Message-ID: <2257eli$9707231100@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: <URL:http://www.netusa.net/~eli/erotica/assm/Year97/2257.txt> From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews 7/20/97 Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Path: qz!not-for-mail Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: <usenet-approval@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Story-Submission: <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Original-Message-ID: <970722192608_-1976749552@emout05.mail.aol.com> X-Is-Review: yes I received a letter from a reader informing me that furry tales (as discussed in the 6/30/97 Annex Reviews) are not an exclusively male bi or gay phenomena and that they do they female protagonists too, and probably fans and writers as well. If this is so, I would like to see some up for review. Another reader pointed out that the "We've Seen This Before..." cliche list in last week's Reviews should be taken tongue-in-cheek rather than seriously...that is, cliches are what make the sex stories so readable in the first place. I agree up to a point. When you've read as much of this stuff as I have, though (straight, gay, B&D, S&M, doggy, incest, etc.) they quickly become uninteresting (BORING!) when no new elements are there. So, my advice to writers is to use cliches wisely; always be aware of them, and put your own slant on them to make them fresh and new. My First, Parts 1, 2, 3, 4 [B] When posted: 6/25/97, 7/4/97, 7/11/97 Where posted: ASSB Author: MarkLando@aol.com The 18-year-old narrator KNEW he shouldn't have been walking in the woods behind his parents' house. Really. A bad mistake on his part, because he and his 20-year-old cousin Gary are promptly abducted and taken to a cabin owned by a strange guy in a tie-dye t-shirt. Various kink occurs, including enemas, water sports, bondage, shaving, and gangbanging. All male. This was a nice abduction/rape fantasy (the participants wind up enjoying most of it and no one suffers permanent damage) that was marred only by implausibility--this austere cabin in the woods has a dungeon/basement with hydraulic slings and extensive toilet facilities- -and the tendency of the villains of the piece to speak like Mr. Data from Star Trek. The author included a questionnaire for feedback at the end of Part 4, obviously intending to launch a part-time career as a ASSB poster. My advice is: this was a worthy first effort, but work on the realism quotient...while keeping intact the imagination that lets things rip...'cos the *realer* something is, the more *stimulating* it is. Tease [A] When posted: 7/12/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: jordan@u36.com (Jordan Shelbourn) Web page: http://www.u36.com/jordan/ Reposted by: Ole.Joe@poboxes.com (Ole Joe) The "tease" of the title refers to a man, not a woman. A group of good ol' boys are stukin hay--I guess that means baling or custom combining (I had a boyfriend who grew up in North Dakota)-- and the conversation turns to women. The young narrator teases his older workmate by mentioning explicit details about two certain young ladies they both know. At 500 words, this was just the right length for a quick, amusing read, with a point to make about male locker-room talk that can occur anywhere. Peach Pit After Dark, Parts 1, 2, 3 [C] When posted: 7/4/97 Where posted: ASSM Author: ? I could never understand why some kids watch Beverly Hills 90210. What is the appeal in watching the soapy lala land travails of teenage girls with perfect bodies who have more money, clothes, sexy boyfriends and life opportunities than you'll ever have? And now we have this, an X-rated version of the above. I have sex more often than I watch TV so I didn't know exactly which girl was who, but I was more than happy to accept what happens to them simply because I detest the very *idea* of this show. Anyway, one of the girls, Val, runs a club called the Peach Pit, and late at night near closing a gang of robbers invades the place. High camp ensues. "Rocco" and "Butch" make the girls participate in face-fucking and cock-sucking, and then they are gang-banged by all the gang members (the black and hispanic ones have 12-inch cocks, a nice racist touch.) Of course, the girls are all sluts who've sucked and fucked many cocks before, but this time is different because they're forced to, which humilates them and turns them on at the same time. Hilarious cliches, misspellings, an authorial point of view that wonders confusingly from girl to gang member to light fixture on ceiling, burning sensations in excited cunts (this is a symptom of venereal disease, guys), girls that splat cum out of their twats when they climax (uh, cum is male fluid, guys) and witty inner musings like: "If only he weren't such an asshole, I'd date this guy just for his long cock" which one slut...er, girl...thinks about her rapist. Not to mention semen described as "jets of pearly white cream." Ah, this is the life. Where's Part 4? Even considering that the author intended this to be read as a total fantasy--which therefore makes it immune to my snide editorial sarcasm, I admit--you probably don't want to read this unless you hate the stars of Beverly Hills 90210 or get excited by ASS spam like "Horny Teenage Cum Sluts Beg for Your Cock." Sam's Bad Day [A+] When posted: 7/10/97 Where posted: ASSM Author: bronwen@anon.nymserver.com (BronwenSM) For an interesting and dizzying shift of perspective read the above story. Then read this one. I usually try to avoid reviewing the same author more than once within a three month time period, even though I may read and enjoy other stories they've written. I feel a single review is enough to garner the author some well-deserved attention...or contempt, if the case may be. But for the following story I'm going to make an exception. BronwenSM has made a splash recently, going by the few sentient discussion threads I've seen on ASSD playing sandwich with the spam. Yes, she's British, and according to the preface of this story considers herself the female equivalent of Hugh Grant. I'm not sure if she means his comedic skill or his escapades with Divine Brown, but either interpretation is cool. In "Sam's Bad Day" she switches gears into a biting satire on spam and what I take to be a stab at the middle-class white males who dominate the porno industry. The plot is this: A guy that writes sex spam for a living suddenly notices things going wrong with his life. He hears disjointed lines of ASS spam from his secretary, taxicab driver, and train ticket clerk. Then, while on the train, he meets a group of "Double teaming teens" who proceed to do what teen girls in spam usually do. That's just the beginning. What is so wonderful about this story is that it simultaneously gets you hot and makes you realize what a dolt you are for getting hot. In other words, it's both paying tribute to porn and mocking it. If the author is a young woman (remember this is cyberspace) she is having a field day skewering the industry that transforms young women into silicon- injected plastic fuck-toys and soundly kicks its patriarchal ass. It's the purest femdom revenge of all. Taria has also done this in a way with her "Rebuttal to Buttbyter" series of poems. Welcome to the club, Riot GRRRLLSS! Should it be the "muff diving" principle now rather than the "blow job" one? Lady Cyrrh@aol.com -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us | | Archive site +--------------------+------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | \ <URL:http://www.netusa.net/~eli/erotica/assm/> .../assm/faq.html> /