Message-ID: <1339eli$9706091251@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Archived-At: <URL:http://www.netusa.net/~eli/erotica/assm/Year97/1339> Path: qz!not-for-mail Followup-To: alt.sex.stories.d Newsgroups: alt.sex.stories.d,alt.sex.stories.moderated,alt.sex.stories Organization: The Committee To Thwart Spam Approved: <usenet-approval@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Moderator-Contact: Eli the Bearded <story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us> X-Story-Submission: <story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us> From: LadyCyrrh@aol.com Subject: The Annex Reviews 6/8/97 X-Is-Review: yes A Journey to the Slave Market, and back again to reality. But first, an essay.... ESSAY: How to Write Sex Stories [A] When posted: 5/18/97 Where posted: ASS, ASSM Author: mksmith1@swbell.net (Michael K. Smith) A self-explanatory essay that probably everyone who posts fiction here should read. These excellent rules can also be applied to writing non- erotic fiction. I would like to point out, though, that as one of the functions of a sex stories is to get the reader sexually excited to some extent, there are other story structures besides the traditional linear one Smith describes that accomplish this...as erotica does, by its nature, have a physical action to accomplish in the reader rather than a purely mental one. As the author points out (and as I have too) erotica is a form of fantasy. It's therefore wide open for literary experimentation in a way that conventional literature is not. (Check out "The Best American Erotica" series, edited by Susie Bright and published by Charles Scribner's Sons, for some very unusual stuff.) Wetware 3 & 4 [A] When posted: 5/14/97 Where posted: ASS Author: Marlissa Address: an225040@anon.penet.fi Reposted by: Ole.Joe@poboxes.com (Ole Joe) This scifi/thriller/sex story was about (in the author's words) "a brilliant young scientist who dares to cross his mentor, with life- changing consequences." Unfortunately, I only found parts 3 and 4 of this tale, and the end of part 4 was cut off, but what was there was intriguing. Apparantly, what has happened is Dr. Fritsch, a scientist with a fetish for captive lesbian slavegirls/sisters, has somehow transformed his male protege Ben Stein into one of those slavegirls, and in the course of these chapters he does the same to Amanda Crossways, Dr. Stein's girlfriend who has come asking after his disappearance. The two new slaves are renamed Sissy and Prissy and are chastity-belted, mind- controlled, and forced to service each other for Dr. Fritsch's pleasure. It's hinted that Dr. Fritsch, in typical mad doctor style, would like to inflict this treatment on the rest of the world's inhabitants. It's always sexually stimulating to read about independent, intelligent people transformed into randy sex slaves who willingly participate in all sort of demeaning activities, and what makes it even more fun is when a small part of their minds is left free enough to be aghast at what they're doing, but unable to wrest physical control of their bodies back. It's even funner when their scientific knowledge is plundered in the process by their master, again without their consent, and used by him to make more slavegirls. There's something very wet and perverted about this. Science fiction writer Jack Chalker has some form of this sex slavery ocurring at least once in every one of his books. In one the inhabitants of an entire planetoid were assimilated this way, proving that the line between publishable SF and posted SF like Marlissa's is a very thin one indeed. I did notice that last March Marlissa posted another tale, "The Whip Must Win" that treated the captive slavegirl/sisters theme in a higher style, giving it, to my mind, the definitive treatment. But what I saw of "Wetware" was very nice too. Note to Ole Joe: Could you repost all the chapters of "Wetware?" The Patient English [A+] When posted: 5/25/97 Where posted: ASS Author: mrspraycan.an@edtec.com Mr. Spraycan has been very busy lately, posting, in a month's time, the eight-part "Seduction" series, a story about Mother's Day, a repost of the hilarious Jeeves and Wooster spoof, and quite a few other stories, of which this is one. When I first read the title I thought it was another spoof, a parody of the recent sobfest movie "The English Patient" but it is much better. A German dominatrix (Countess Maria-Theresa Hannelore Wittgenstein-- whew!) who is a foreign bank executive residing in London has a fling with a polite English fellow who's into being a sub. Over the course of the bank holidays at the end of the year they have all sorts of kinky scenes together which includes bondage and forced masturbation (his) to which the Countesses's nanny and some of her friends are invited. The English background added a lot to the story--I really could see a polite, rather befuddled English man ending up in a situation like this. Authentic and REAL. The story ends on an oddly wistful but satisfying note, but I'm not going to spoil it for you. The story also answers the question of why some English men are called "wankers." I personally think the habit is kind of sweet. CMoon Story - Adam's Slaves [B+] When posted: 5/21/97 Where posted: ASS Author: cmoon01@aol.com What is a C Moon? Picture the shape of the C and the shape of the crescent moon facing each other, as in this C). Now picture an L7. What is an L7? A square. Therefore, a C Moon is pretty cool. Hot but sensual BDSM erotica as a master, Adam, pleasures his female slave nicely, then goes to another room where her husband submits to him dressed in a maid's costume. His mastery of the couple is complete. Michael Smith might criticize this story for not being more fully developed. As literature, it was incomplete. The writing could have used more elegance--for example, the phrase "The muscle-bound hunk, meanwhile, had entered the next room" was very jarring and turned the supposedly masterful dom into a cartoon. But I liked the sex here, so to my mind things were balanced out enough for an B+. This author has posted more than one story recently, so if you're interested, check out all of them. This story reconfirms what every ASS reader knows: Subs have all the fun. They also reconfirm the perfection of fantasy vs. the messiness of real life. In real life, when sex similar to this is attempted, all sorts of things happen--one participant's front tooth bangs into the other's forehead, tied hands fall asleep from being laid on, the participants are of differing heights to accomodate oral sex while one stands and the other (hog-tied) kneels, ropes loosen, and one orgasms so prolifically they are propelled off the futon and across the carpet. All this really happened to me one night. Lady Cyrrh@aol.com -- +--------------' Story submission `-+-' Moderator contact `------------+ | story-submit@qz.little-neck.ny.us | story-admin@qz.little-neck.ny.us | | Archive site +--------------------+------------------+ Newsgroup FAQ | \ <URL:http://www.netusa.net/~eli/erotica/assm/> .../assm/faq.html> /