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From: Celeste801@aol.com
Subject: Celestial Reviews 155 - Feb 5
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Celestial Reviews 155 - February 5, 1997
Note: I am having trouble posting with AOL, and so I am asking someone else
to post these reviews for me. Mail should still come to me at
Celeste801@aol.com.
Second Note: There is a new newsgroup that should be of interest to you:
alt.sex.stories.moderated. It contains stories only - no spam at all, and
from what I have seen the stories I've recognized are generally pretty good.
At the present time, not all good stories go there, and so it is best to
search the spam-filled a.s.s. as well. My own plan is to continue searching
both areas for stories to read and review, but you should consider adding
alt.sex.stories.moderated to your list of newsgroups. In addition, consider
sending your stories there, if you are an author. Remember also that you can
access those stories through DejaNews (www.dejanews.com) by using the keyword
"alt.sex.stories.moderated".
- Celeste
"The Attic" by Jennifer (sex in the library) 9, 8, 8
"The Day Before You Came" by Jordan Kent (ff romance)
9, 7, 7
"Bonnie" by Friar Dave (romantic hedonism) 10, 10, 10
"The Blowjob Fairy" by DevoSpudC (stealthy blow job)
9, 7, 7
"Taboo" by B. Traven (incest) 10, 9, 9
"High Beams I" by Mark Aster (sexy vignettes) 10, 8, 9
"Surprise!" by Spamfree (quickie blowjob) 8, 6, 7
"The Secret Room" by Taylor Norton (rape & orgy) 6, 6, 6
"The Essence of Addiction" by Taylor Norton (erotic addiction)
7, 8, 8
"An Ad to Remember" by R. Davidson (incoherent wannafuck)
5, 3, 3
"First Day in Paris" by freeb (sex in a public restroom) 6, 6, 6
"My Sweet Sarah" by ztps (office affair) 7, 6, 6
* = Repost of a previous review (because the story has recently
been reposted).
"The Attic" by Jennifer (krreber@ix.netcom.com). The girl has lusted after
the guy who works in the library. After closing time they sneak upstairs and
have sex among the stacks - in the literature section, to wit! There's not
much to this very short story, but what's there is pretty sexy.
Ratings for "The Attic"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"The Day Before You Came" by Jordan Kent (jordankent@mailmasher.com). Kelly
is a shy, lesbian woman who doesn't have much of a sex life. When she gets a
new boss, she befriends the boss's wife and discloses her sexual preference.
Lydia says that she herself isn't gay, but she doesn't mind getting naked in
front of Kelly and encouraging her to do her lesbian thing. This may sound
reasonable, but it makes Kelly uncomfortable. Lydia also finds the
relationship to be a bit strained when she finds Kelly in her bathroom
sniffing Lydia's underwear from the hamper.
Kelly becomes confused when she catches Lydia making it with the company
Amazon at the office Christmas party. Afterwards she gets so drunk at a bar
that Sam, the woman who tends bar, has to take her home. Eventually she
develops a tender, caring relationship with Sam; and they live happily ever
after - or at least until the end of the first part of this trilogy.
This is a new author, and I would like to offer some advice. I would like to
see more focus in the plot development. The way it is written, the story
simply starts at the beginning and tells lots of details until the end of the
story. There needs to be a bit more focus on interesting elements - and
perhaps some less important elements should be eliminated or at least
properly subordinated.
Ratings for "The Day Before You Came"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
"Bonnie" by Friar Dave (Friar_Dave@mhbbs.com). Dan has company for the
weekend: his older but not-too-close cousin Mark, Mark's sexy sister-in-law
Kate, their three nubile and buxom teenage daughters, and Kate's younger
sister, the eponymous Bonnie.
Well, on Day One of the visit, Mark reveals to Dan that Kate is insatiable,
and he says that he'd like Dan to help out a bit in the bedroom. Dan, of
course, declines. Then Dan tells Kate that the 15-year-old daughter has been
making a play for him, and she promises to handle the situation. Meanwhile,
11-year-old Penny keeps asking innocent but precocious questions. All this
before our eponymous heroine has even arrived on the scene! The action heats
up after Bonnie's arrival. As the narrator says, "Broing!"
{I'm working on a Word for the Day program. As you may have guessed, the
Word for Today is "Legs." Spread the word!}
One could regard this story as a treatise on ways to deflate an aroused cock
- some using cold water and some using more interesting methods. One could
also regard this story as an example of semi-responsible hedonism. I wonder
if anyone has ever used that term before.
I like Friar Dave. I really do. But as I started reading this story, I
couldn't help saying to myself, "Aha! I've got him. This story is too
disjointed to earn straight 10's." But alas! He managed to pull it off.
That's the breaks, I guess. This is a really sexy story.
Ratings for "Bonnie"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"The Blowjob Fairy" by DevoSpudC (devospudc@aol.com). American children have
a tradition of putting their "baby teeth" under their pillows at night after
they fall out, and the Tooth Fairy allegedly comes during the night and
leaves money in the place of the teeth. I personally doubt the veracity of
this legend. Anyway, the Blowjob Fairy is much like the Tooth Fairy, only it
is the person who is visited who does the cumming during the visitation. In
the present case, Rachel is a college student who gets turned on by her
roommate's younger brother who is sleeping on the couch. So she sneaks out
during the night and gives him a blowjob without even waking him up. Talk
about wet dreams!
This story is listed as Part 1, but I don't know if there are any more parts
anywhere. It's also labeled as part of The Adventures of Rachel Mcmillan,
but I am not aware of any other adventures.
Ratings for "The Blowjob Fairy"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 7
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
"Taboo" by B. Traven (MCG@bartra.demon.co.uk). This story is part of the
series being put together by Merrill, Castle and Gray. The stories are
literate and mostly of high quality, and this story is no exception. It
describes a quickie between a 38-year-old mother and her 22-year-old son
before she hustles off to work in the respectable world. In addition to one
sexually explicit scene, the story contains some interesting background
thoughts about the nature of their taboo relationship.
Ratings for "Taboo"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"High Beams I" by Mark Aster (MyFrThAl@aol.com). What we have here are
several erotic vignettes that have no discernible connection with one
another. The sex is really hot, but there's no real plot. So I suppose if
you're reading to get turned on and don't require a plot for that purpose,
you'll thoroughly enjoy this story.
Ratings for "High Beams I"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
"Surprise!" by Spamfree (Spamfree@cyberg8t.com). The narrator is the female
manager of a record store. One day she comes to work 15 minutes before
opening time and notices her assistant manager, a person whom she considers
to be an arrogant jerk. To teach him a lesson, she makes him come into her
office and gives him a quick blow job. This is the part I don't get. Morton
apparently enjoys the blow job, but the narrator figures she put him in his
place! Go figure.
Ratings for "Surprise!"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 6
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
"The Secret Room" by Taylor Norton (jocon@tiac.net). While Roger and Jenny
are renovating their new mansion, they discover a hidden room deep inside the
old house. They also discover a flask of mysterious liquid. When Roger
samples the liquid, he instantly changes from a kind person into a raving sex
maniac. When his lesbian sister stops by for a visit, Roger forces her to
join the orgy. They discover that evil urges aren't all that bad.
This story is seriously marred by really bad grammar. If you have the
patience to wade through the grammar and if you enjoy rape and sex slavery
stories, you may find this story to be enjoyable.
Ratings for "The Secret Room"
Athena (technical quality): 6
Venus (plot & character): 6
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6
"The Essence of Addiction" by Taylor Norton (jocon@tiac.net). This is a
story filled with symbolism that relates drug addiction to sexual activity.
The addict cases a mansion, breaks in, and becomes the sextoy of the coven
of people who inhabit the house. It's a depressing but interesting story.
My feeling is that if this author would proofread these stories or have
someone else do so and think the plots through just a little more carefully
(possibly by getting feedback from someone else prior to posting), he/she
would become a first-class author.
Here's an interesting word-choice error: "She beckoned again; I went to her
willfully." The author meant "willingly." The sentence as written means
that he went obstinately bent on having his own way.
Ratings for "The Essence of Addiction"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
"An Ad to Remember" by R. Davidson (aredee@ix.netcom.com). This is a repost
from The Backdrop Club. The woman wanted to be dominated, but only sexually.
She didn't want to live a slave's life. She wanted to have sex with
strangers, but how do you get to the sex part if you don't know the guy? She
wanted to be forced, but how do you ask to be forced? She wanted to be tied
up, but not feel in danger. She wanted to be hurt, but not so that the pain
was unbearable. She wanted to be humiliated, but not all the time. She
wanted to be a slut, but only when the time was right. In short, she just
wanted to be used, abused, and fucked good and hard... on her own terms -
which, of course, included it being mostly on the stranger's terms. Not an
easy bill to fill. I think this is the sort of woman who can be accused of
sending mixed signals.
So I'm set up for some sort of plot, and then the "story" turns into a
prolonged, largely incoherent bdsm wannafuck - but not really a wannafuck,
because it would be difficult for an interested party to respond. The
Backdrop Club offers an interesting service, but only if you have some way to
know what the stories are about. This one is simply not very good.
Ratings for "An Ad to Remember"
Athena (technical quality): 5
Venus (plot & character): 3
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 3
"First Day in Paris" by freeb (nfisher@teclink.net). The narrator of this
story is an aspiring young artist. Her interests go beyond merely drawing
and painting. She likes to get into the biographies, the life of the artist:
the demented romanticism of Van Gogh, the vision of Rembrandt, the pain of
Machiavelli. That's right; the pain of Machiavelli. He's the guy who drew
the really famous picture of The Prince.
Anyhow, this lady goes to Paris to visit the Louvre, and afterwards she has
her cherry popped and gets gang-banged in a public restroom. Assuming the
author knows a little more about Parisian restrooms than she does about
Machiavelli, maybe it really is possible to find true romance while kneeling
in a public bathroom, surrounded by friendly strangers.
Ratings for "First Day in Paris"
Athena (technical quality): 6
Venus (plot & character): 6
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6
"My Sweet Sarah" by ztps (ztps@aol.com). This is a story from
alt.sex.stories.moderated. It proves the moderator's claim that everything
there is a story, though not necessarily a well written or good story. This
is one of those second person ("you") narratives that are often difficult for
third persons to follow. Basically, a guy becomes attracted to and makes
love with a female coworker. Actually, they don't make love, if that means
full vaginal penetration; but they do some very nice things to each other.
However, the grammar and style are sub-par, and the story is not all that
creative: just an ordinary, run-of-the-mill affair between a guy who's
unhappily married and a single lady who works with him.
Ratings for "My Sweet Sarah"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 6
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 6
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