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I swore to myself I'd send these reviews five times a month, and as 
August has been a very busy time for me, that means I've got to make 
things this last weekend. So hence this Review, which is sneaking only a 
day after my last one.


Stud Slaves in Training [D+]
When posted: 8/29/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: "M"
Address: slvbycbt@aol.com

This was represented as "Chapter 7" though no mention was made of a 
larger work. I wouldn't call it a story. It was more like a description of 
someone's fantasy, like they didn't take the time to order it into 
narrative--that is, a linear sequence of events that creates the illusion of 
an event happening in real-life time. (If you're going "Huh?" now, don't 
worry. This is just another way of saying it stinks.) 

Brendan and Cory are two "studs" who are serving a household of three 
mistresses. They are slaves, and they also come under the thumb of 
female slaves who torture them as they prepare dinner in the kitchen: 
"Joy took control of the banana, and fucked him hard with it." All I can 
say is it must've been very underipe, or else it would have dissolved into 
puree by the third stroke. These vicious females also "...slap the boys' 
balls with hot spoons or even poke their nut sac with sharp two prong 
forks piercing their nuts." Call the ambulance! I don't THINK the author 
meant someone's scrotum was actually pierced with a fork, leading to 
great pain, blood loss, and infection, but it's a prime example of the 
sloppy writing happening here. The whole was mixed with the femdom 
messages of the superiority of women to men because their sexual 
arousal is not as evident and is less easily controlled (I say HAH!) and the 
bondage and humiliation of the men, which comes out dull even for this 
sort of material.


Tammi.zip [D-]
When posted: August
Where posted: ASSB
Author: Anonymous

Boy was this awful. It was SO bad it had a horrid fascination, like 
watching a car crash occur in slow motion. Tammi is a 4'6 teenage girl 
with 34C knockers. Yeah, right. She's also an airhead, demonstrated by 
how she blithely walks out of the house without her bra and panties, and 
also is mixed up as to whether she's "I" or "Tammi" as the story wavers 
between first person and third person narrative...such as this part 
where Tammi is gagged by a vengeful acquaintance (reproduced exactly 
as it appeared in the story): "Cindi stuff her t-shirt in her mouth so she 
can't make so much noise. "Cindi please stop I promise I won't", I was 
able to finish as she cramed my t-shirt in my mouth."

The plot is a typical revenge one: the other girls are pissed at Tammi for 
cockteasing all the boys, so they tie her up in front of a video camera 
and strip her. The boys paid them $5000 to do this. (Where the hell did 
teenage boys get that kind of money?) The other girls then diddle 
Tammy, causing her nipples to pop out three inches, and amazingly, 
even though she's not a mother, milk spurts out as well. Gallons and 
gallons of it. Then her clit pops out and she gets a 8-inch boner, which 
they force her to suck (I guess, like Marilyn Manson, she's got no lower 
ribs.) 

Though the numerous fallacies, mistakes, and sheer implausibilities gave 
this one a certain sleazy charm, I'm not going to waste any more time on 
it, 'cept to say it's up there with "Plan 9 from Outer Space."


Too Close [B/B-]
When posted: 8/29/97
Where posted: ASS, ASSM
Author: chucktie@aol.com
Address:  Chucktie

Told in first person by a professional rapist, this stories details the modus

operandi of how he stalks, then rapes, an upper middle class housewife. 
The writing wasn't bad, but events came off as horrifying rather than 
arousing. I've got nothing against rape scenarios as a sexual fantasy. I 
thoroughly enjoyed "The Boss" and "Options" for example. But when they 
cut too close to the newspaper stories of reality, as in this story, the 
writer comes off as a psycho I'd rather avoid...right up there with that 
guy who's always writing about rotting undead corpses raping elven 
princesses.


Kelly & Brandon - Night One [B+]
When posted: 8/30/97
Where posted: ASS
Author: Robb 42
Address:  robb_42@hotmail.com

Kelly and Brandon are a young man and woman who fuck each other. 
End of story.

The writing here was pretty good, with a mild sense of humor, and the 
sex realistically believable. However, as with "Stud Slaves" (sorry for the 
comparison, Robb) it wasn't really a story, as there wasn't any plot, 
conflict, tension, or character development. There wasn't anything 
about the couple that was unique or interesting, other than the fact the 
man works for the gas company and the girl shares a room with her 
older sister. Writing well is one part of telling a good story; the other 
part is making it interesting. This author has the basics in place, which 
is good; all that's left is making things three-dimensional.

One line stuck out in my mind: "Eat me please," she whispered softly.  
"Lick my cooter." Cooter is what they call turtles in the American 
south...in reference to the delicious soup they make. I can see eat my 
pussy...but eat my turtle?


Website Review: The Mouse That Roared

Site Name: Mousette's Website
Address: http://poboxes.com/mousette
Owner: Mousette

Mousette has recently opened up her website and invited us all to take a 
look, so I thought I'd drop by.

This is a very small site, and it was pretty basic: no graphics, no frames, 
no links, so shocking RGB colors. Just the index page, an interesting 
introduction to the site by Mousette herself, and three stories...just the 
right thing for filling up an hour or two on a lonely morning.

The three stories were "Abduction" "Beach" and "The Ritual." All were 
female-oriented, dealt with variations on abduction, mild bondage and 
oral and anal sex, and were sensorial--that is, using the senses--in the 
way the best erotica is. As fantasies, I thoroughly enjoyed them. (You 
could tell they were written by a woman because of all the pussy-lapping 
and nipple nibbling.) Well, there was some cocksucking and rimming 
going on too, but these were just side dishes to the main course. In fact, 
that's probably the surest way you can tell the difference between male 
and female writers--who's getting the lion's share of the oral sex. I 
mean, for a female, sucking cock is nice, but gets boring after a while 
because there aren't that many physical sensations in it for you...the 
main turn-on is the amount of pleasure you're giving the guy. Flame me 
if you think I'm wrong. Anyway, I give them all an A.

Mousette explains that more additions to the site are forthcoming, so I'll 
be checking in from time to time.

Interface: B (Bare-bones, but easy to use)
Content: A
Will I visit again: Yes.


Comments to: ladycyrrh@aol.com

Please note that previous Reviews from May 97 on are archived at my 
website:   http://users.aol.com/ladycyrrh

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