Looking for a Fantasy PRE-Reader (Repost)

Dear Fellow Erotic story enthusiasts,

I am currently working on an erotic/fantasy novel and have finished the first chapter. I had a list of pre-readers from my previous request but lost the list due to computer problems (Had to reformat my hard drive... it's a long story) Anyway this is a request for any of those readers who view this website and any others who might be interested in pre-reading/critiquing the story as it unfolds and before the general public gets a look at it. If you are interested please let me know.

What I am looking for : insightful comments on the good and bad points to the story, suggestions on how to make it flow or seem more realistic. The more erroneous grammatical errors and/or spelling mistakes. Any other comments on the eroticism, readability, flow, characterization, what worked or didn't work for you personally or any other part of the story you felt strongly enough to comment on.

What I am not looking for : an editor/proof reader. I don't mind little quirks being mentioned and as I am only human I know there are most definitely some but please keep comments on a deter from readability only scale. I also don't want some one who is going to outright say this sucks you should do it this way, suggestions are welcomed but only ones that are expressed in a tactful open way will be considered. If you do point out my spelling/grammar errors I would appreciate it immensely if you could also give me a hint as to where in the story it was found i.e. right after the fight in the bar when the character threw the guy into the table you wrote when I think you might have meant to write... you get the idea, it would just make it easier for me to fix the errors.

The story's title is "Quest for the Mystic Sword" and as I said it is a fantasy novel with erotic scenes in it if you have liked my previous stories or think you might be interested in my current one e-mail me at [email protected] Thank you all for taking the time to read this request and have a nice day. .

The McCaffrey's web page is located at http://www1.asstr.org/~mccaffrey/Main.htm