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Rogue Reviews Digest No. 53 - December 5, 1999
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Reviews
"Laura" by JennTill
"A Posteriori" by Joanna
"The Shit-Eating Grin" by Losgud
"Three Days in August" by MichaelD38
"The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue" by Titmouse
"Teacher's Pets.com" by Lotuseater
"Trust" by E. Z. Riter
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Rogue Review No. 466 - November 19, 1999
TITLE: Laura
AUTHOR: JennTill
LENGTH: 8,100 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Female
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females)
Threesome (2 Females, 1 Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
Homosexual (Female)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Friends
KINK(S): --
SETTING(S): Hotel
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --
SUMMARY: Jen has an internet chat buddy, Laura, whom she has
never met in person. Laura isn't completely satisfied in
her marriage. She wants to experiment. Jen is more than
willing to be of assistance.
COMMENTARY: There isn't any one thing about this story that
sticks out in my mind. It is just very well written and
extremely arousing. It is well executed, not too
predictable, and does not cut to the chase too quickly. At
the same time the author does a nice job of hinting at what
is to come without being too explicit.
OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.5 (out of 10)
- Arousal: 5/5
- Editing: 5/5
- Plot and Characters: 4/5
SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent
LINK(S): Laura
- http://assm.asstr.org/Year1999/21340
- http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=550523905&fmt=raw
Erotic Love Stories by JennTill
- /~Kristen/jenn/
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Rogue Review No. 467 - November 20, 1999
TITLE: A Posteriori
AUTHOR: Joanna
LENGTH: 9,100 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Male
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Strangers
KINK(S): --
SETTING(S): Home
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --
SUMMARY: Greg is mowing his lawn one day when a beautiful
woman shows up and asks if she can spend the night. She
seems to know quite a bit about him and he is suspicious.
COMMENTARY: This is an intriguing story. It isn't
completely straight forward. Trying to figure out what it
was all about gave me an additional reason for not wanting
to put it down. In fact I would go so far as to say that
this story was a little more interesting than it was
arousing. It was arousing, just not as arousing it was
interesting. Now that I am done chasing my tail, why don't
I get back to the review.
The author is British and uses a few expressions which
baffled me, at first. I do not perceive this as a flaw, but
something that other non-British readers might want to keep
mind.
If you are looking for stroke material, then I would
recommend looking elsewhere, which is not to that this story
isn't arousing; it is. I do recommend it if you are looking
for something that might actually make you stop and reflect
on what you just read. Of course, I suppose, some of you
may enjoy reflecting on stroke material as well. Either
way, I recommend this story, which in my opinion is much
more than just stroke material.
OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10)
- Arousal: 4/5
- Editing: 5/5
- Plot and Characters: 5/5
SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good
LINK(S): A Posteriori
- http://assm.asstr.org/Year1999/21347
- http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=550750900&fmt=raw
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Rogue Review No. 468 - November 22, 1999
TITLE: The Shit-Eating Grin
AUTHOR: Losgud
LENGTH: 8,800 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Female
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females)
Threesome (2 Females, 1 Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
Homosexual (Female)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Siblings
KINK(S): --
SETTING(S): Home
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --
SUMMARY: Brenda flies home to visit her family, after her
father has a stroke. It turns out she has to share a room
with Sarah, her older sister, whom she has never gotten
along with very well. Much to Brenda's surprise, this
actually mellows the situation somewhat. Before you know it
Sarah and Barry, her older brother, don't seem all that bad
after all.
COMMENTARY: This is an arousing tale of a rather interesting
family. I enjoyed the twists and turns that story takes.
The author does a very nice job working in little details.
They inject both humor and reality into Brenda's situation.
One problem that I do have with this story is the title.
The author manages to work it into the plot, but it felt
forced. It seemed peripheral and not central to the story.
I also would have preferred a little more dialogue and a
little less narration. Actually, the author does a very
nice job with the narration. What really bothered me was
that I felt like I didn't know Barry or Sarah, except
through Brenda's eyes. So, maybe the problem isn't that
there is too much narration, but that Brenda seems too in
control of the situation. Nothing seems to leap out and
surprise her. Well, that isn't completely true, but without
giving away what happens I must say that her reactions seem
rather subdued.
Enough already! This is a very nicely written story. I'm
just being picky. If you like stories that have more to
them than just sex, and that includes stories of incest,
then you should like this one.
OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10)
- Arousal: 4/5
- Editing: 5/5
- Plot and Characters: 5/5
SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good
LINK(S): The Shit Eating Grin
- http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=497927228&fmt=raw&part=1
Stories Online
- http://www.storiesonline.net/
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Rogue Review No. 469 - November 29, 1999
TITLE: Three Days in August
AUTHOR: MichaelD38
LENGTH: 9,100 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Female
COMBINATION(S): Solo (Female)
Twosome (Female, Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Older Man-Younger Woman
KINK(S): --
SETTING(S): Indoors
Outdoors
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --
SUMMARY: Lori is nineteen years old and about to start her
sophomore year of college. She flies to southern
California, intending to spend three days visiting with her
father. As it turns out, he doesn't have the time or desire
to actually spend time with her. She makes the best of a
crummy situation by hanging out with his 33-year-old
neighbor, Jack.
COMMENTARY: I have a feeling that this story may appeal more
to women than it does to men. It is a romance; it isn't
filled with sex; the main character is a young woman.
Another way of putting all this is that while I was
entertained, I have enjoyed other stories more than I
enjoyed this one. I attribute this fact not to a lack of
ability on the author's part, but to the fact that my tastes
and this story do not mesh very well. If the main character
had been a young man and he had been hanging out with older
woman I think I would have enjoyed the story more, but then
it would have been quite a different story.
OK, now I am feeling guilty. I didn't mean to give this
story short shrift. It is very well written. The author
does a very nice job with Lori. She seems realistic. It is
just that the subject matter wasn't the sort of stuff I look
for in erotica. By the way, the operative in the last
sentence, in case you missed it, was 'I'. To be perfectly
honest I -- there I go again -- get the impression that the
author wrote this with a female audience in mind. Have I
gone too far? Was it really necessary to say all that?
Maybe, maybe not, but I wanted to make sure that y'all
understood that while I wasn't wild about the story, I get
the impression that some of you may care for it more than I
did. In particular I was thinking that members of the
female persuasion will probably enjoy it more than I did.
OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.0 (out of 10)
- Arousal: 3/5
- Editing: 5/5
- Plot and Characters: 5/5
SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good
LINK(S): Three Days in August
- http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=519384057&fmt=raw [1/3]
- http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=519384051&fmt=raw [2/3]
- http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=519384047&fmt=raw [3/3]
Stories Online
- http://www.storiesonline.net/
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Rogue Review No. 470 - November 30, 1999
TITLE: The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue
AUTHOR: Titmouse
LENGTH: 15,000 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Male
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Older Man-Younger Woman
KINK(S): Light Bondage
SETTING(S): Hotel
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --
SUMMARY: 55-year-old Alan helps 22-year-old Linda reduce her
purity score.
COMMENTARY: Well, the sex in this story is over the top. It
really got me going, even before it actually began. The
foreshadowing was titillating, to say the least.
Unfortunately, the story is taken up, for the most part, by
a single sexual encounter. So while on the one hand, this
sexual encounter was enough to steam up my glasses, on the
other, the plot left something to be desired.
Actually the way the story begins led me to believe that
there would be more to it than just sex. In a way, there
is; after all, the author does take the time to set the
stage. There is a buildup. I was drawn in enough by the
setup and the hints of what was to come (i.e. the sex) that
I was a little more forgiving, for a while. If the story
had been shorter then maybe I could have been a little more
generous and given this story an even higher score, but
considering its length, I think that there needs to be more
to the plot to justify stretching out the narrative to its
current length.
OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 8.0 (out of 10)
- Arousal: 4/5
- Editing: 5/5
- Plot and Characters: 3/5
SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Very Good
LINK(S): The Girl Who Came Out of the Blue
- http://assm.asstr.org/Year1999/20951
- http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=547051021&fmt=raw
Stories by the Titmouse
- /~Titmouse/
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Rogue Review No. 471 - December 3, 1999
TITLE: Teacher's Pets.com
AUTHOR: Lotuseater
LENGTH: 2,500 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Female
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (2 Females)
ORIENTATION(S): Homosexual (Female)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Roommates
KINK(S): Exhibitionism
SETTING(S): Dormitory
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --
SUMMARY: Jennifer's parents don't have enough money for her
to continue living in a dormitory, while she attends
college. Karen, Jennifer's roommate, comes up with a scheme
which, hopefully, will earn them enough money so that they
can continue living together.
COMMENTARY: This is a fun story; very playful. I like the
manner in which the author sets it up and then carries
through on it. It is very nicely paced. It isn't
overloaded with sex. It would have been nice if the author
had taken a little more time to flesh out the characters.
The characteristics that distinguish them seem to have
little to do with their personalities and more to do with
their physical attributes or financial positions. In other
words, the plot and pacing impressed me, the characters did
not.
Getting away from the plot and characters, there are some
spots where a few more details would have helped. I like it
when an author gives me enough to visualize the scene, but
not so much that I feel like every last detail has been
written in to it. More often than not, when I perceive a
problem with the quantity of details, the author falls into
the latter category. In this case there is actually a
detectable dearth of description. This meant I had to make
some more imaginative leaps than I prefer to, and although
this was not an insurmountable task, it bothered me enough
that I decided to mention it.
OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 7.5 (out of 10)
- Arousal: 3/5
- Editing: 5/5
- Plot and Characters: 4/5
SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Good
LINK(S): Teacher's Pets.com
- http://assm.asstr.org/Year1999/21588
- http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=555108632&fmt=raw
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Rogue Review No. 472 - December 4, 1999
TITLE: Trust
AUTHOR: E. Z. Riter
LENGTH: 6,100 words
MAIN CHARACTER: Male
COMBINATION(S): Twosome (Female, Male)
ORIENTATION(S): Heterosexual (Female, Male)
RELATIONSHIP(S): Husband-Wife
Employer-Employee
KINK(S): --
SETTING(S): Home
Office
GENRE(S): --
CAUTION(S): --
SUMMARY: Danny's wife, Denise, works for a very powerful
man, Mr. Chase. Her boss wants her to become his mistress
and bear his children. The catch is that she wants to
remain married to Danny. Mr. Chase complicates things by
agreeing to financially support the couple and the children.
What will Danny decide to do?
COMMENTARY: This is an interesting story, to say the least.
The opportunity that is presented to Denise and Danny isn't
exactly run-of-the-mill, and that's putting it mildly. For
the first two-thirds of the story I found myself both
disturbed and aroused by Danny's situation. While reading
the last one-third, I felt more comfortable identifying with
Danny and much more comfortable with the level of arousal
that I achieved.
On the whole, this story is different. If you are looking
for something romantic, you might want to look elsewhere.
There are elements within this story that I believe will
appeal to some female readers and elements that will appeal
to some male readers. I can also see how some men and women
could be turned off by this story. It is a bit convoluted,
but it works.
OBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: 9.0 (out of 10)
- Arousal: 4/5
- Editing: 5/5
- Plot and Characters: 5/5
SUBJECTIVE ANALYSIS: Excellent
LINK(S): Trust
- http://assm.asstr.org/Year1999/21633
- http://www.deja.com/=gh/getdoc.xp?AN=556359512&fmt=raw
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