November 21, 2008
I've just uploaded Chapter 3 of Allison and the Primdales. Most of this chapter is devoted to showing just how perfect Allison is for the Primdales. It's no wonder that Jeff has a crush on her, and not just because of her looks. The conversation between the two of them in the kitchen is a tender moment that helps to set the tone for their relationship in the future. It shows that they don't just have the one-sided relationship of a devoted disciple worshipping a goddess. Instead, Allison likes Jeff as well, and is concerned with how he thinks of her. It makes her a little more human.
If you were hoping for something steamy on Jeff's day with Allison, I apologize for disappointing you. We're still just setting up the characters, so nothing really naughty goes on for a few more chapters.
There's a short sex scene at the end of this chapter between Greg and Allison, really just a teaser. I'll admit, I added it as an afterthought just because I didn't want to post too many chapters without a sex scene, especially in the early parts of the story where the reader is more likely to lose interest. That's why it's so short. If you can hold out until Chapter 5, I promise you won't be disappointed.
I'd like to comment on the scene where Lissa torments Jeff by kissing him. This was based on a true event that I saw a few years back. It was at a rather dull get-together with several families. Most of the adults were in one roon while the kids were in the other. I was sitting near the door, so I could peek in on the kids playing. A boy, about twelve or thirteen, was picking on his little sister, like boys that age tend to do. So his sixteen-year-old sister came to her rescue by threatening to kiss him. He of course didn't stop, so she pinned him to the ground and gave him a big smooch. Having grown up with several sisters of my own, older and younger, I thought nothing of it because I knew it was all just in fun. The point was humiliation after all, because boys aren't particularly affectionate, while girls are. In general, girls don't mind kissing their brothers, while brothers hate kissing their sisters, so it was a way of wielding power over him. He protested and yelled and squirmed and tried to get away of course, but his big sister was much too strong.
What got me thinking about it was the fact that the big sister was very pretty. Okay, I'll come right out and say it, she was gorgeous. Any other boy his age would have been overjoyed to have her kiss him. The fact that they were siblings made all the difference between torture and a teenage boy's fantasy.
I thought a similar scene would work well in a story, especially the kind of story that I like to write. As it turned out, I had the perfect set of characters with Brit, Jeff, and Lissa. So it was only natural to add it to Allison and the Primdales, with the obvious twist of having Jeff end up liking it. I had already written this chapter before I came up with the idea. Actually, I could have put it at the end of any scene with Jeff and Brit fighting, of which I had plenty. I chose this one because I wanted to get it in early before certain other scenes in upcoming chapters, which would otherwise spoil the sexual tension. Also, I wasn't satisfied with how this one originally ended, so I rewrote it by having Lissa come in and defend her little sister.
As a side note, one of my readers suggested it would be more realistic if Greg and Allison had a prenuptial agreement, so I added a brief comment about it in Chapter 1 and reuploaded it. It doesn't change the story at all, but if you're downloading these chapters instead of reading them online, you should probably download it again.
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