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Hi there.

Here's some more reviews on the latest stories I've found of 
interest. I am also pleased to say The Lady Cyrrh website 
has been mentioned in "Hot Off the Net: Erotica and Other 
Sex Writings from the Internet," a compilation of erotic 
poems and stories published by Black Books. The official 
website for the book is http://www.mindpollen.com/hotn 
and it, as well as many other things these days, can be 
ordered from Amazon.com.

It just keeps getting bigger and bigger...

Among other news, the ASSTR server is going to be down 
for a month or so due to server problems, and the BitBard 
site will be down for the near future as well. Is anyone up 
to filling the gap? The BDSM and Treksmut communities 
have well-organized, stable, server sites, I can't see why 
the folks in ASS can't too. 

I also would like to reiterate my policy for website listings 
on my links page. Such sites must be noncommercial or 
semicommercial, semicommercial meaning the page is out 
to sell you something (a book, fetish gear, the services of a 
dominatrix, etc.) but that there is also plenty of 
*interesting, quality* fiction available there for free to 
balance out the sins of X-rated commercialism. Sorry, 
including one or two sorry stories doesn't cut it. Neither do 
I list sites of the "Hi, I'm Mary Sue Smith from Tulsa 
Oklahoma and here are photos of my cats, some Garth 
Brooks tunes, and <giggle> my erotic stories--" the said 
erotic stories reading exactly the same as hundreds of 
other people's erotic stories. Quality, originality, and 
sincere attempts at writing only, please.


The stories:

Zhentilar Boys, by The Storyteller (M/b, fantasy)
Cthrag Drusta, by PJ Jurado and Lady Vanessa 
     (M/F, inc, fantasy, Belgariad fanfic)
Picard in the Garden, by Ascem Noone (M/M, Trek, slash, SF, Jesus)
Story by Skayda Lee (Tarnished), by Skayda Lee (M/F, rape, fantasy)
Didi on the Cross, by Tarquinius Rex (M/F, BDSM, historical)
The Secret Side of the Street, Part One, by Hyne T'hcalla 
     (F mast, M/M/F, Street Fighter fanfic)



Zhentilar Boys [A/A-]
Where posted: ASSGM
When posted: 1/8/99
Author: The Storyteller
Address: mail@boytales.com
Website: http://www.boytales.com

Cthrag Drusta [A-]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 1/18/99
Author: PJ Jurado and Lady Vanessa
Address: hiflame77@aol.com

I'd estimate there are over 100,000 pieces of fanfiction 
available on the web today. Most are related to TV shows 
and movies. But there is also a rapidly growing subgenre 
of fanfics based on fantasy novel series, of which the 
following two stories are an example.

"Zhentilar" is based on the Forgotten Realms, an imaginary 
kingdom under copyright to TSR, Inc. to serve as a setting 
for role-playing adventures, though it has spawned many 
novelizations as well. The story follows the adventures of a 
slave trader on a mission to the northern lands to pick up 
some special merchandise, namely well-trained 
prepubescent boys and girls. Though the story used the 
background of the TSR novels the writer brought his own 
spin to it--the slave trader turns out to be not such a bad 
guy after all; he's only doing his job and soon develops an 
affectionate relationship with two of his purchases, both 
boys. Likewise, the slave auction he attends seems to have 
been based on historical accounts from the ancient world, 
for the kids wear Egyptian makeup, skimpy tunics, and 
perform a near Eastern belly dance, resulting in a fairly 
interesting hybrid between the "canon" world and the 
writer's personal interpretation of it. He also avoids the 
stilted language and blandness that keep the books rated 
PG.

PJ Jurado, on the other hand, specializes in fantasy novel 
fanfic and has developed the knack of copying the 
authors' style so closely I honestly can't tell the non-sexual 
parts of his writing from the non-sexual parts of the 
original book. This is both good and bad. Good, because it 
allows for a smooth bridge between the original and the 
imitation; and bad, because the usual writing style is 
overly bland and none of the imitator's own particular 
personality shines through.

"Cthrag" is based on the Belgariad series of books by David 
Eddings and picks up at the end of the last book after 
Garion has married Princess Ce'Nedra and settled down. 
They are experiencing sexual difficulties and Garion goes 
to his aunt, the beautiful sorceress Polgara, for advice, but 
a malign power soon takes over their minds and they wind 
up fucking each other. The Princess witnesses and runs 
out in tears.

Jurado copies Edding's writing style very well, but when 
the characters start having sex they stop being the 
particular characters fans of the series know and love and 
turn into the generic fuck-puppets that populate every 
other mind control story on the net. This is too bad, 
because if the author had held them in character the spoof 
could have been wicked and witty instead of just wooden.


Picard in the Garden, Parts One and Two [A]
Where posted: ASCEM
When posted: 1/13/99
Author: Ascem Noone
Address: ascemnoone@yahoo.com

On we head into the sleek high-gloss corridors of 
Treksmut, where writers have been happily slashing the 
straightlaced members of Starfleet for over thirty years 
now. Treksmut writers like to challenge themselves by 
writing unlikely sexual pairings between the various 
shows' characters, and in this story Noone has taken up 
the ultimate gauntlet, namely a sexual encounter between 
Capt. Picard and Jesus Christ, courtesy the magic of time 
travel.

This idea may be a sacrilegious one to some, but the author 
meant it quite sincerely; whether or not he or she also took 
it seriously is another story. Like most slash it was written 
to play on the emotions and personalities rather than 
gonads, in this part for example:

He leaned close, nuzzling at Jesus' cheek before gently 
kissing his mouth.  One hand came up to cup his face as the 
other one pulled him close.  To his delight, Jesus kissed 
beautifully, melting against Picard's body as his mouth 
opened wide.  After a few minutes Jean-Luc reached under 
Jesus' robe and ran a hand up his muscular thigh.  He tried 
to keep his touch soft and comforting, but Jesus moaned 
deep in his throat and opened his legs wider, giving Jean-
Luc access.

Did I take the story seriously? No, but I don't take anything 
related to Star Trek seriously.


Story by Skayda Lee (Tarnished) [A-]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 1/13/99
Author: Skayda Lee
Address: "Shawn Ricardo King"@ior.com

This story wasn't so much erotica as genre fantasy with 
sexual undertones. In a world that's a mixture of 
contemporary earth and Fairyland an elf and a nymph 
frolic around; the nymph is gang-raped when the elf steps 
away for a minute (the rape is not shown) and when the 
elf returns she is dying of the violation, literally fading 
away before his eyes. He grieves, but in her last moments 
she sends him a message that they will again be together 
one day.

There wasn't any sex in this story, only some lightly risque 
frolicking, so I'm kind of puzzled as to why it was put on 
the newsgroup at all. However, it was a good workout in the 
fantasy genre with a few amusing elements such as the 
vomit-sprites that are born from people's barf...though it 
was ultimately too lightweight to work as a story in the 
usual sense.


The Secret Side of the Streets [B+/B]
Where posted: ASS
When posted: 1/19/99
Author: Hyne T'hcalla
Address: hyne-thcalla@rocketmail.com

Here's yet another kind of fanfic, based on a video game 
this time. This truly puzzles me. How can people get so 
attached to those blocky, jerky little figures that 
periodically die in horribly gory ways, and neither speak 
or evince any sort of personality? (To be fair, I believe 
there may be a Street Fighter movie and/or TV series out 
there, but I'm not sure.) Anyway, Chun Li, the female kick-
boxer on a secret mission, fantasizes about the two male 
opponents who defeated her in a recent tournament, Ryu 
and Ken. But instead of kicking their nabs in she's taking 
them in tandem, and masturbating herself as the fantasy 
unfolds.

This was basically an OK story; how much you like it would 
depend on how much you like the video game/TV 
show/movie/whatever. The writer writes well, with the 
caveat that nothing happens in the story that would 
challenge his or her writing skills very much, and the sex 
acts were on the generic side and of the kind men like to 
imagine as being basic nature to beautiful, sexually skilled 
females, namely a cum-hunger so strong they orgasm 
from cocksucking alone. There's something insulting in a 
conceit like that. 


Didi on the Cross [A]
Where posted: ASSB
When posted: 1/17/99
Author: Tarquinius Rex
Address: tarquinius@my-dejanews.com

The ancient world was a tough on crime, as the author of 
this story reports: "The events detailed here occurred about 
30 CE in the city of Rome." Didi, an ex-slave (female) is 
convicted in a plot to impersonate a god, and is crucified 
with weighted fishooks on her nipples, nails through her 
wrists and ankles, and her legs spread wide so everyone 
can take a good look at her goods:

Your gaze focuses on your sex, never before seen in 
public, and you notice how the spreading of your knees 
opens the pink interior of your pussy, letting the hot 
intense sunlight sear it like raw meat tossed on a heated 
grill.  Runny white semen slowly oozes from your open 
pussy down your spread-open crack and onto the probing 
horn in your asshole.  You gaze, in hypnotic transfixed 
wonder, at your clitoris, publicly displayed for all to see.  
You try in vain to flex something in rhythm, trying to 
match body movements in unison with the shocked waves 
of shameful sensations flooding that prominent and 
throbbing button of nerves.

Definitely not for the squeamish, though the historical 
tone lends a certain amount of distance. Visceral and 
haunting, recommended for BDSM fans.



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