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From: Celeste801@aol.com
Subject: Celestial Reviews 185 - May 28
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Celestial Reviews 185 - May 28, 1997
Note: It's been a busy week. Since there were two Supergirl stories in the
postings recently, I have reposted my reviews of several similar stories. I
hope these authors will repost those stories.
Second Note: I noticed that Dafney DeWitt is reposting a large number of
stories this week. I don't have time to dig up all the reviews, but these
are invariably good stories that are worth downloading and reading.
Third Note: Remember the Third Annual Celestial Writing Contest. {Several
people have poinited out to me that this is actually my Fourth - not Third
-Contest. No one has yet pointed out to me that I have only been writing
these reviews for about two years; so how can I have had so many ANNUAL
contests?} The rules are that the story must in some way be about sex and
must be restricted to 500 words or less. In addition, the story should
include some sort of unusual twist. If you wish, you can submit several
super-short stories together (as Vickie Tern has now done on two occasions),
or you can post them separately under separate titles. However, I'll give
first prize to the best STORY, not to the best collection. The deadline for
submissions will be June 3, which my calendar tells me is the date on which
the Catholic Church will celebrate the feast of St. Charles Lwanga and his
companions.
Fourth Note: Remember: even though someone else may be posting my reviews for
me, my e-mail address is still Celeste801@aol.com.
- Celeste
"HypnoTV: Baywatch" by MAW (mind control) 9, 8, 7
"The Big Bet" by Pec (fraternity orgy) 6, 6, 5
"A Summer with Amber" by Nigel (child molesting) 7, 6, 5
"Blood Prey" by Tooshoes (supergirl & vampire sex) 9, 10, 10
"Supergirl: Dark Half" by PJ (superhero sex & violence) 8, 6, 5
* "What Are Supergirls Made Of?" by Tooshoes (Superhero
romance) 9, 8, 8
* "A Supergirl Arises From The Abyss" by Tooshoes
(sci fi romance) 10, 9, 9.5
* "My Heart Of Steel Is Like Putty In Your Hands" by
Tooshoes (action adventure) 10, 9, 9
* "Supergirl Breaks the Mold" by Tooshoes (action
adventure) 10, 9, 9
* "Frisking The Cat" by Tooshoes (superhero sex) 10,10,10
* "Supergirl" by Ann Douglas (superhero sex) 9, 10, 10
* "Supergirl and X" by M D James (superhero rape & sex) 9, 9, 9
* = Repost of a previous review (because the story has
recently been reposted)
"HypnoTV: Baywatch" by MAW (MS4EVER321@aol.com). Baywatch is a show whose
artistic and dramatic qualities elude me. My husband seems to enjoy the
show, but he must see something in it that I fail to see. It's sort of like
what somebody said to me at a party over the weekend: "I see," said the blind
man who pissed against the wind. "It's all coming back to me." Which reminds
me of a joke: Down in Florida, two widows were talking and one asked the
other, "Do you ever get to feeling horny?"
"Yes," her friend replied.
"What do you do about it?"
"I usually suck on a Lifesaver."
After a moment of stunned silence her friend asked, "Well, what beach do you
go to?"
Which brings us back to this story. Frank wants to be admitted to Alpha Beta
Thi, which is the hottest fraternity on campus. The initiation committee has
decreed that he can get in only if he can bring proof that he has made love
with the four hottest lifeguards (lifesavers, in the previous joke) on the
beach, all on the same day. Fortunately, Frank has been taking a psych
course; and the textbook has a chapter that describes how to hypnotize
people. Equally fortunately, the female Baywatch lifeguards have not yet
taken that course in their doctoral programs, or at least have not read that
chapter, or at the very least have not understood it very well - or maybe
they just like to fuck. Anyway, Frank nails all four of them, and I suppose
he gains membership in I Felta Thi.
This was a cute little story. It really needed a little more plot
development, and the sex scenes were numerous but brief. In other words, if
my husband likes this show so much, there MUST be more to a typical Baywatch
story than this. I asked him, and he said the show depends very heavily on
the T&A (technical and aesthetic, I suppose) abilities of the actresses, and
he suggested that perhaps this is difficult to convey in the non-visual
media. He may have a point there.
Ratings for "HypnoTV: Baywatch"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 7
"The Big Bet" by Pec (pec@richmond.infi.net). If you think it's easy to
write a sexy story about a fraternity wager, you should look at this one.
The narrator and his friend are put in charge of the fraternity's charity
program for the fall. Well, these girl's from 38DD are likewise in charge of
their sorority's charity program. I'll bet you can see where this is going!
The guys challenge the girls to a Big Bet. If the guys raise more money,
the girls will have to streak past the frat house; but if the girls win, then
the guys will have to do whatever the girls want for a whole day. These guys
weren't rocket scientists: they think this is an even bet. The guys lose and
they have to sexually service all 22 girls. They take their loss well. The
narrator is the last to cum, and so he is despondent, until he realizes that
this is a religious sorority or something and the girls like the guy that
comes last and make him the first on their list.
Ratings for "The Big Bet"
Athena (technical quality): 6
Venus (plot & character): 6
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
"A Summer with Amber" by Nigel (bclinton@whitehouse.gov). The narrator's
girlfriend has her 12-year-old niece come for a visit. The niece becomes
interested in sex, and the narrator becomes interested in the niece. I guess
if one seriously wants to avoid sex with pre-adolescents, one shouldn't let
them sit on one's lap during a 45-minute drive or take a shower with them.
Because if one does, soon one will be nibbling on their breasts, and then
things are likely to get out of hand.
The author requests that readers not offer any literary commentary, and so I
won't mention the story's slow development, choppy plot, or fundamental lack
of realism. I'll deal with the author's knowledge of psychology, since he
introduces that topic in a sort of epilogue. He says the fact that Amber
initiated their encounter "is comforting in regard to cognitive dissonance."
I don't think the author knows squat about cognitive dissonance; I think he
means he has a lax conscience that was mollified by the fact that he could
transfer the guilt to the child. He says he makes no attempt to defend his
actions with Amber, and he adds that both he and Amber "knew the consequences
of their acts." This being said, he tells us to feel free to post any
discussion as appropriate. Since he seems to want advice with regard to
"real life," my suggestion is to seek counseling if he thinks there's a
chance he might repeat this kind of dysfunctional behavior. The story may be
mildly interesting, but I really don't think that guys who act like this are
likely to help young girls grow up to be healthy and happy.
Ratings for "A Summer with Amber"
Athena (technical quality): 7
Venus (plot & character): 6
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
"Blood Prey" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@cris.com). As we have learned in previous
stories by this author, because of Supergirl's origins and super powers, she
has trouble dealing with her femininity. She solves part of her problem by
working under an assumed identity as a stripper at a sleazy bar, while she
also works during her free time as a superhero to promote truth, justice, and
the American Way. In this story she encounters a vampire. My knowledge of
vampires is so weak that I had forgotten that they need fresh human blood in
order to survive and that the people from whom vampires draw this blood
immediately die, since they have no more blood of their own. However, now
that I think about it, I suppose that makes sense. Naturally, when the first
vampire shows up in Supergirl's city, there's bound to be a conflict. The
vampire at first wants to suck blood from Supergirl, but the superhero's
insatiable sexual urges make her extremely attractive to him, and it the
vampire falls in love with Supergirl. Therefore, he has a conflict: should
he be with her and run the risk of killing her or withdraw from the one he
loves and let her live? You'll have to read the story to find the answer.
This particular version of Supergirl has begun to grow on me. This is the
sixth Supergirl story that the author has posted, and I find it enjoyable to
watch the way the author handles authentic, hypothetical problems that might
arise for a young woman who has super powers like these.
Ratings for "Blood Prey"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
"Supergirl: Dark Half" by PJ (pjurado@aol.com). Apparently in a previous
episode Dr. Doom created a Supergirl named Mirabelle who somehow escaped his
control and fell in with Wonder Woman. Now his associate Dr. Fokler has
created a new Superbeing named Vivienne, alias Dark Angel. Dr. Fokler seems
to have two goals in creating his creatures: getting great sex from them and
ruling the world. Since he is a demented arch-villain, he seems to give
priority to the latter goal. In addition, as a Mad Scientist, he also seems
driven by the simple desire to make really neat things.
The Supergirls of this story are essentially creatures like Godzilla, who
fight for dominance in the streets of major cities; only they are women, who
can also have major orgasms. Anyway, Dark Angel uses her pheromone ability
(which Fokler had given to her but not to the first Supergirl clone) to
subdue Mirabelle. Will Supergirl be diverted to illicit purposes? Will
Wonder Woman damage the integrity of Dr. Fokler's dimensional vessel? Will
the world as we know it survive? If you really want to know, you're going to
have to read the story.
This story is not as good as the preceding one. This one has a disjointed
plot: the author simply wants to let us see neat things (like explosive
orgasms) happen. He is not really interested in pursuing the logical
consequences of interesting ideas, which is what good science fiction does.
I am not a super science fiction fan, and so the following criticism may be
off track. The author says that Supergirl was "cloned" from Superman. My
understanding is that cloning would result in a male Superman.
In short, with this story I did not have the impression that I was reading
either excellent science or excellent fiction. Some other Supergirl stories
posted with this newsgroup have done a much better job, and I'll repost my
reviews of those stories. Perhaps the authors of those stories will repost
them.
The Supergirl erotic literature is rapidly becoming fairly complex. As I
have pointed out, Tooshoes has now posted six Supergirl stories. Her
Supergirl is essentially the same as the one in Ann Douglas's story, although
their earthly names are different and the two authors have made no attempt to
make their story lines avoid contradictions. This Tooshoes/Douglas Supergirl
appeared in the older DC Comics but was killed off in the comics several
years ago and was replaced by a newer Supergirl with very different powers.
This second Supergirl appears in "Supergirl and X" by MD James, which was
written with the most up-to-date comic-book readers in mind and included
numerous inside references. The Supergirl in the present story is somewhere
in between. She has genes that originated on Krypton, but she has been
created as an essentially distinct entity by Dr. Fokler. I honestly don't
know whether she has a fictional existence outside this story.
I have reviewed these stories as essentially an outsider with just a little
bit of inside information that has been supplied to me by readers. It is
possible that a Supergirl comic-book aficionado might get an entirely
different impression. However, I find it interesting that an outsider like
myself can enjoy these stories when they are carefully developed.
Ratings for "Supergirl: Dark Half"
Athena (technical quality): 8
Venus (plot & character): 6
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 5
* "What Are Supergirls Made Of?" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@ix.netcom.com).
Supergirl shows up just in time to stop a guy from raping an innocent young
woman. The hero sends the young woman on her way with a proper word of
warning and then turns to deal with the villain, who cons Supergirl out of
punishing him. It turns out Supergirl has an identity crisis. Because of
her origins and super powers, she has trouble with her femininity. She
solves part of her problem by working under an assumed identity as a stripper
at a sleazy bar. I don't want to tell you any more, since part of the fun of
reading this story is seeing what happens.
I was surprised at how good this story was. I had skipped past it several
times in the postings until someone called it to my attention. It's a bit
like a high-class comic book or cartoon. When I was in college I used to
sneak off and watch "The Incredible Hulk" and wonder how David Banner would
solve his dilemma of radioactive contamination that caused him to undergo
metamorphosis - when all the kids in the country were watching the same show
so that they could imitate him when they would "hulk out" and scare the shit
out of their friends. Something similar happened with this story: I began to
wonder about the sexual feelings of a comic book hero. The story wasn't
exactly great; but I think that may be because all I could find was one out
of four episodes. Taken in its full context, this might be an even better
story. These stories usually begin with SG in the postings. You may want to
look for them.
Ratings for "What Are Supergirls Made Of?"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 8
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 8
* "A Supergirl Arises From The Abyss" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@ix.netcom.com).
Kara was sent to earth as a survivor from her planet (actually an asteroid)
at the moment her culture and all her friends disintegrated. She was greeted
on earth and taken under wing by none other than Clark Kent, who had made a
similar odyssey several years earlier. Enrolled as Linda Lee as a student at
Metropolis University, she is having trouble getting along on earth.
To mask the effect of her unfamiliarity with American culture, Clark advises
Kara to pass herself off as Hungarian - an idea plagiarized, no doubt, from
either George Bernard Shaw or Henry Higgins. The story is quite interesting;
sort of like a high quality comic book with sexual activities as a natural
part of the plot. This is the first of four connected stories - four that I
know of; there may be others. The plot has obvious possibilities: what sort
of things - both emotional and physical - will happen to a woman with super
powers who approaches an American college campus as a foreign culture. This
series has the potential to be really good, but I'm going to save a really
high rating until I've seen more.
Ratings for "A Supergirl Arises From The Abyss"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9.5
* "My Heart Of Steel Is Like Putty In Your Hands" by Tooshoes
(tooshoes@ix.netcom.com). Linda Lee is a supergirl from the same planet and
with similar powers as Clark Kent. In the opening scene of this episode she
becomes caught up in a violent hostage scene and falls in love with one of
the participants. She lives with the guy for a while and frequently has sex
with him, but she realizes that sexual attraction affects her powers and that
the guy is no good for her. This episode is an attempt to insert some really
complex emotions into a simplistic story line, and it succeeds fairly well.
Kara as Linda Lee comes across as one thoroughly confused young lady; and by
the end of the chapter I was wondering how she might get her act together in
future episodes.
Ratings for "My Heart Of Steel Is Like Putty In Your Hands"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
* "Supergirl Breaks The Mold" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@ix.netcom.com). This
episode of the Supergirl Saga begins with a focus on two pieces of
information: (1) Supergirl has become interested in the plight of some
downtrodden Cuban refugees, and (2) Supergirl has become involved in a
slightly kinky lesbian relationship with a female reporter from the Daily
Planet. The first piece of information is not surprising; the second is
explained in terms of her need to be passive during sex, in order to avoid
doing serious harm to her partner. In addition, we discover that Supergirl
is under surveillance by agents of the American government and that her
freedom and powers are limited. In short, this story is an interesting blend
of somewhat kinky lesbian sex and political philosophy.
Ratings for "Supergirl Breaks The Mold"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
* "Frisking The Cat" by Tooshoes (tooshoes@concentric.net). Our story begins
with Supergirl feeling lonely and horny on a late-night subway train. She
has group sex with some strangers on the train; but when they depart, she
realizes that they have taken her purse, which contains her superhero
uniform.
After this introduction we learn that Supergirl is having trouble making ends
meet in her dual identity persona. Since she majored in Liberal Arts, she
can't get a good job; but her platonic acquaintance, Andrew, hires her as a
sort of roving agent for the SSA (Superhero Surveillance Agency). He first
assignment is to apprehend Catwoman, a cat burglar who doubles as a sort of
Robin Hood vigilante.
Oh, there are a few details I forgot to mention - Supergirl has a libido that
won't quit. She also is a transmitter (but not a receiver) of ESP messages.
And Catwoman has this problem of getting to the point of a huge orgasm and
then just quitting. Somehow all this comes together into an interesting
plot.
Ratings for "Frisking The Cat"
Athena (technical quality): 10
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Supergirl" by Ann Douglas (AnnD55@Pipeline.Com). This is a nice, romantic
story about the budding relationship between the Woman of Steel and Susan
Wienczorkowski, an officer on the Metropolis Special Crimes Unit. Through a
flashback we learn that Kara (Supergirl) had been in love with a young man on
her planet before it was destroyed and she alone escaped to earth.
Kryptonians made no clear distinction between straight and gay sexual
behavior; and it now seemed reasonable and extremely pleasant to fall in love
with the police officer.
At first I had a tendency to look for anomalies in the story. For example,
when Susan took Kara out for dinner, nobody in the restaurant recognized Kara
as Supergirl. These people, I said to myself, must have an amazing
figure-ground problem. Maybe Kara wore glasses to the restaurant - the
glasses always kept Lois Lane from figuring out that Clark Kent was Superman.
However, as I got more involved in the story I found it to be a thoroughly
enjoyable romantic story. I strongly recommend it.
Ratings for "Supergirl
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 10
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 10
* "Supergirl and X" by M D James (dmatthew@ix.netcom.com). At the beginning
of the story we learn that Supergirl has been infatuated with Lex Luthor.
Can this be true? Isn't Lex Luthor an evil person? Holy Ambivalence....
Ooops! That's the wrong superhero.
In the present episode Supergirl pursues Luthor, but he tortures her with his
Orgasmatron. Then Lex Luthor fucks Supergirl - well, not really Lex Luthor -
actually X Luthor, one of those X-Men, of comic book fame, who has taken on
the appearance of Lex. In some weird sense, Supergirl is even X's mother.
I have to admit that I am not up to date on my comic book literature. This
story was full of allusions to people I knew not of. I felt like I was in a
comic book version of one of T.S. Eliot's poems.
Ratings for "Supergirl and X"
Athena (technical quality): 9
Venus (plot & character): 9
Celeste (appeal to reviewer): 9
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