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From: Celeste801@aol.com
Subject: Celestial Reviews 166 - March 22
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Celestial Reviews 166 - March 22, 1997
Note: A man went to see a doctor because of a very high, squeaky, annoying
voice. The doctor examined him, and told him that the only way would be to
replace his extremely large penis with a smaller one. The guy is desperate
and decides to go through with the operation. It's a great success and the
man has a fantastic baritone.
But after some time the guy's sex life deteriorates and he decides to see the
doctor to try get his original equipment back.
He says to the doctor, "Doctor, is there any way that you could get me my
organ back, my sex life has gone to pot."
"Not on your life!!" the doctor replies in a high, squeaky, annoying voice.
Second Note: Remember: even though someone else may be posting my stories
for me, my e-mail address is still Celeste801@aol.com.
- Celeste
"Of Fights and Fantasy" by Summer's Rose (spanking) 10, 9, 9
"The Tape" by Anglokitty (foursome) 8, 8 8
"Double Entendre" by Mistress Julie (scatology) 9, 5, 3
"At Dawn" by K. Reber (wake-up call) 7, 8, 8
"A Long Hot Summer's Night" by Kisses (blindfolded
threeway) 6, 8, 8
"Tentative Submission" by Kallista (sexy execution) 9.5, 8, 8
"Encounter in Kellen County" by Fred Clarke (adolescent
romps) 10, 10, 10
"Spanish Fly" by Unknown Author (rape) 8, 10, 10
"The Continuing Adventures of Grace: The Beginning" by Goofball
(emerging adolescence) 7, 8, 9
"JayCee" by Vickie Tern (transgender femdom) 10, 10, 10
* "The Thaw" by Jordan Shelbourne (romance) 10, 10, 10
* "BiGirls" by Vickie Tern (transgender femdom) 10,10, 10
* = Repost of a previous review (because the story has
recently been reposted)
"Of Fights and Fantasy" by Summer's Rose (SumersRose@aol.com). The woman
wants to make love to her husband, but he has work that needs to get done.
Important work - right there on his computer. "OK," says the wife; "I'll
just turn off your silly ole computer!" Poof! His work is gone, and now he
is free to frolic with her. Oddly enough, the guy gets upset, possibly
because the computer was not in an auto-save mode. Anyway, he decides she
needs a spanking; and since she has a cute little ass that reddens nicely
when spanked, all of this leads to some exciting orgasms.
The main shortcoming of this story is the second person (you and I) point of
view. I absolutely do not see how this perspective gains anything over a
third person (he and she) narrative. I am left with the impression that the
author wrote this story for someone else and simply posted it without
bothering to revise it for a more general audience.
Other than that, it's a good story - except that if a guy really wants his
wife to stop turning off his computer, he shouldn't "punish" her with
multiple orgasms. It just won't work.
Ratings for "Of Flights and Fantasy"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"The Tape" by Anglokitty (Anglokitty@aol.com). The man and his wife watch a
sexy tape prepared for them by a couple of their friends. The tape
stimulates them to sexual adventures immediately afterwards and also to join
their friends in a foursome. Some of the sexual activities are pretty hot
and vividly described.
The main shortcomings of this story are (1) faulty proofreading and (2) the
second person (you) point of view adopted by the author. Some authors are
able to deal effectively with the "you" narrative, but I always get the
impression that the author wrote the story for someone else (as a sort of
cyber-romance fantasy) and then decided to post it without taking into
consideration that the new audience no longer shares the same intimate frame
of reference as the original reader. In other words, when I read this story
I had trouble figuring out who "you" was - it certainly wasn't me; but if not
me, then who? My advice is to avoid second person narratives unless you have
a good reason for adopting that frame of reference.
Ratings for "The Tape"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Double Entendre" by (MistressJulie@MsJulie.com). The moral of this story is
that a guy who is "picking up chicks" should be careful about going home with
three beautiful amazons, no matter how attractive they are. If they tell you
to get lost, do so; otherwise you may find them flagellating your cock and
urinating in your mouth - and that's only for starters. Be especially
careful not to tell them that they are full of shit - they just might show
you, and it might not taste all that good as it oozes all over your face.
Oddly enough, this story is an advertisement for a web site, where the lovely
ladies who star in this titillating tale offer to meet and take on all
cummers. I guess there's a market for this sort of thing - especially among
women who want revenge against guys who use cheesy pickup lines and among
guys who just really like to be crapped on.
Ratings for "Double Entendre"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 5
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 3
"At Dawn" by K. Reber (krreber@ix.netcom.com). A man wakes up just as dawn
is about to break, gazes at his wife, teases her sexually, and then makes
love to her. Then they go back to sleep. It's a nice romantic interlude.
Ratings for "At Dawn"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"A Long Hot Summer's Night" by Kisses (Kisses@lovable.com). The guy's lover
ties and blindfolds him prior to sex; and shortly after things heat up he
realizes that there is a second woman in the bed with them. This story is
actually pretty sexy, but it's in desperate need of proofreading.
Here's a special entry from the Interesting Typo Department: "Within a few
minuets your cock is filling with excitement...." I guess a guy just can't
tell what kind of dance a couple of sexy women will do together, once they
get him tied and blindfolded. A minuet beats a polka, I guess.
Ratings for "A Long Hot Summer's Night"
Athena (technical quality): 6
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Tentative Submission" by Kallista (kallista@geocities.com). Anna Frost is
to be executed for the revenge slaying of her lover. She decks herself out
in sexy garb and arrives at the appointed time. The audience waits in eager
anticipation to watch the wretched woman expire, but instead the electricity
simply gives her a roaring orgasm. Anna is taken to the infirmary and shortly
thereafter receives a gubernatorial pardon. But not without a stern lecture
about the necessity for feminine modesty in the future.
It's hard to explain why the events depicted in this story would transpire.
It might have been that the simple absence of underpants had interfered with
the efficient flow of electrical current. It might have been that the
executioner became enraptured by Anna's sensual beauty, started eating her
pussy while he hooked up the lower cables, and had to be replaced by the
warden, who somehow flipped the wrong switch. Stranger things have happened
- well, maybe not. My own opinion is that things like this often happen when
a woman with a palyndromic name faces execution.
I don't think the title has any real significance with regard to the plot. I
think it just means that the author submitted the story tentatively.
Ratings for "Tentative Submission"
Athena (technical quality): 9.5
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"Encounter in Kellen County" by Fred Clarke (THC repost). The boy's family
has moved to a remote Amish community, and he figures he's in for some dry
days. But then he meets Sarah, a liberal girl who doesn't subscribe to quite
all the Amish customs. They have some great times together before he goes
away to college. I know I have promised to defend nuns and the Amish in my
reviews, but this girl seems healthy and requires no defense. It was a sexy
story.
Ratings for "Tentative Submission"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Spanish Fly" by Unknown Author. Somebody has been reposting a huge number
of zipped stories. The problem is that it's almost impossible to tell
anything about the stories - except that they ARE stories as opposed to
useless spam or the other trivia that clutter up a.s.s. This one was listed
as sfly.zip. Doesn't tell you much, does it? I wish there were some way
people who offer this service could also post an index that included at least
the full titles and authors of the stories they are reposting. That way
readers could at least match up this information with my reviews and select
some good stories to read.
The present story is about a nasty bastard who spots a beautiful Spanish girl
and decides to rape her. He breaks into her house and subdues her first.
Then he captures her husband when the old guy comes home and ties him up and
makes him watch. The rape is pretty brutal, but it is seen through the eyes
of the asshole executing the rape. There's a note at the beginning that says
someone (perhaps the person who reposted it) cleaned up the spelling and
obvious grammar mistakes, but there are still lots of more subtle errors -
mostly awkwardly dangling modifiers. Nevertheless, the story is a pretty good
description of rape from the perspective of a pathetic guy who considers
himself to be hot stuff.
Ratings for "Spanish Fly"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Continuing Adventures of Grace: The Beginning" by Goofball
(Goofy@TheMouse.net). On the verge of graduating from college, Grace thinks
back about her early sexual experiences in the "hollers" of Eastern
Tennessee. Her first time came as part of an innocent adolescent gangbang,
which is the main topic of this story. This story is obviously incomplete,
but interesting and enticing. I'm sure there must be more of these stories
around somewhere. For example, early in the story, Grace's roommate says to
Grace, "I wish I had your body." Grace replies, "You have {had my body}."
Methinks there's another story in this....
Ratings for "The Continuing Adventures of Grace"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"A Cousin's Lips" by Mike Hunt (M1KE HUNTAaol.com). You've heard the
expression "kissin' cousins"? Well, these kids go a little beyond that
stage. The narrator's cousin gave him his first blowjob. It all happened
down at a swimmin' quarry in North Dakota. He was 15 and she was 16 and
everybody was naked. Imagine that: a nude beach on the Riviera of North
Dakota.
Actually, these are clean cut kids from the American Midwest, just swimming
and having fun. And so when a guy happens to be sitting naked on a rock
that's just below the surface in the middle of the quarry with his beautiful
cousin's face just a few inches from that cock - well, if that guy gets a
egregious hard-on, a girl would almost HAVE to do something to make the
hard-on go away so that the other kids won't think he's strange or something
when he gets out of the water. You know what I mean? And so Annette helps
Mikey, and all's well that ends well.
That's the way it COULD have happened, but it doesn't. You'll have to read
the story yourself for the real version.
An Interesting Typo Award goes to this story for the "public hair" between
Annette's legs. Hmmm.... since they were skinny-dipping at the time, maybe
the term was more appropriate than the intended "pubic" variety.
Ratings for "A Cousin's Lips"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"JayCee" by Vickie Tern (VickieTern@AOL.COM). When she was very young,
JayCee had wished she were a boy, because boys had all the fun; but as she
grew into adolescence she discovered that girls had it made, because they
could get boys to worship them and do almost anything to please them. This
is a restatement of the basic femdom philosophy that pervades most of this
author's stories, including this one.
This story has several fascinating subplots, but the main plot involves the
next-door neighbor Jane, who is turning her son Marion into a girl, who will
eventually become Marianne. This is the sort of thing that inspires JayCee,
and she becomes an eager co-conspirator. JayCee gets paid for her assistance,
and Marianne even likes it. As I read this story, I felt that it was a good
one; but what was missing was the element of surprise that Vickie Tern always
includes in her stories. This one was simply about a boy who wanted to
become a girl and who did, in the end, become a stunningly beautiful and sexy
girl. Surprise! That's not the way it turns out after all.
This week's issue of Time Magazine includes a transgender article entitled
"The Boy Without a Penis." It describes a boy whose penis became mangled at
a very young age, and so his parents had him surgically altered and made a
serious attempt to raise him as a girl. It turns out that this strategy was
disastrously ineffective: the guy eventually had another operation and is now
a happily married man raising a family of adopted children. One conclusion
would be to say that this factual article suggests that stories like the
present one are merely exercises in fantasy - that it is highly improbable
that gender can be altered as easily as many TG stories suggest. Of course,
the other conclusion would be that the people who attempted the real-life
transformation should have read some of these TG stories first, so that they
could have done it right!
Ratings for "JayCee"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "The Thaw" by Jordan Shelbourne (jordan@u36.kwnet.on.ca ). This is a
revised version of an earlier story. The narrator has recently lost his wife
in an auto accident. He visits her grave frequently and talks to his late
wife. A woman at a nearby gravesite likewise visits her late husband. They
meet and begin a fresh love right there on the Gunderson's gravesite. This
is a well-told, poignant, romantic story.
Ratings for "The Thaw"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "BiGirls" by Vickie Tern (VickieTern@aol.com). Craig has stumbled onto a
group of women who call themselves the BiGirls. They are bisexuals who enjoy
giving pleasure to each other as well as to their husbands or boyfriends; and
they take pleasure from each other the same way, and see no harm in doing so.
But their husbands might not understand. So they don't want Craig snooping
around to take pictures of them to use to blackmail them into not
blackmailing him, so that he can blackmail them into selling insurance to
their husbands. From now on, when they're meeting, they'll want to know
exactly where Craig is. And that'll be right there with them at their little
sex session. Thus does Craig become an honorary member of the BiGirls Club.
Kinda catches your attention, doesn't it?
Of course there are catches and conditions. For example, Craig has to wear
female clothing during the meetings and has to act as much as possible like a
woman. This may sound humiliating; but the way the author presents it, Craig
actually enjoys it immensely. The activity even improves his sex life with
his wife. A Club rule is that a BiGirl who is unoccupied at a meeting can
never refuse another member's request, and Craig soon begins looking for
interesting things to do with each of the other ladies. Anything at all is
permitted, as long as it is something one woman can do with another.
Oh - and Craig also takes medication, so that his erections become fewer and
softer. At BiGirl meetings all danger of inadvertent penetration eventually
ends. Craig progresses very well, and the other girls practically applaud
the first time he takes a dildo up the ass. The other girls become openly
affectionate toward Craig. The experience brings out his feminine side -
making him a better person.
Eventually Craig is seriously considering going for full rather than honorary
membership in the Club (without surgery, of course); but then his wife throws
in a monkey wrench, so to speak. Things get very complicated. As usual, the
last quarter of the story is full of surprises; and this author does a great
job of making even the most bizarre events seem perfectly sensible by the end
of the story.
Ratings for "BiGirls"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
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