March 6, 2009
Allison and the Primdales is back, after a two-week break. I took the time to catch up on my writing, finishing a couple of upcoming chapters that I really needed to get done before I started posting Part 2.
I've uploaded Chapter 31. This is the first chapter of Part 2, titled "Little Sister." Most of the dynamic characters undergo their major changes in this part, and several relationships that were hinted at earlier come to fruition. Those of you who have been wishing that Brit would get in on the action, never fear. As the title of Part 2 suggests, most of this part deals with the relationship between Jeff and Brit, but there are plenty of parts with Allison, Lissa, and the Williams girls too.
I'm not entirely satisfied with this particular chapter. It's supposed to gradually build to a shocking finale, and I think it does it well. It's supposed to be jarring, making the reader question some of their assumptions about the characters in the story. Imagine this happening in your own family. You know your father enjoys photography, but you've also thought he's very conservative, maybe even a bit stuffy. Then you come across some pictures like this. Unfortunately, some of the scenes in the previous chapters already alter our perceptions of the characters enough to soften the blow, but overall I think it does its job fairly well.
I had debated whether to write a chapter about the sailing trip. No doubt it would be a fun one to see first hand. Unfortunately, that would completely destroy the shock value of Chapter 31, so I decided to omit it. We only see it second-hand, but I think it works better that way.
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