More please. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Excellent! Scored by an ex-pat from Ohio. Go Indians, suffer another Browns loss. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Another great chapter! I'm enjoying the whole story!
More please. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- An excellent piece. Loved the development of the pentad and the sensual contrast of two females the experience Jeanne and somewhat novice Dawn. Also the descriptive flair to the oral copulation ... its one of my favorites in erotica. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I think you're a pretty damn good writer, but what irritates me to no end is writing stories in present tense. Maybe it's just me, but I find it hard to read that way. Aaaaaaand, past tense was introduced! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- you did good, a damn good story, keep up the awesome writing. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Really great story when it happened to me I was 13 and it was my judo teacher he turned me into a woman the second time we fucked it was long and hard his cock massaged my cervix until it dilated and his cock head went Deep in my womb something that since then has only happened 4 or 5 times with a man but always happens with my dog storm. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I love the story. Hoping for another great story. Sitting here with a dripping wet pussy. Kind of wish I was as well.
This story that you wrote is by far one of the best I have read. The way you described Shea's looks, her feelings, and her desires, makes me feel like I am the one living across the street from her. I just want to thank-you for writing "Sweet Little Shae". And please let me know when your next realist story is out for reading. Thanks again so much. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hey Ol-Hawse, Liked the story, you're a good writer a mite slow, but still very good. Sure wish I had a neighbor like Shae. Anyway, I'm too old to carry on a relationship like Nick did. I'm 82 and still like to read someone that can put together a good plot. Thanks again Micky for giving me a good cold winters day reading on one of my favorite type plots. I believe this is one of my favorite Reader Comments --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Appreciated the construction, the obvious fulfillment of a gentle man's dreams. His other job was hideous. Kidnapping, slavery were not enjoyable. Not my cup of tea. Did fraternize and pursue sex with several of her high school friends and had a serious appetite for the young girl. She was on the pill and sexually active so no harm was done. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- love to hear some more of the harder stuff when he is doing the dark job! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Another great story, keep it up! Personally I'd like to read more about his seduction/kidnapping activities in Florida. Also his relationship with the neighborhood girls during his teenage years that are hinted at throughout the stories. Great job! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great story! I like the fact that instead of selling her and using her love against her, he did the right thing be her. Great touch! Keep up the good work. I would like to see you write one where the kidnapped girl is a little redhead about nine who is just starting puberty and he kidnaps her, and uses her harder than he did Tilly: the whole works: all three holes, then lets her go. Let me know if you can work with that idea. Candi again, I let her work with the idea. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This was a very exceptional love story. It was GREAT. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- THANKS! THOROUGHLY(!) enjoyed your three chapter TETMD prologue. Looking forward to what's next. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Please make her pregnant, only a bit … … hmmm, a bit? --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- A great and well written story. Mystery, and explicit detail. Your writing is at the top of the best writers. Congratulations. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Thank you for a very enjoyable read. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Evening, Uncle Mickey; I read this story first ... and then went back and read the first two. I thought both 1 and 2 were very good ... and 3 looked as if it would be the same. I have to confess that I did think his extra-curricular business involved the white slave trade ... but the actual event was so jarring that I almost stopped reading. When I thought some more about my reaction, I realized that it was deliberate on your part. The relationship with the young girls was all nice and erotic ... but the reality of abduction was just as important to "real life" components of your stories. I am going to go through your other postings later. I want to do some more considering. Thanks for three entertaining reads, though. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- You have a great series here. I hope there is one more chapter to tie up some loose ends. What kind of "depraved activities" did Mike indulge in? Did he ever scoop up the remaining two beauty contestants? What about Shea's two friends? So many questions for a warped mind to contemplate; I look forward to reading more of your efforts. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I enjoyed your story. Maybe you should capitalize Florida in the last paragraph. I did as soon as it was pointed out!
I must admit that I'm enjoying TETMD. I didn't think I would because I don't usually like stories involving brutality towards girls but this one had grabbed me. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Brianna, what a tough but gorgeous cookie. Candice must have been one degenerate woman. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I'm really enjoying the back story of Brianna. Did you write this? It's very well written from her perspective given that you're a guy (I'm assuming you are lol). --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Nice story. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Boring like all of the other stories. Boring as hell. It's the same story over and over and over again and the worse part is you're a better writer than this but it's too far fetched, might as well included superheroes in this mix. Tame and unrealistic stories unless that is the authors intent I think this was the same person commenting on different stories in the series. One cannot be everybody's cup of tea. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Looking forward to your next writing --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hey. I fell in love with this story! (Brianna's Story) Please let me know if there will be anymore chapters. I want to know what happened to Myra. Has Candace Sawyer resurfaced? --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Holy Fuck! I love your stories! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- A good start to an interesting story --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Was really hot, good to see Aiden getting new girls of different ages and ethnicity. However I would like to see Aiden get rougher with the girls and use some younger girls, possibly also to get a 13 yr old who just had a child as a slave and rape her baby daughter as punishment That was Candice's wheelhouse. I didn't venture there. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- The children he is kidnapping are high profile types, the ones that scream victim, the kind that propel politicians to great lengths to find because the news media whip the public into a frenzy..The kind that can cause politicians to deman cessation of certain legal rights and freedoms. The kind of attention that he and his employers DO. NOT. WANT. Reasonable point, "he" Candice's selections definitely fit this category. And now that murder has been committed? You do know how many cameras are in use in the continental United States? You do know how many guns are owned by Americans? I beg you to try that and see what happens because he won't be fending off a karate kick, he'll be trying to staunch the bleeding from a .45 cal slug. Very few people come and check their kids' rooms with drawn guns. So because you are placing a highly unrealistic plot in a realistic setting, I give you -10 for consistency and general non erotic writing. I can live with it --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I am reading your writing as you write it ... I am enjoying it a lot ... other parts are too ... Thank you --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This is a great story. Hard to keep it soft. Thank you
Interesting beginning, hope I can find and read all chapters. Directions were provided --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Actually these stories don't appear to be going anywhere. To much talk about travel and business interspersed with willing little girls. I was a touched confused by this comment --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hi. Love your stories. Keep up the good work. A shame Candice Sawyer doesn't write with you anymore. Love your ideas especially the powerful people acquiring any stunning little thing they desire. If it were real and I was a billionaire member I would start bidding on lovely Elizabeth Hiley with $5million lol. I like to think your character Yvette is nod to the child model Thylane Blondeau who appeared on the cover of vogue, which caused an outcry by do-gooders. I hope you don't mind a suggestion. After some of the girls are acquired you never really say who owns them and what they do with them. Might I suggest an Arab sheik with a taste for Midwestern American girls or an African Prince who loves Nordic blondes or may be a German lesbian politician who adores Latino girls that resemble a young Selena Gomez. Lol. Any how I look forward to your updates. ps are there any authors you particularly like? Thanks I started adding comments about where the victims ended up but not much more in that regard. Regarding favorite authors, I enjoy most of the notables on ASSTR. You know who they are and they know who they are! I wish I had bookmarked this one story I read by a fellow who had set it on a farm, it was sexy and hilarious. Most often though, I like to mention Little Bree's "Allie and The Old Man" as a favorite. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- THAT WAS FUCKEN AWSOME --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Sex with Dena happened too fast. BJ right away. Would have liked more slow build-up. I kind of thought there was a pretty good build-up, oh well. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- One of the best I have read. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great story! Beautifully written descriptions of erotic pleasure and joy. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Sweet and hot. Nicely done, sir. I was a little put off by how you had Mike speak to Kim at the end of their tryst, but that's the only nit I have to pick with this story. Thank you for this. Micky is a bit of a dick! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I have read two of your story's Shea and Dena and have enjoy them. It sounds like that Shea and Dena really happen and there not Fantasy or not real? I replied that, alas, they were indeed fiction! To which the following response came. So I am to understand that your story's are fiction and you didn't fuck your sister and Kim when they were 14 years old? Interesting! I took this as a compliment. BTW I have a few sisters. All are older than me and nothing has ever happened between any of us. As a matter of fact, I love each of them dearly and I have never felt any desire, of any kind, for any of them.
Wow I would love this to happen to me. I'm a year younger than Tilly but it would be awesom. My teacher would be mr Sykes but there is a cute assistant lizzy who I like too --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great story. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Marvelous word-pictures. A bad situation made good. Thank goodness this didn't end like some others, where the 'victim' never lives to go home. I hate that. I look forward to the next installment. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Nice story, thanks. I imagined Tilly as a Kristina Pimenova lookalike OMG. Thanks again. Look forward to your new work, hope fully more similar tales. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Good story and good ending --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I enjoyed your story. Thought you might like one of mine that explores a similar main character's similar hobby. /~Chris_Hailey/stories/guest_writers/Stepdaddy_LatchkeyKid.html -Regards, Stepdaddy It is always a fine feeling getting a compliment from a fellow author! And I do enjoy his stories! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- It would be nice to follow Tilly as she keeps her promise and begins blowing "at least one or two guys a year -- her uncle, her teacher, a neighbor, the fat kid at school." Thanks for a really erotic story. This comment, gives us … "Tilly's Promise"
Terrific! So easy to read, plausible and fun. Love it. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Overall, I liked it. Not that it made sense overall. The bit about the camera and the internet was, frankly, overkill. I guess the story was liked, even though it didn't make sense. That's OK. This was meant to be a fun little story told from Tilly's viewpoint. I tried to write it like a kid's story in keeping with the Tilly viewpoint. I had a whole lot of fun writing this. I put the little twist in at the end as kind of a joke about poor, promise-keeping, good-girl Tilly's odd luck.
Thank you! I remember reading part 1 some time back. Thought it definitely had some traction and was waiting for part 2. Glad you finally got it for us lurkers to enjoy! :D --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Loved the pacing. Couple of times, it seemed to change tempo on me and it wasn't quite expected. But, overall, it flowed perfectly as I was reading. Not too fast or too detailed (ala Steven King's tomes!). The sexy bits were nice! You definitely enjoy your bj's!! LOL Same here, though I've never had anyone make me cum from/during one. Great read and thank you for some pussy eating techniques too! I'm like Liz with a Coach's cock when it comes to pussy. I could stay down there just appreciating it for several hours. :) Must say, I kept expecting you to give it a "hollywood" ending, especially with Betty. Glad you didn't though. At the same time, I'm also glad you didn't dwell on it. In the overall story, it would have been overkill to try to expand on her and Scott anymore than you did. (Like Mr. King so often likes to do). Those 3(?) paragraphs were enough at the end. So, in all, Best Fucking Year was a Great Fucking Read!! Thank you for sharing with us I felt good about the balance in the story. I didn't think it would run as long as it did, but these things seem to take on lives of their own! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Great, great, story - well written - well paced. I look forward to Part 2 and maybe more of Elizabeth? --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I thoroughly enjoyed part 2. You are an excellent story teller. Your words and phrases and description are stellar. How long did it take you to write the two parts and do you have a proofreader? It takes a while to complete a story. They go through several drafts and, often there are three or four stories coming down the pike at the same time. Since the retirement of my proofreader, I am now attempting to handle those duties myself. We'll see how well that works! --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Excellent insightful writing. You been there done that? Early on I did spend a few years in the classroom. A different opportunity with greater financial rewards came up and I took it. I made a couple of real good friends, let me note - neither of whom have committed any indiscretions, who have stayed in the profession and I have found inspiration from some of their, and thier colleagues' conversations. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Fantastic! Please, please keep going I plan to keep going. At least until I finish the three other stories I've started and the one in the back of my mind.
I loved it, I really loved it. A wonderful coming of age story. Just enough sex to keep a pervert like me happy, but not enough for it to develop into a dirty story. Thank you very much for writing it. Regards Thank God! The new comment form works! I really appreciate this comment. I try to strike a balance and apparently it worked for this fellow! I believe I have one more Hidden Harbor story coalescing.
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