
BluePencil (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Writer's Block" by MC Woodsmoke (woodsmok@gte.net). Guest review by Piper.
If you recall, in my last review ("The Art Critic"), I talked about a man who
made a life-altering mistake by accepting an invitation to a woman's place
for a cup of tea. This time, it's a woman who makes the same mistake. Only,
she goes with a man to a public coffee house. The invitor is one of her
"heroes" - an author of many (at least 16) romance novels. Ruth (the woman)
has been reading them since she was 14 years old. According to the story,
she is now a 19 year old college student - a beautiful peach of a woman, ripe
for the fall harvest.
Unlike the man in my last review, Ruth was chosen because of her intelligence
and imagination, as well as for her beauty. You see, Alan, (the author in
the story, not the author of the story) has a problem. Or rather, he says he
has a problem. A slight case of writer's block. (Slight? Hah! That's like
being slightly pregnant!) He wants Ruth to help him. Of course she's more
than willing to help in any way she can. In his house. In his private
study. With the door locked. With her sitting in a chair, mesmerized by the
afternoon sunshine coming through some trees, then through a louvered window,
to spotlight her in the middle of the room. That's where the story
more-or-less starts and where the fun begins. Alan has written the outline
of a new book. Now he needs to flesh it out and bring the characters to life
and make the sex scenes hot, realistic, and believable.
Like most mind control stories involving drugs, hypnotism, special mind
powers, or whatever, this one requires the reader to suspend their disbelief
somewhat, or the story remains nothing but a far fetched bit of unrealistic
fantasy. In this case, I had a hard time believing that Ruth had been
allowed to read his stories when she was 14. After all, the censors,
do-gooders, and morality police, not to mention her parents, would probably
get most upset about romance novels that actually contained real sex.
Children read them. Young, impressionable girls read them. They might
learn something, or get "ideas". Horrors! According to them, XXX-rated
stories are NOT the kind of thing young girls should be allowed access to.
Of course, we all know that young boys are already corrupt because they read
science fiction and heroic fantasy novels, and those are already liberally
laced with the stuff. It's too late to "save" them (us) from eternal
damnation. Right?
Back to the story. Alan outlines the basic plot of his newest story to Ruth
(Ruth Ann Sawyer), and asks her to assume the role of Roxanne Starling, a
young woman whom the hero (Dan Dawson) has just saved from a horrible life of
sex slavery to an African tribal chief. Only, he wasn't quite in time since
she had already been forced to drink the potion which would turn her into a
sex-starved nymphomaniac. Ruth Ann gets into character as Roxanne quite
quickly and easily, and comes up with a wonderfully realistic portrayal of a
young girl, all alone in a tent, who is burning up with sexual passion. She
describes the action in fine, hot, erotic detail, while he bangs away -- at
his computer keyboard. Myself, I wondered whether she was just talking, or
whether she was acting out the action as she spoke. I got my answer in the
second chapter when Tracie Gault, acting as the character Trace Gelt, joins
in. Ruth isn't the first woman to visit Alan's den.
About half way through the second chapter, I knew where the stories (both the
story and the story-in-the-story) were going. It was obvious. Why did I
keep reading? (I mean besides finishing the story so I could review it.)
Because the action was hot, and the writing was pretty good. Details.
Details. They make all the difference.
The mind control portion of this story was pretty lame. Nobody outside of
the KGB or CIA has access to the kind of drugs this guy is supposed to be
using (secret drug from New Guinea? Groan!). Lame, though, is relative.
This plot makes at least as much sense as 80% of the other MC stories I've
read. The rest of the story was pretty interesting, the way the story
blended in with the story-within-the-story, and the way the protagonists took
on the roles of the characters they were supposedly pretending to be. And
the language usage was also fairly good, although there were places where the
word selection, in my opinion, was inappropriate for a young, fairly
innocent, woman (this applies to Ruth Ann and Roxanne equally).
Technically (hey, technical marks are a requirement, aren't they?) there are
a few problems. A couple of wrong or missing words here and there. Some bad
punctuation. "Her self" rather than herself in a few places. Nothing major.
Plus a .5 deduction for making me try to make sense of some nonsense
sentences.
All in all, this is a story I could recommend for the MC crowd as well as for
anyone who likes a fairly imaginative story.
Rating for "Writer's Block"
Technical merit 9
Plot & character 9.5
Appeal to reviewer 9
"Dana's Weekend" by Unknown Author (Natm5p@aol.com). Guest review by Anne747.
I'm never sure that I like stories that start in the middle of a sex scene.
To some extent this story at least has a good reason. I still find it hard
though to get into it that quickly. After a couple of orgasms the husband
makes a joke about 'bringing in help'. After another round, this time with
some fantasizing, they begin to actually discuss making it a reality. A
weekend is arranged with a single male friend, and a fairly hot threesome
ensues.
The discussion and planning of the upcoming threesome is fairly realistic. I
can identify with some of the conversations I've had myself. At times the
language could use a little watching. It can be a hard trap to avoid; but
for example, there are 9 occurrences of the word naughty. Possibly changing
a few might be a better choice. My thesaurus came up with 15 choices, 3 or 4
which would have been good alternatives.
This also brings up a problem I first had when spell-checking a story. It is
very important to add some of the more common words to your word processor's
dictionary. If you are constantly picking 'skip' it can be easy to miss one
or two. There were only a couple of misspelled words in this piece, so I
would guess that a spell-check was done, but perhaps a few were just missed.
Or the writer is an amazing typist!
Overall a pretty realistic piece about a hot threesome. A slight difference
in the 'positions' would have made it a better read for me, but that's
because I have my own ideas of the perfect threesome. ;)
Ratings for "Dana's Weekend"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 9
Anne747 (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Ursula" by Friar Dave (friar_dave@mhbbs.com). Guest review by Mike Hunt.
Well, in a.s.s. there are writers and there are writers, and if you want a
big long list go get Ole Joe's compendium. Then there are GOOD writers and
there are a few GREAT writers, and Friar Dave would have to be on that short
list. As Ole Joe sez, Friar Dave tends to write long stories mostly about
very young experiences, and "Ursula" is no exception. It's a multi-chapter
story that ran 70 pages with the topic as predicted.
"Ursula" is the story of a 12-year-old just discovering her sexuality, and we
are led through episodes in which she experiences her first masturbation,
first blowjob, first cunnilingus, first sex, and first anal entry. It's a
tour-de-force of "firsts" and they're all erotic, stimulating, and downright
lewd. Friar Dave connects the dots with believable characters and realistic
settings, and the words flow and chapters link and draw the reader eagerly
through the action, of which there is plentymucho.
Normally I'm a little uncomfortable with stories about 12 year olds, but
having written a "first sex" story or two myself, it would be a quibble to
complain. I will pick a nit about Ursula's multiple orgasms in multiple
settings, and about the over-rapid development of her breasts in a one-year
span of the story, but as I say, it's a nit.
This is not a new story; in fact it carries a 1986 copyright. It's been
reposted by Ole Joe, apparently, and he shows exceptional taste in bringing
it back for your entertainment. Enjoy.
I REALLY liked it. Or maybe it's just because I woke up at 3:00 this morning
with an erection. Dunno.
Ratings for "Ursula"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Mikeus (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Higher Education" by Stephen Parker (hitemp@blast.net). Guest review by
Wherryman.
Mary is a college student, and since this story is in a.s.s.m it doesn't take
a genius to work out what she's going to be learning.
Having done badly in a test, Mary needs to persuade her teacher to allow a
makeover exam. He suggests that they discuss it further, she agrees, and the
professor books a motel room. He also tells a colleague about the
arrangement.
At the motel Mary is soon getting a lesson in oral sex. She blows her
teacher, and while he is reciprocating in walks the colleague. Together they
give Mary more tuition; in fact they're soon giving it to her in both ends at
once. Her makeover exam is more of the same, but it seems Mary is not a fast
learner. The professor is only going to give her a D but offers an
extra-credit question. This involves some lesbian action with the maid; and
although Mary is reluctant at first, she soon gets into the subject while
both professors get into her.
Not exactly an original plot, but it has potential. Unfortunately that
potential is not delivered. The story reads like an outline for a story
rather the finished article. The characters are one dimensional, the action
mechanical, and the situations seem contrived. The maid, for instance, seems
to be written in to satisfy some formula; perhaps the author feels that all
stories need some FF action.
The work in progress feel also applies to some of the phrasing - the author
writes about 'scum stained tits' (perhaps Mary bathes in stagnant water?) -
and to the punctuation. If this story was an assignment, the mark would be a
D, with the comment 'needs more work'.
Ratings for "Higher Education"
Technical merit 6
Plot & character 7
Appeal to reviewer 5
* "The Surprise" by Charles Kessler (kessler@net-market.com). This is a
story about a man who has been helping his wife expand her limits by
inflicting pain on her to teach her to be submissive. She loves this, and
she is gratified when she buys him some new toys that enable him to punish
and thrill her more effectively. She is also happy to be able to help him
expand his own horizons by fucking him in the ass with a dildo that she gives
him as a present.
Near the beginning of the story Charles says to RoxAnne, "I am going to spank
you now for my pleasure. I want you to be aware of my desire for you all
through dinner. I want to know that some of your attention is on your bottom
to remind you of what awaits you when return." Now, omitting the first
sentence, my husband has probably said just about this same thing to me.
However, instead of beating me with a large paddle ("within my limits," of
course), he has focused my attention and has managed to preoccupy our mutual
minds by doing other things: sometimes he gives me flowers or perfume;
sometimes I find his unshod foot moving up my leg while we eat at a
restaurant; sometimes he makes double entendre remarks to the waitress so
that only I know what's really on his mind. He also loves it when I lean
across the table and notify him that I'm not wearing any panties or when I
lick my lips and describe what I hope to do to him when we get home. My
point is that to get the benefits that Charles describes to RoxAnne the
paddle and the pain are unnecessary.
I think pain COULD remind me of sexual pleasure - but not if it's
deliberately inflicted by the person who says he loves me. Years ago my
husband and I were playing racquetball together and he accidentally drilled
me with a killshot. Later that evening he told me he was sorry; I told him
to kiss it to make it better; and we had a good ole time. For the next few
days, that pain DID remind me of his love for me. But if he would have asked
me to go and stand by the front wall so that he could hit me with a killshot
to prove his love for me, I would have told him to fuck himself - in the bad
sense of that expression.
My husband has also made love to me with so much vigor that I was sore
afterwards. While that was happening, I screamed for more, even though I
probably knew I'd be sore. Being sore for the next couple of days actually
did turn me on. This is analogous to feeling good when my stomach growls
from hunger at night (because I know I am winning the battle of the bulge) or
when my muscles and lungs hurt during a physical workout. There's
significant pain involved, but the pain has been inflicted as a side effect -
not to give capricious pleasure to the person inflicting the pain.
I CAN understand how pain can be sexy in a cultural context different from my
own. For example, in a slave-owning society a woman might be a lot better
off with a man who would beat her and screw her and love her than with one
who would beat her and screw her and not love her. But the best thing to do
with a slave-owning society is to abolish it.
I may be missing something. There are people whom I suspect to be normal who
enjoy deliberately inflicting and receiving fairly extreme forms of pain.
What I have tried to explain in the preceding paragraphs is the perspective
of a "friendly outsider" who simply cannot understand this. To be perfectly
honest, I had a friend once who was in a relationship that sounded like the
one described in this story; and I suggested that she a counselor. She saw a
shrink; then she confronted her boyfriend; he changed his pattern of
behavior; and they have been together now for nearly ten years. He now gives
her flowers and plays footsie with her. As I understand it, they do a lot of
bondage, but he never intentionally inflicts pain on her.
I do not mean this as a moral lecture, but rather as literary advice. A very
large number of people who follow this newsgroup think the way I do regarding
this issue. If authors of bdsm stories want to make sense to this broad
audience of relatively tolerant readers, they should develop the plot in such
a way as to make the story believable to a wider audience, not just to people
who already buy into the idea that it is a great idea to inflict pain on
somebody in order to make him/her love the person giving the punishment. To
put it another way - a major problem with this story is that an ordinary
reader like myself does not receive enough information to distinguish the
people in this story from real sickos who ought to get their act together.
Aside from the groundless bdsm, I enjoyed other elements of the story that
some people might consider to be kinky. For example, the man has a secret
longing to have his ass stimulated during sexual intercourse; and so his
lover approaches him with a strap-on dildo and with Ben Wa balls inserted
into her own pussy. If you think spanking a woman to climax is sexy, you'll
find this story to be even more enjoyable than I did.
Ratings for "The Surprise"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6
* "Surprise" by Damya (Repost by Bookman Archives <readebks@wolfenet.COM>).
This is one of the first stories I ever reviewed - back in CR 1. I am
reposting the review here with updated ratings. I never used to get high on
the idea of watching my husband fuck somebody else, nor did I like the idea
of doing it while he watched. But we talked it over several years ago, and
we agreed that it would actually be stimulating to watch the other make it
with someone else - as long as the possibility of disease could be avoided
(which, of course, is possible, in imaginary worlds). It would be
stimulating for us, but impossible in reality, since we see so much value in
our monogamous relationship. (To me, the fact that I share this wonderful
experience with my husband and with him alone makes it by definition
impossible to invite another party into the relationship.) So we've settled
for an active fantasy life, where he sometimes talks to me about what he'd
like to do to a woman in a movie or on the street, and I do the same for him.
Now back to the story - I guess I'm making the point that I see problems
inherent in the plot; but if I weren't so fortunate as to have this really
great bargain relationship, I have to admit that the basic idea behind this
plot sounds good. There are lots of good spouse watching stories, but this
one doesn't quite make it for me. The author says she's writing it for her
boyfriend; and it might have served that purpose really well. If so, I hope
they get their bang for their buck. But there are better wife watching
stories this one. The reasons to read this story are (1) to find enjoyment
in hearing about an interesting situation or (2) to get really turned on
while reading it. I don't think either outcome is really all that likely.
On the other hand, the story is not awful either. It just somehow failed to
give me as a woman the vicarious experience of driving my husband into sexual
heaven by letting him watch me do exciting things to someone else. I hope
Damya herself had better luck.
Ratings for "Surprise"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
* "Rain" by Damya (Repost by Bookman Archives <readebks@wolfenet.COM>). I was
disappointed with this story, because the couple came in from the rain before
making love. But that was the only source of disappointment that this story
gave me. This is an exceptionally good tale of warm and gentle passion
between two persons who have been lovers for a long time. I have reviewed
several of Damya's stories and have often commented that they were good
*partial* stories; but this one is an excellent *complete* story. Damya
shows exceptional strength at developing a mood and at integrating every
element of the story with that mood. An excellent story!
Ratings for "Rain"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "In the Middle of the Night" by Damya (Repost by Bookman Archives
<readebks@wolfenet.COM>). This isn't really a complete story - just a very
hot romantic interlude - a snippet describing what a horny woman does to wake
up and thrill her man in the middle of the night.
Ratings for "In the Middle of the Night"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
* "Victoria" by Unknown Author (Repost by Bookman Archives
<readebks@wolfenet.COM>). I originally saw this posted as "Victoria's
Secrets+". In this story Victoria is driving along the highway and suddenly
realizes that her stick shift on the floor resembles something else she would
prefer to be caressing. She reverses direction and heads for home,
practically cumming in her panties while she continues to fondle the
gearshift. When she gets home, she finds her significant other reading the
morning paper and fondling his dick. She replaces his hand with her own
body, and a good time is had by both.
Ratings for "Victoria"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
* "Sex in the Great Outdoors" by Unknown Author (Repost by Bookman Archives
<readebks@wolfenet.COM>). The last time I reiewed this story it was entitled
"Outdoors" by Planet Mojo (Mojo@bitsmart.com). As I understand it, Planet
Mojo is the name of a web site (http://www.planetmojo.com) at which this and
other stories can be found. This story is about a woman who has discovered
that her husband's passion for her has cooled in the days since they tied the
knot. While she accompanies him on a birdwatching expedition, she comes upon
<g> another couple making love in the woods. This inspires her to think of
ways to spice up her own love life.
Ratings for "Outdoors"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
* "Gilligan's Island" by Shelby Bush (stbush@iglou.com). The previous two
sexual parodies of sitcoms were good, but this one is the quintessential
sexual parody. It is both humorous and erotic. As I read the story, I could
easily imagine the actual characters on Gilligan's Island doing these things.
It was really an excellent story. This makes it stand apart from some of
the weaker parodies, in which the author simply takes the names of the
characters and the general plot from the original story and has them do
things that involve sex.
How does a person write an excellent parody? I get the impression that
Shelby Bush first of all enjoyed the shows he parodies. He became thoroughly
familiar with the characters and the types of plots that were typical of the
shows, and then asked himself, "What would happen if people in these shows
were allowed to have sex?" The true genius lies in finding a creative plot
and blending into that plot details that make the parody seem like a natural
extension of the original show. This author does this very effectively, both
in the present story and in several others that I have read. For example, I
found it perfectly plausible to imagine Gilligan hiding in the bushes while
Ginger took a bath under a waterfall. I could easily imagine Ginger being
aware that Gilligan was there and doing subtle things to tease him. What
would happen next - probably right before the commercial? Why, Ginger would
bend over and display to the hidden observer the pink pucker of her asshole
and the darkness of her nether lips below, and Gilligan would shoot his wad
while falling backwards into a somersault, hitting his head on a tree and
blacking out in preparation for the next scene.
Ratings for "Gilligan's Island"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Alt.Gilligan's Island" by Leo Sanderson (leonsan@rocketmail.com). I guess
I haven't given it all that much thought, but those people from the Three
Hour Ride must have eventually been on that island for nearly 10 years. The
author of this story assumes that clothing rots away over a period of 10
years and that a person who does all the shit work for everyone else might
develop quite a physique as a result of the physical activity. He also makes
the perhaps tenuous assumption that Gilbert (!) Gilligan has a ten-inch
penis. Well, to make a short story even shorter, Mary Ann and Ginger decide
to have fun with Gilligan and the Skipper. 'Nuff said.
Ratings for "Alt.Gilligan's Island"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Gilligan Mashukah" by Richard Dunstan richard.dunstan@indiefilm.com).
Last week I reviewed Shelby Bush's parody of "Gilligan's Island." I
considered that to be one of the best sitcom parodies ever posted on
alt.sex.stories. This one is not yet finished; but from what I have seen, it
promises to be very good. I'll do a full review of this story as soon as the
author finishes it. As the author points out in his introduction, "Gilligan"
displayed a surreal, nonsensical quality in that the three single men on the
show never lost complete control of themselves while faced with the
delectable feminine pulchritude of Ginger and Mary Ann. For the show's
audience, however, the predicament of Mary Ann and Ginger fueled many an
adolescent sexual fantasy; and stories like this one will strike a resonant
chord in the mind of many a reader.
Ratings for "Gilligan Mashukah"
Athena (technical quality):10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
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