Now that Allison and the Primdales is finished, I'm no longer putting up Musings pages discussing the chapters as I post them. I've already written most of the future Musings pages already, and I didn't want to just discard them because there's some very interesting information in them that I wanted to share. So I've created this page to combine all of the past and future Musings pages into a synopsis of the chapters. I've made some minor changes to them, mainly to get rid of the announcements that the chapters are posted, and to remove references to the time they were uploaded.
I know this isn't exactly a synopsis, but that's the best word I could come up with to describe what this is: a collection of my thoughts on each chapter.
A Mysterious and Gorgeous Woman
Let me take some time to explain how this story came to be. I first got into writing erotica because I needed an outlet for my sexual fantasies. Because my favorite fetish is incest, I wanted to create a long story involving an entire family onto which I could project most of my fantasies. I ran into a problem though; I enjoy writing brother/sister and father/daughter scenes, along with the occasional cousin/cousin, uncle/niece, and sister/sister, but my one hangup is mother/son. It just doesn't appeal to me. Also, in the story I had planned the oldest girl was eighteen, which meant the parents would likely be at least forty. I know that some women can be very beautiful and sexy well into their forties, but I didn't want to write a story involving a woman that old. That suggested a stepmother who was quite a bit younger than the father, which would naturally bring up some questions. I realized there was the potential for an entire story behind the difference in their ages. If I were to tell that story though, I would need to backtrack my original plans and start it from a point several years before the real events of the tale.
If I was going to do that, I decided to go all out. By introducing a new stepmother in the first chapter, there was an implication that her role in the family was a focal point of the story. So I decided to make her the catalyst for the changes that they all go through. I would show subtle shifts in their attitudes early on, leading up to the later events that I had already planned. I made the stepmother beautiful, charming, sexy, and nearly perfect in order to give the father a motivation to marry a woman fifteen years his junior, and I made the father rich to give the stepmother a motivation to marry a man fifteen years her senior. I had to scrap the original story that I had planned and rebuild it around the new plot device. I salvaged some of the scenes, came up with a series of events that could take place over the three years between the time Allison came into the Primdales' lives and the real meat of the story, and ended up with something far longer and more ambitious than I had ever planned. Fortunately, the fact that I had already invested a dozen of my sexual fantasies in this story gave me the willpower to keep writing it. Besides, by the time I had written a few scenes for it, I had fallen in love with the characters, so I kept this one going in the background while I wrote other shorter stories like New Daughter and Injured Cousin.
I'll admit, it's full of clich�s, like the nerdy boy, the popular girl, the hot stepmother, the adoring little sister, the strict father, the nymphomaniac, the wild roommate, etc. etc. etc. Some of the scenes aren't the most original either. But I believe that putting them together in a long story like this helps the reader to care about the characters more, which makes those scenes all the more erotic.
The first few chapters are really just setting the stage for the future, so don't expect a lot of sex (although there's a pretty good oral scene in the first chapter). Mainly we just get to know the characters here. Most of the fun stuff comes later.
Allison Makes a Friend
This begins to set up the relationship between Allison and Lissa, which will have some subtle but important effects on the other relationships in the story later on. This chapter shows us one side of Lissa's personality that's important for understanding her motives later on down the road, especially her very abrupt and intense transformations.Christmas with the Primdales
Most of this chapter is devoted to showing just how perfect Allison is for the Primdales. It's no wonder that Jeff has a crush on her, and not just because of her looks. The conversation between the two of them in the kitchen is a tender moment that helps to set the tone for their relationship in the future. It shows that they don't just have the one-sided relationship of a devoted disciple worshipping a goddess. Instead, Allison likes Jeff as well, and is concerned with how he thinks of her. It makes her a little more human.
If you were hoping for something steamy on Jeff's day with Allison, I apologize for disappointing you. We're still just setting up the characters, so nothing really naughty goes on for a few more chapters.
There's a short sex scene at the end of this chapter between Greg and Allison, really just a teaser. I'll admit, I added it as an afterthought just because I didn't want to post too many chapters without a sex scene, especially in the early parts of the story where the reader is more likely to lose interest. That's why it's so short. If you can hold out until Chapter 5, I promise you won't be disappointed.
I'd like to comment on the scene where Lissa torments Jeff by kissing him. This was based on a true event that I saw a few years back. It was at a rather dull get-together with several families. Most of the adults were in one roon while the kids were in the other. I was sitting near the door, so I could peek in on the kids playing. A boy, about twelve or thirteen, was picking on his little sister, like boys that age tend to do. So his sixteen-year-old sister came to her rescue by threatening to kiss him. He of course didn't stop, so she pinned him to the ground and gave him a big smooch. Having grown up with several sisters of my own, older and younger, I thought nothing of it because I knew it was all just in fun. The point was humiliation after all, because boys aren't particularly affectionate, while girls are. In general, girls don't mind kissing their brothers, while brothers hate kissing their sisters, so it was a way of wielding power over him. He protested and yelled and squirmed and tried to get away of course, but his big sister was much too strong.
What got me thinking about it was the fact that the big sister was very pretty. Okay, I'll come right out and say it, she was gorgeous. Any other boy his age would have been overjoyed to have her kiss him. The fact that they were siblings made all the difference between torture and a teenage boy's fantasy.
I thought a similar scene would work well in a story, especially the kind of story that I like to write. As it turned out, I had the perfect set of characters with Brit, Jeff, and Lissa. So it was only natural to add it to Allison and the Primdales, with the obvious twist of having Jeff end up liking it. I had already written this chapter before I came up with the idea. Actually, I could have put it at the end of any scene with Jeff and Brit fighting, of which I had plenty. I chose this one because I wanted to get it in early before certain other scenes in upcoming chapters, which would otherwise spoil the sexual tension. Also, I wasn't satisfied with how this one originally ended, so I rewrote it by having Lissa come in and defend her little sister.
Mrs. Allison Primdale
This one was, I admit, just to get it out of the way. I'm no more enthusiastic about weddings than Jeff is, so I wasn't particularly thrilled about writing it. I suppose that's the reason it's one of the shortest chapters in the book. There are some other chapters that are over twice as long.
All things considered, I thought it turned out rather well. By writing it from Jeff's perspective and throwing in some hyperbole, I kept it amusing. Once again there's no sex in this one, just a few character-development scenes that help to solidify some of the relationships.
It also introduces Allison's younger sister Rachael. She's going to show up again on multiple occasions for several chapters at a time. Like many first impressions, this introduction doesn't tell us much about her. She's on her best behavior because her parents are with her. You'll find out later that she's a very different person indeed when she's not being chaperoned.
Photogenic
Chapters 5 and 6 are devoted to Greg's and Allison's honeymoon. I'm not completely satisfied with this chapter, partly because I was kind of rushed. I had planned to leave this one out and then write it later and insert it, but I realized that a sex story involving a wedding absolutely required at least one chapter that takes place on the honeymoon. So I started writing it after posting the first chapter. It ended up too long, so I split into two.
Chapter 5 is kind of romantic but sometimes a little boring. However, there are a couple of scenes that I hope heat things up a little. And by the way, those handcuffs introduced on Greg's and Allison's wedding night are going to show up again in a future chapter that will make this one look like a Sunday sermon in comparison.
Secret Paradise
I've uploaded Chapter 6 of Allison and the Primdales. This chapter concludes the two that take place on Greg's and Allison's honeymoon. This one was kind of rushed; I just barely finished it yesterday, and I wanted to get it uploaded today in order to keep up with my schedule, so I haven't even had time to do any revising. Consider it a first draft. I'll probably make substantial changes to it later. Fortunately, the next unfinished chapter is Chapter 13, so if I continue uploading the finished chapters at 2 a week, that should give me over 3 weeks to finish it.
Like the previous chapter, Chapter 6 involves a photoshoot, but this time in a hidden tropical wonderland. Allison has been there before, and is eager to show it off to her new husband. Of course, what she doesn't tell him about it is what makes it particularly interesting.
Slightly reminiscent of my novella Island For Three, this chapter is very visual. There's no sex, though some mild lesbian touching between Allison and a couple of new friends. If you're not into lesbians, I'm afraid you're in for a disappointment because there will be a lot of girl-on-girl stuff in future chapters, so let this be your warning.
I bring these new friends back in to the story in a future chapter. It will be just a single chapter because they're not as interesting as some of the other characters that I'll introduce later, especially in Part 2. But I'm getting ahead of myself. For now, just enjoy the scenery.
Jeff's New Interest
A good portion of the book is going to focus on Jeff, and here's where things start to pick up for him. Not much initially, but there are some fun scenes in this chapter. After Greg and Allison return from their honeymoon, they all start to settle down into their new life. While we've caught a few glimpses of Allison's wild side, now there are hints of the impact that her wild side is going to have on Jeff's life in the future. She's certainly not the most conventional stepmother, especially to Jeff. I especially like the humor of the scene where the family is sitting around the table eating ice cream. It shows that Allison likes a good laugh, which helps to make her seem a little more human. I find it sexy when a woman has a good sense of humor.
From here on, she's no longer a "Mysterious and Gorgeous Woman," but is settling into her role as a member of the family. That doesn't mean she's suddenly boring and no fun any more. On the contrary, over the course of the next few chapters you'll see she's still very fun indeed.
Jeff's Continuing Education
Allison's openness about sex should be readily apparent in the scene with Jeff and Allison watching the video together and the not-quite-lesbian scene with Lissa. I think it does its job well even without including a real sex scene. It also sets up the events in the next chapter, where we'll finally get a touch of incestuous action. We're still just developing the relationships between the characters, but I promise there will be a payoff pretty soon.
Family Campout
This includes one of many of what I like to call "false alarms." These are playful, flirtatious, or downright steamy scenes that don't quite end up in sex. Yet. This book has a lot of them.
Despite the sexy scene between Jeff and Lissa, I actually enjoy the completely innocent cuddling between Jeff and Brit even more. It's a tender moment between big brother and little sister that shows that they're not really enemies; they've just gotten so used to fighting that they do it without thinking. Does this scene hint at a change in their relationship down the road? Perhaps.
Auntie Rachael
In Chapter 10, Allison's sister Rachael returns. She's going to be a semi-regular in the story, showing up three or four times for several chapters at a time. There's an interesting contrast between the two sisters. Allison is very openminded when it comes to sex, but at least she has a sense of propriety. In the next few chapters we start to realize that Rachael has no such moral qualms. This chapter is all about the joking and flirting that I enjoy writing about so much, leading up to the actual event in the next chapter. Yes, I end this chapter just as it's getting good.
Jeff's First Time
I teased you with a steamy (literally) buildup and an abrupt ending in Chapter 10, so here's the payoff. Pretty much the entire chapter is one big sex scene. I wish I had a babysitter like Rachael when I was growing up.
A New Experience For Lissa
Chapter 12 includes the first real lesbian scene in the story. It also delves a little into Lissa's personality, setting the stage for some significant developments in her character later on. At this point the reader should be wondering how much of what Rachael did was for Lissa's benefit, and how much was for her own. It's hard to know what's going through her mind. A conversation between the two girls in Chapter 14 the next morning shows that Rachael's not really evil at heart, and although Lissa has been affected by the experience, no real harm has been done.
This situation is interesting because it mirrors another situation coming up later in Parts 2 and 3 of the story, this time with Lissa as the instigator. But I won't say any more about that until later.
The Pajama Club
In this one, Greg and Allison visit a combination nightclub and brothel with an interesting theme, especially considering the type of story this is.
This is one of the chapters that I added late; I wrote it after I began posting the story. It's not strictly necessary, because you could skip it and you wouldn't even miss it. I added several of these chapters because I realized that in later parts of the story where I focus on the children, Greg is mostly missing. I needed some more chapters with him so that we wouldn't think of him as a minor character. He is, after all, a part of the family.
I also wanted to develop his character a little, to show that he's opening up to new experiences.
Unfortunately, I'm not entirely satisfied with the abruptness of the change in him here. It might be too much too soon. After all, Greg hasn't had much time to lose his stiff and self-proclaimed "fuddy-duddy" ways. That's why I begin the chapter with a conversation between Allison and him about that particular topic. It hopefully sets up the tone of the chapter so that the reader doesn't think Greg is acting completely out of character.
I needed to put this chapter here because in Chapter 14 he's going to get wilder still, and it would be anticlimactic to put this chapter any later.
Rachael's Final Conquest
All I can say is that Greg is one lucky guy.
I'd like to spend a minute talking about Rachael. Of all the characters in the story, she undergoes the least development. By this point, you pretty much know everything there is to know about her. She is in one sense an iconic character, idealizing unrestrained sexual freedom. She is what her big sister would be were it not for Allison's sense of obligation to her new family. Or to look at it from the other direction, Allison is what Rachael would be with a conscience. I don't mean to imply that Rachael is malicious or evil; she just loves sex too much to consider imposing any limits on herself. If she doesn't meet the clinical definition of a nymphomaniac, she's at least one in spirit.
Fantasies
In this chapter, we say goodbye to Auntie Rachael, but if you like her character, there's no need to worry. This is by no means the last time she'll appear in the story. Aside from including another almost-but-not-quite lesbian scene between Allison and Lissa, Chapter 15 also begins a new story arc that focuses on Jeff's awkward yet amusing developing relationship with a girl who (surprise!) isn't related to him in any way, even by marriage. Her name has been mentioned before, and the perceptive reader should already expect something to happen between Jeff and her later. We don't get to meet her for a couple more chapters though, so you'll just have to be patient.
One interesting note is that in this chapter we hit (and pass right on by) the one-year anniversary of Allison's arrival on the Primdales' doorstep.
A Mischievous Plot
Jeff and Lissa do some serious fooling around in this chapter in a scene that should appeal to anyone who's enjoyed my other stories. Also, he gets a lucky break in his quest to find a real, honest-to-goodness girlfriend. Allison shows just how manipulative she can be, though like her sister Rachael she's not malicious. In this case, she thinks it's the best thing for Jeff. Is she right? I'm not telling. You're just going to have to read the next few chapters to find out.
First Day With Kari
In this chapter, Jeff discovers that the beautiful and popular Kari Williams isn't so scary after all. She's actually a real human being. No sex in this one, just some playful flirting.
This chapter also introduces one of Jeff's favorite ways of tormenting his little sister, by pinning her down and forcing her to say some humiliating words. You get the idea that he's done this plenty of times to her in the past. I chose these words in particular because I wanted them to be merely degrading when spoken by a little girl, but downright sexy when spoken by a teenager. This won't be the last time Jeff does this to his little sister; one instance in particular will get very interesting indeed. But you're just going to have to wait and find that out later.
Pool Fun
This chapter is just good clean sexy fun. Again there's no sex, but plenty of girls in swimsuits. This was one of my favorite chapters to write, and it's also one of my favorites to read, because it brings out the characters' personalities by having them play off of each other. If you were to read only this one single chapter, you would know almost as much about most of the characters as if you had read the book from the beginning. It develops the friendship between Brit and Crystal, which isn't particularly good for Jeff because they tend to gang up on him. It hints at Jeff's crush on Allison, and it shows that the so-called "popular girl" Kari doesn't have a problem being friends with the somewhat nerdy Jeff. It also reemphasizes that Allison is sometimes at heart just as much a kid as her stepchildren.
Jeff's New Love
Jeff and Kari finally admit their feelings for each other, and almost have sex. I broke it off early for three reasons. First, I wanted to show a tender and compassionate side of Jeff that will eventually become his defining trait. He's not just a horny teenage boy, but also a really nice guy. Second, I wanted to show Kari's hesitation, in order to emphasize the change she's going to go through later. But I won't say more about that until it happens. Third, I'm just a little stinker, and I wanted to tease the reader.
I know, ending the chapter like this after leading you along for several chapters is downright mean. Don't worry. The next chapter should satisfy you.
Love Fulfilled
This is the payoff for the past few chapters.
Caught in the Act
I won't say anything about this chapter except that, if someone were to walk in on me like this, I would want it to be someone like Allison.
Experimenting
In Chapter 22, Allison takes a more proactive role in her stepson's love life. It kind of makes you wonder if maybe she gets as much enjoyment out of it as he does. Considering how much he's idolized her right from the beginning, that's probably impossible. But I think it's clear that she's having fun teaching Jeff and Kari.
So now Jeff is living a fantasy. Both of the girls he's had a crush on are now involved in his love life. Of course, he's still not as close to Allison as he might like, but with Kari as the consolation prize, who would complain? I could end the story here and call it a happy ending. But there's oh so much more to the tale. You ain't seen nothin' yet.
Girlfriend For a Day
Chapter 23 is a charming and entertaining chapter that helps to develop the relationship between Jeff and his girlfriend's little sister. I think the whole thing walks the thin line between cute and sexy, making the reader wonder whether Crystal's flirting is just an extension of her teasing, or if she has feelings for Jeff that she's not admitting. Maybe she herself doesn't even know.
What does this mean for Jeff and Kari, though? Is Jeff going to turn out to be the kind of boy who cheats on his girlfriend? Is Crystal going to get jealous and scheme to break them up? Or are Jeff and Crystal just going to remain friends? Tune in next time and... Sorry. I got carried away there for a minute. Anyway, I'm not going to tell you how this affects things. You're just going to have to wait and find out.
An Early Christmas Present
In Chapter 24, we fast forward a couple of months to December, where Kari gives Jeff the best Christmas present he's ever had. Personally, if I were Jeff, I would be willing to forfeit all of my past and future Christmas presents for this one.
This chapter is the reason why I gave Kari a little sister. Because Allison and the Primdales was intended as a collection of pretty much all of my sexual fantasies so far, I couldn't let it go without a "girlfriend's little sister" story. I didn't want Jeff to be the type of guy who would fool around behind his girlfriend's back, so I compromised by having Kari not only know about it, but encourage it.
Of course, Crystal has developed way beyond this initial idea; she's kind of had to, since as long as Jeff is with Kari, there's no getting around having Crystal as at least a semi-major character. But that's what's so great about writing a long story like this. A simple idea can turn into something much bigger in scope.
By the way, two years have now passed in the story since the first chapter. There will be a couple more rapid jumps in time before the end of Part 1, then things will slow down for Part 2.
A Special Gift
It appears that Allison's openmindedness about sex is spreading beyond the Primdale household, and is affecting the Williams family as well. There's a nice sister-on-sister scene in this one. This chapter also introduces not another character but a location that will be the site of many a naughty chapter in the future. The introduction of this location is another one of those tender moments between Jeff and Brit that help to offset their otherwise constant bickering. In fact, I would say that the turning point in their relationship occurs in this chapter. The argument can be made that it doesn't happen until the first couple of chapters in Part 2 (you'll see why when we get there), and admittedly that event is more dramatic. However, after this chapter, their fighting pretty much comes to an end as they realize that it's much more fun to be nice to each other than to argue all the time. They still tease each other, although the viciousness has been replaced by playfulness.
As a side note, if I had my choice, I'd still rather have the Early Christmas Present from the last chapter than the Special Gift from this chapter.
Modeling
In this chapter, we bring back some characters introduced in Chapter 6. An email leads to Greg and Allison spending a weekend surrounded by gorgeous women. The photography theme of this chapter serves two purposes. First, it helps reinforce the idea that Greg likes to take nude pictures of Allison, sometimes with other women. This will be important for the event that begins Part 2 of the story coming up soon. Second, it ends up with nudie pics of Allison on the internet, where certain prying eyes can see them. This sets up a future chapter where it will come back to haunt her. It's not a particularly long story arc, but her creative resolution to the issue makes for some fun reading. That's not going to happen for a long time, though.
Fun At the Swimming Hole
This chapter begins a series of 3 chapters on a camping trip during the last summer before Lissa goes away to college. This chapter is reminiscent of the swimming pool scene from Chapter 18, but considering their attire, it's a lot less innocent. My favorite part of this chapter is Allison's reaction upon seeing the children at the swimming hole. If you knew nothing else about her, this scene would tell you almost all you need to know. It also illustrates perfectly just what makes her so likable.
Nocturnal Encounter
This chapter is mostly a love scene between Jeff and Kari on the camping trip. This time, Lissa joins in as well.
By this point, Jeff and Lissa pretty much have an understanding that there's nothing between them but a pretty normal brother-sister relationship, with just a touch of sexual chemistry as well. I could have developed their relationship a little more, but it would get in the way of some of my fantasies that I have for them in the future, so after this, their experimenting comes to an end. Lissa's going off to college in a couple of months after all, and Jeff has an honest-to-goodness girlfriend now, so there's not much potential for anything more between them. Not yet at least.
First Kiss
Chapter 29 continues the family campout. In the last chapter, Jeff and Lissa and Kari got together in one of the tents. In this one, we get to peek in on their younger sisters in the other tent. If you like stories about thirteen-year-old girls and you like stories about lesbians, this chapter gives you enough of a taste that you should be eager to find out what happens between Brit and Crystal later on.
I wasn't sure if I was going to go down this road at first. After all, there have been some subtle hints that Brit would start to develop a relationship with a different character. Then I figured, if Jeff can have a relationship with Kari and Crystal and even a little with Lissa, why can't Brit have a relationship with two characters too?
The Loss of a Sister
This concludes Part 1 of the story. While the first part definitely has its moments, things really start to heat up in the second. Just to let you know, Part 1 is not a complete story in and of itself, so don't expect a resolution to anything yet. It only begins the story continued in the other 3 parts.
Part 1 ends on a note of melancholy, with Lissa leaving home to go off to college. If you're sad about her leaving, don't worry. She may not be living at home any more, but that doesn't mean I'm going to stop writing about her. Besides, it gives me a chance to introduce a whole new set of characters, her roommates in particular. One of her roommates, in fact, is my favorite character in the whole story. She even beats out Allison, which really says a lot. You'll know who I mean as soon as I introduce her. And there's always Christmas vacation and the next summer for Lissa to visit, after all.
A Disturbing Revelation
This is the first chapter of Part 2, titled "Little Sister." Most of the dynamic characters undergo their major changes in this part, and several relationships that were hinted at earlier come to fruition. Those of you who have been wishing that Brit would get in on the action, never fear. As the title of Part 2 suggests, most of this part deals with the relationship between Jeff and Brit, but there are plenty of parts with Allison, Lissa, and the Williams girls too.
I'm not entirely satisfied with this particular chapter. It's supposed to gradually build to a shocking finale, and I think it does it well. It's supposed to be jarring, making the reader question some of their assumptions about the characters in the story. Imagine this happening in your own family. You know your father enjoys photography, but you've also thought he's very conservative, maybe even a bit stuffy. Then you come across some pictures like this. Unfortunately, some of the scenes in the previous chapters already alter our perceptions of the characters enough to soften the blow, but overall I think it does its job fairly well.
I had debated whether to write a chapter about the sailing trip. No doubt it would be a fun one to see first hand. Unfortunately, that would completely destroy the shock value of Chapter 31, so I decided to omit it. We only see it second-hand, but I think it works better that way.
A Change of Attitude
Chapter 32 starts to set up the events that are the theme of Part 2 of the story. The title of the part, "Little Sister" already suggests that it's going to be about Jeff's relationship with Brit. If you've read my short story Submissive Little Sister or my novella New Daughter and enjoyed them, you should enjoy this whole section of the book. On the other hand, if you didn't like those two stories, you'll probably find these chapters overly sappy and sentimental. Personally, I enjoy both reading and writing about these moments between Jeff and Brit. They're sometimes tender, sometimes erotic, and sometimes a surprising mixture of both. For instance, just try to read the line "I wanted that reassurance that you still loved me," in this chapter without it putting a smile on your face or a tear in your eye. Go on. I dare you.
I needed a major event to change the relationship between brother and sister. After all, up to this point they didn't even get along, although there was a subtle turning point earlier in Chapter 25. But I couldn't have it be something obvious that the whole world would know about, and I wanted to hold off on actual sex until a future chapter. I also wanted it to be sexy and erotic. So I came up with the idea of Brit's sexual awakening in the presence of her brother. Then when they hold each other afterward, they begin to realize that it really feels nice to get along for a change. Brit no longer sees her brother as a mean and sometimes cruel torturer (which admittedly, he sometimes was), but a loving and gentle protector. Jeff sees Brit not as a whiny little brat, but as a sweet and vulnerable girl who needs to feel loved.
If you thought it was a little (if you'll excuse the egregious pun) "anticlimactic" that Brit didn't get to experience an orgasm when she masturbated with Crystal on the camping trip in Chapter 29, now you know why I did it that way. I was saving it up for this scene.
The storm scene in this chapter was actually the first scene I wrote. In fact, I wrote it for a completely different story long before I had even thought up the concept of Allison and the Primdales. I abandoned that one, but I liked this scene so much that I had to salvage it. I considered making it into a short story culminating in sex, but then I found that the simple little kiss and spoken "I love you" at the end of the chapter were my favorite part, so I couldn't just replace them with a sex scene. It still could have made a decent short story, but it just felt like it needed to be put into at least a novella. You could, in fact, say that the entire story built itself around this scene. It's gone through many incarnations in my mind, but always the storm scene was a part of it.
These early chapters of Part 2, where Jeff and Brit are finally learning to get along, are some of my favorites in the whole story. Plenty of other chapters are more erotic or just plain amusing, but there's a certain charm to these ones that I really enjoy. I like to go back and read these chapters just before bedtime, not because they're so boring that they put me to sleep, but because I think they're very relaxing.
Shower Fun
Crystal becomes the catalyst in this chapter, setting up a nice shower scene with Jeff, Brit and her. It opens the door to Jeff and Brit getting comfortable being nude together, and trust me, that's going to happen a lot in Part 2. There's really nothing more to say about this chapter, so I won't.
Roommates
In Chapter 34, we leave Jeff and Brit and turn our attention to Lissa, who is on her way to her new school. Before you get on my case about it, yes, I know the semi-flashback to the sailing trip at the beginning of this chapter is anticlimactic and even a bit disappointing. Let me say this in my defense: I plan the progression of the relationships very carefully in my stories. If I hint at a relationship but haven't developed it yet, there's a very good reason for it. And in this case, that sailing trip was absolutely the wrong time to take things further between Greg and Lissa. It will, however, come back to haunt them later, but I won't tell you until it happens whether it will be for good or ill.
This chapter introduces two of Lissa's roommates: Meg and Monique. Meg is my favorite character in the story. Granted, at first she seems pretty one-dimensional, though that one dimension is certainly fun. Basically, she's a pretty archetypal flirtatious lesbian. But you'll see in future chapters that she has much more depth than that. I'll talk more about that later when it happens, and I'm sure most of my readers will probably disagree with my statement that she's at least as interesting as Allison. I just think that with the few peeks I'll give you later into her private life and history, you'll see that there's far more to her than what appears on the surface. She just seems to have a story that's begging to be told, but what makes her particularly interesting is that I never tell it. I leave it up to your imagination. Don't be surprised, however, if she shows up in more of my stories.
Monique, on the other hand, is almost a throwaway character because I needed a fourth roommate for Lissa. She does, however, play off of Meg quite well. Lissa and Alya (who is not introduced yet in this chapter) mostly just accept Meg's flirtatious manner in the playful spirit in which it's intended. Monique, however, goes out of her way to encourage it, teasing her about her sexuality and drawing out comments from Meg.
I made her roommates so likable so that Lissa would immediately feel at home with them. Her future storyline doesn't leave room for tension in the apartment, so I wanted to get her settled in as quickly as possible; by the time we've spent a few chapters with her, she might as well have been living in this apartment for years.
Spending the Night
Chapter 35 is one I wrote and inserted later, after all of Part 1 and Part 2 were already written. I was reading over this section of the book, and realized that the trip to Lissa's school had taken more than a day, so by necessity Greg and Allison and Rachael would have to spend the night somewhere along the road back. Since it was just the three of them, naturally Rachael would make things interesting for her sister and brother-in-law, so I couldn't just skip over it. The scene may not be crucial to the plot, but it's fun nonetheless.
Paying the Rent
This chapter asks the question, what happens when you let a pervert run an apartment complex for college coeds? Then it answers it. It sets up some fun future scenes that will occur later after Lissa's transformation. I'll talk more about that when it happens.
In this chapter we also meet Alya, who will have a major role to play in the future. Right now she's just another roommate, not particularly interesting at all. That will certainly change later on.
Adorable Little Sister
We leave Lissa and return to Jeff and Brit in Chapter 37. This one is filled with snuggling scenes, charming conversations, and the occasional nudity. If you just want the characters to get it on, you won't like this one. On the other hand, if that's the case you're probably reading the wrong book. You really get a glimpse into Brit's adoration of her big brother here, seen through Jeff's eyes.
It's Perfectly Natural
I've uploaded Chapter 38 of Allison and the Primdales. Allison claims that it's perfectly natural for a young teenage girl to develop a crush on her brother. She also claims that it's perfectly natural for straight girls to practice kissing with each other. Not being a psychologist (or a teenage girl) myself, I have no idea whether either of these are true. I'm going off of something I may have read at one time but can't remember where. If they're true, we'll just call them a couple of good guesses. If not, we'll just assume that Allison's lying in order to defuse some situations. Alternately, considering she's gone through something like both of these before, I don't think it's unreasonable to expect that she believes them whether they're true or not.
I should warn you, this chapter ends on a cliffhanger. So that I don't keep you in suspense, I'm going to go ahead and post Chapter 39 tomorrow.
Brit's Hero
We see the result of Jeff's rescue of his little sister, and it's pretty much what you'd expect. Her pretend hero worship of him becomes all too real. Writing this particular subplot wasn't strictly necessary of course; she already adored him. On the other hand, it gave me a good excuse to write some nice scenes with little Britney taking care of her big brother Jeff, not to mention allowing Allison's maternal (and not-so-maternal) instincts to kick in. It resulted in some of the more erotic "false alarms" in the story.
The doctor's diagnosis and instructions are another case where I did research on the internet just so I wouldn't make a complete fool out of myself, like with Island For Three. I took a few creative liberties, but from my research it's fairly accurate.
Another Beautiful Nerd
In Chapter 40 we return to Lissa at college. This chapter introduces Matt, who will be the catalyst for the most important story arc for Lissa. All of the major characters undergo changes in this book, but Lissa's is by far the most dramatic. You'll see what I mean later.
Unfortunately, there's no sex in this chapter, although there's an amusing "accidentally walking in on the naked girl" scene. Lissa's story is still just in the early development stages. Soon enough it's going to get very interesting indeed though.
Pain and Lust
This one has one of my favorite false alarms in the entire book, a steamy scene with Jeff and Allison. She admitted early on that she really liked Jeff and thought he was handsome, but here she lowers her guard long enough to prove it. We see a chink in her armor here, and for the first time we find out what happens when she loses control.As I mentioned to one of my readers in a private email, I think there's something sexy about a strong woman like Allison. But like Lissa, I'm intimidated by perfection and therefore have an aversion to it. So I think there's something even sexier about a strong woman making a mistake, losing control, or otherwise showing weakness.
In other words, Strong woman = sexy. Strong woman losing control = incredibly sexy. Strong woman losing control in this particular way = oh my god oh my god oh my god OH MY GOD!!!
Ironically, Rachael is the one that keeps it from getting out of hand. Ironic because if Rachael knew what was going on, she would be the one to push it forward.
This is not the last time Allison gets into what I like to call her "Mommy" mood. It's just too fun not to write about it, so it will pop up several more times before the end of the story.
Naughty Fun
Allison's resolve with regard to her stepson further weakens. On the other hand, with someone like Rachael working on her, who can blame her? Somehow Allison manages to stick to the letter of the law, if not the spirit, but she still ends in a kinky lesbian display with her sister for Jeff's eyes (and ears). There's some mild bondage play here, not that the victim has any cause to complain. I sure wouldn't.
The next few chapters covering the weekend are just good old sexy fun. They don't advance the plot at all; they're just a reward for the reader who has been patient so far. Originally planned as a single chapter, they quickly got out of hand and turned into five. But that's fine; they're packed full of naughty goodness.
In Love At Last
There's really nothing surprising in this chapter; as soon as you read the title and then a paragraph or two to know that it deals with Greg and Allison, you pretty much know what the end result of this chapter will be. This is in one sense a conclusion of the story arc of Greg and Allison. You could almost take the chapters dealing with their "excursions," bundle them up separately from the rest of the story, and make a decent romance out of them, with this as the final chapter.
But there's much more to tell. Although their marriage has finally reached a satisfying degree of fulfillment, Greg still has a lot more changing to do. For the better, hopefully.
Strip Poker
The title, "Strip Poker," pretty much sums up the whole thing. I think it would have worked better if Jeff and Brit hadn't already seen each other's nude bodies several times before. Still, it's a pretty decent strip poker scene, and sets up the fun for the rest of the weekend.
Naughtier Fun
There are a couple of great scenes in this one, including a fun little threesome position in which Jeff and Brit get as close to having sex as possible without actually doing it. Then there's a nice lesbian scene between Rachael and Kari while Jeff watches.
Dirty Pictures
This is the first of several chapters involving Brit's art studio, a camera, and some horny teenagers who can't seem to keep their clothes on. In this one, it's just Brit and Crystal. There's a hint of forbidden feelings between the girls, but no actual sex.
Wild Party
This one breaks up the naughty weekend with Rachael babysitting Jeff and Brit by inserting an account of Lissa's and Matt's first date. It's mainly a throwaway chapter that doesn't advance the plot or tell us anything about the characters. It does serve two purposes though. First, I felt an obligation to write at least one chapter with Lissa and Matt going out before the further developments in their relationship down the road. Second, it gave me an excuse to write about a wild party. No, Matt and Lissa don't get it on, but plenty of other people do. I thought some of the ideas for the fun and games at this party were pretty creative, and all of them are beyond risqu�. It also shows Meg and Sandy in their natural environment, or at least something close to it. It was a fun chapter to write, and hopefully it's a fun chapter to read.
Art or Smut?
In the fifth and final chapter of the weekend with Rachael, the kids go back out to the art studio and pick up where Brit and Crystal left off. This time Jeff and Kari and Rachael join them. Supposedly the nude is a perfectly legitimate genre for photography, but I don't think the argument can be made that the pictures that the kids take are anything but pornographic.
Volleyball and More
The next three chapters deal with a weekend with the high school's volleyball team as they practice in the Primdales' back yard. This chapter is pretty tame until the end, where we're treated to a couple of short but sexy shower scenes. The one with Brit and Crystal, in particular, is in my opinion one of the most erotic false alarms in the entire story, matched only by the one between Jeff and Allison in Chapter 41.
And Even More
If you thought Jeff had a lot of girls after his body before, that was nothing compared to a semi-orgy with the entire volleyball team. He has some kind of sexual contact with just about every one of them, including the self-declared lesbian. Brit and Crystal also join in on the action. This chapter shows in vivid detail just how much Kari has changed. Remember her? The shy girl who couldn't go through with it the first time? Now she's into naughty games, the more creative the better.
Jeff's Three Nurses
In the third and final chapter of the weekend with the volleyball team, the naughtiness is toned down somewhat, though there are still a bunch of naked girls running around. Unfortunately for Jeff, an ill-timed headache gets in the way of having too much fun. On the other hand, he gets to have Kari, Crystal, and Brit fawn all over him, so he can't complain too much. Earlier I mentioned that there would be scenes that were both tender and erotic at the same time, and Brit's offer to him in this chapter is one of those scenes.
Tracy's offer to have the volleyball team be Jeff's guardian angels is going to pay off in a big way in about thirty chapters, so remember it.
Nights and Mornings with Brit
This includes what I consider to be the single most erotic scene in the entire story, possibly the most erotic thing I've ever written. You may disagree, but when I think of this scene I always get chills running up and down my spine. Imagine lying there asleep, probably having a great dream, then waking to an intensely pleasurable feeling. You wonder what it is, so you glance down and OH MY GOD!
I'm not sure I did this scene justice though. It is, after all, a whole heap of sheer eroticism that I tried to convey through the limited medium of text. Maybe it worked, maybe it didn't. I know I get excited every time I read this scene, and I hope you do too.
Crystal's Slave
If you're into lesbians, Chapters 53 and 54 are pretty hot. This shows one of the reasons why I like to write long stories rather than short ones. These two chapters would work just fine as a short story with minor editing; they would make a decent lesbian scene. What makes them especially thrilling, though, is that we're already familiar with the girls. The emotional investment that the reader has with the characters adds another dimension that you just don't get in a short story.
Brit's Lovers
This chapter finishes what began in Chapter 53, and helps to resolve some of the issues likely to arise from this new development in the characters' relationships. It sets the tone for the next seven or eight chapters, because now there's no need to worry about jealousy or feuding.
Crashing the Party
In this chapter Jeff starts to admit his feelings for his little sister. Unfortunately, he's a victim of bad timing. I'll admit, after the buildup throughout the chapter, the prank at the end is a little anticlimactic. Still, it makes for a humorous scene, and gives Jeff an excuse to lose his clothes in front of a bunch of girls again.
Originally Chapters 55 and 56 were meant to be one chapter, but the second part grew so long that I had to split it. This chapter sets up the rest of the sexy slumber party with a very naked Jeff and a bunch of thirteen- and fourteen-year-old girls. Those who have read my novella New Daughter are in for a pleasant surprise.
Spin the Bottle
We conclude the sexy slumber party on Crystal's 14th birthday. This chapter should appeal especially to men who have an exhibitionist streak. It's reminiscent of the earlier chapter with the volleyball team, except these girls are a little younger.
More Dirty Pictures
Plotwise, this one's a throwaway chapter, meant to set up the scene in the next one. However, it's got a lot of naughty fun.
Crossing The Line
Finally we come to the payoff for those previous chapters where Jeff tormented his little sister by pinning her down and making her say "the words." This time those words take on a whole new meaning. Unfortunately (or fortunately, depending on your point of view), things go too far. How will this affect Jeff's and Brit's relationship? I'm not going to tell you. You'll just have to wait and read it later. Ain't I a stinker?
The bondage scene in this chapter is another one I wrote long before I even thought up the concept of Allison and the Primdales. I salvaged it from the abandoned story that it originally belonged to, and included it here. In a way, the whole reason why I had Jeff and Brit fight so much in Part 1 was for this scene. I needed him to be a jerk and a bit of a bully to her so that this scene would work. So I made them enemies that couldn't stand one another, although with enough clues to show that deep down inside they really do love each other.
Fa�ade
Again, I was going for a little shock value in this chapter. Up to this point, we've only seen Matt from the outside. Now we discover what he's truly like on the inside, and it's meant to be a little disturbing. He is, in one sense, a doppelganger for Jeff, an evil twin, a mirror image of him on the outside but the polar opposite on the inside. Both Jeff and Matt appear to be charming and sometimes self-deprecating. Both appear to be a little shy. Both appear to be gentle and kind. But in Matt's case, it's all a lie.
My intention in this chapter is to make the reader start hoping that something happens to change his relationship with Lissa before it's too late. That will add some tension to later chapters with her, and help us sympathize with her in her upcoming emotional transformation.
Confession
When things look like they're not going too well for Jeff and Brit, it's Allison to the rescue. Jeff finally gets a clue, and admits to himself, and to Brit, just how much he loves her. Nothing happens between them yet. I'm saving that for the next chapter.
Consummation
I figured this is a good place to end the part because it is a culmination of the events begun in the first chapter of Part 2.
It's not the end of the story, of course. For one thing, we kind of left Lissa in a bad situation without a resolution in sight. In Part 3 we actually get a bit of (gasp!) conflict, dealing with the fallout of Jeff's and Brit's relationship. It gets a little darker; toward the end of Part 3 the happy, upbeat tone that has prevailed so far is largely missing. But if you'll suffer through it, the fourth and final part brings a fun and satisfying conclusion to the story.
Surprise Visit
We begin Part 3 with Chapter 62. The title of Part 3, "Losing Control," has a dual meaning. Lissa is going to undergo a couple of dramatic transformations in her personality, essentially losing herself for a time. And Greg is going to get a couple of nasty shocks that force him to reevaluate just how much control he had over his family in the first place.
That will come later though. For now, we have a chapter full of good old pointless fun with no bearing on the plot. I inserted it as an afterthought, because I just realized that there was a string of about forty chapters without Rachael in them, much too long of a dry spell in my opinion. She's far too interesting to leave her out of the book that long. So I looked for a spot to squeeze in a chapter, and noticed that Greg was all by his little lonesome on his business trip, so I figured it would be a great opportunity to throw in a visit by Rachael. To make sure there wouldn't be any hesitation or guilt on his part because Allison isn't with him, I came up with the idea of the letter. One more reason why Allison is such a great character. How many wives would be willing to write that kind of letter to their husbands?
Fantasy Fulfilled
In Chapter 63, Allison finally fulfills Jeff's fantasy. This one was a long time in coming, too long perhaps. But hey, better late than never, right?
Foursome
While it doesn't advance the plot at all, it's got a nice sex scene between Jeff, Kari, Crystal, and Brit all at once. I hope you like it.
The First Betrayal
We leave Jeff and Brit in their bliss and return to Lissa. Remember her? Anyway, the next four chapters are devoted to her, and a series of events in her life that are going to have a major impact on her as a person.
This chapter in particular is one of my favorites, despite the lack of a really good sex scene. It really helps to develop Meg's character by placing her against the backdrop of her family, showing that she really does have a human side. She especially plays off of her kid brother Shawn really well. Later that night, she opens her heart to Lissa in a couple of frank conversations that give us a peek into her soul.
I could have told more of Meg's story. I could write a whole book about her relationship with her brothers. But I thought it would be better to leave the rest to the reader's imagination. Everyone you meet has an interesting story to tell, and most of those stories you'll never get to hear. By giving you just a taste of Meg's background but leaving out the details, I think I've made her more realistic. At least now you understand where she's coming from, and perhaps now you have an insight into why she is the way she is.
The Second Betrayal
This is one of the shortest chapters, mainly because most of it is just a segway from the scene at Meg's house to the shocking revelation at the end of this chapter. Lissa comes to forgive Meg just in time to be betrayed by one of her other roommates. This time the emotional damage is more permanent, as we'll see in future chapters.
The perceptive reader will notice a similarity between Lissa and Crystal. Both of them had a bad experience the first time they had sex. Both of them later put their trust in a boy who seemed kind and gentle. In Crystal's case, Jeff helped her through her rough time, and she came through it relatively unscathed. But now we begin to see what might have happened to Crystal if her second love had betrayed her, because it happens to Lissa.
Lissa's Transformation
This includes probably the most hardcore scene I've written so far. Lissa gets a little masochistic in this chapter, punishing herself to get even with Matt. If you're into that sort of thing, it might be quite erotic, but on the other hand, if you've come to like the characters in this story, especially Lissa, you might consider it a bit disturbing. It's the first and probably last time I'll write anything with anal sex; that just doesn't appeal to me. I mean, why would I want to stick my thing there? Especially since there's a much better spot a couple of inches away.
The second half of the chapter tones things down quite a lot, with a tender scene between Lissa and Alya. But there's an underlying uneasiness because we know of Lissa's motivations. It is much like Rachael's seduction of Lissa earlier in the story. We don't know what the end result is going to be so we don't know whether it's a good or bad thing. And no, I'm not going to tell you.
Lessons
Lissa continues her transformation into a bad girl. There are a couple of steamy sex scenes here, one lesbian and one heterosexual. Lissa's just experimenting right now; she hasn't started putting the moves on Alya yet. But don't worry; that's coming up soon.
Test of Stamina
This is one of those throwaway chapters that I added just for the purpose of pacing. Like the others, it doesn't advance the plot at all. However, like the others, it's also full of wild sex, so you can't complain too much. We return to the Primdale household with Greg once more out of the picture, and Jeff and the girls take full advantage of the situation. Once again we see Kari's affinity for naughty games, a personality trait of hers that sets up a little "wink wink nudge nudge" in the very last words of the epilogue, which we may actually come to eventually.
This chapter is a kind of tribute or homage to one of my favorite erotic stories, Six Times A Day). That was one of the inspirations for Allison and the Primdales (that and my own perverted fantasies). No, I didn't steal the plot or the characters, but there are some definite similarities. Mainly the whole "harem" storyline. In this chapter of Allison and the Primdales, you'll notice an obvious reference when the characters discuss the final count at the end of the day. I tried to write it in such a way that it doesn't detract from this story if you're not familiar with the other one. You'll see what I mean.
Best Friends?
This one is an interesting study in viewpoint. Although I did switch viewpoints a couple of times as I was writing the chapter, I told the story mainly from Lissa's point of view. By getting into Lissa's mind, we see her conniving and scheming first hand. But the argument could be made that it would be much more dramatic from Alya's point of view. After all, we already know from previous chapters that Lissa is trying to seduce her roommate away from Matt. So the shady, underhanded tone would be much more subtle, though still present. It would be up to the reader to fill in what they think is going through Lissa's mind.
I considered writing this chapter entirely from Alya's point of view, but in the end I decided against it because I felt I hadn't yet established strongly enough just how manipulative Lissa was trying to be. I didn't want to put the reader in Alya's position by tricking them into thinking that Lissa's an okay girl after all, because that would dampen the effect when this part of the story finally gets resolved. You'll see what I mean when we get to that chapter.
The Final Betrayal
There's an important plot development here, but I'm not going to talk about that.
I do, however, want to spend a moment talking about my favorite character in the story, Megan Harrison. She's interesting for a variety of reasons. At first, she seems pretty one-dimensional. She's a notoriously flirtatious lesbian. In the chapters following her introduction, you start to realize that she's also a very caring individual, always looking out for others.
In fact, you could say that in one sense she's the matron of the apartment, a mother figure to her roommates, as evidenced by her offer of being the "referee" between Lissa and Alya after Alya stole Lissa's boyfriend, her protectiveness toward Alya when Lissa tells of her plan to seduce her roommate, and even the lessons where she becomes Lissa's teacher and mentor. The chapter with Meg's family gave a bit of insight into her private life and history, helping to put her personality and sexuality into context. We discovered that despite her confidence and self-assurance, she has her own set of weaknesses that make her human. This is especially important for Lissa to discover, because as we know from her first impressions of Allison early in the story that Lissa has a real problem with people who are too perfect. When Meg betrayed Lissa, she felt even worse about it than Lissa did, and was willing to do whatever it took to make amends, no matter what it cost herself.
I think Meg's most defining scene, however, is the phone call from Matt in Chapter 71, an afterthought that I wrote after the first draft of the chapter was already finished. It adds a bit of humor to an otherwise emotional chapter, and in one paragraph it sums up most of what we know about Meg: that she's flirtatious, she feels protective toward her roommates, and she can be downright vicious if anyone ever hurts them.
Double Seduction
When she comes home for Christmas vacation, the new (and improved?) Lissa plans to have all kinds of fun with Jeff and Brit. The bunkbed scene is certainly a fun one. I've read stories before with someone being seduced by someone in a bunkbed, either on the bottom or the top, while the other person doesn't know about it. I decided to take things one step further with this one and do both at the same time. It would have made a decent short story, but I had a perfect set of characters for it in Allison and the Primdales, so here it is.
A Christmas To Remember
Chapter 73 continues the Christmas fun between the three Primdale siblings. One of my earliest ideas for this story was of a girl who's been away at college and been corrupted by her roommates coming home and showing her little brother and sister what she's learned, especially the whole "paying the rent" thing. Considering what Jeff and Brit have already been up to, it doesn't quite have the same impact here, so I substituted some humor for the missing erotic tone. But it works well enough anyway.
Alya Conquers Lissa
What? It's not called "Lissa Conquers Alya"? Go and read the chapter, and then you'll see that the title describes it perfectly.
Warning! Major spoilers coming up. Don't read the rest of this post until you've read the chapter, or it will ruin it.
I really enjoy the buildup of this scene, a conversation between two girls that is both tender and realistically awkward at the same time. Through Lissa's eyes, you can sense Alya's understandable nervousness, and the intent is that there are enough clues that the reader realizes the truth before Lissa does. The point of the chapters leading up to this scene is to keep the readers uncertain about whether they want Lissa to succeed in her plan or not. After all, even Lissa doesn't know if she's doing it for Alya's benefit or just to get even with Matt. Is Lissa a villain? What will become of Alya if Lissa succeeds?
Actually, up to this point Lissa fits the classic definition of a tragic hero pretty well. She's not evil at heart, but she has the fatal flaw of wanting to be completely unrestrained. This suggests that her story is going to end in misery, for her and for those around her. Alya in particular is in danger because of Lissa's plans.
Then when Lissa's plot finally comes to fruition, that tragedy is averted by a sudden role reversal that provides a satisfying resolution that clears up any doubt as to how this will play out. Lissa finally gets what she wants, but she discovers that she is the one changed by it, not Alya. Thus, Lissa is the one who has been conquered.
I'd like to spend a minute on the three phases of Lissa's personality. Throughout the story, she has sought to be mature and independent. Subconsciously, Allison has been her role model. Perhaps that is why the two of them get along so well. At first they are opposites: an adolescent girl who's overly mature for her age, and an adult woman who doesn't want to feel like an adult. As time passes, Lissa feels a need to be independent, to break out of the shell she's built around herself and experience life without guilt or worry. She doesn't know it, but in essence she wants to become Allison. Not perfect, because Lissa has a certain aversion to perfection, but able to accept her imperfections and even embrace them.
Unfortunately, she goes about it all wrong. She mistakenly assumes that an independent and liberated woman does not feel guilt or shame, does not care what happens to herself or those around her. So she changes not into Allison, but into Allison's younger sister Rachael. Rachael lets her passions rule her, doing what she wants without considering the consequences. The "new" Lissa acts in much the same way. Her seduction of Alya reflects Rachael's seduction of Lissa way back in the early part of the story. Though it's not obvious, an observant reader may see the parallels and wonder if this is going to become a chain reaction. The unrestrained Rachael seduces Lissa, eventually turning her victim into herself. Then Lissa seduces Alya, perhaps causing Alya to become the same way.
But in this chapter, the reversal breaks the chain, and Lissa undergoes another transformation. As I mentioned before, Allison is Rachael with a conscience, and now we see that in the same way, the third version of Lissa is the second version with a conscience. Now Lissa has completed her journey. She has changed from Allison's daughter, to her little sister, to Allison herself, a kind of maturing into who she was always meant to be.
Actually, I didn't plan it that way, at least consciously. I just happened to notice the similarities between characters after I had written most of these scenes, and realized that it made a fascinating character study. It also underscores the theme of the book outlined in the very first sentence, that Allison is the one who changed the family. Rachael, Alya, Matt, and Meg may have had a more direct influence on Lissa, but Allison had always been the ideal that Lissa was trying to achieve.
This is another place where I could have ended the story. All of the characters have now achieved happiness in their own way. Brit has Jeff, Jeff has Kari, and Crystal has all three of them. Greg and Allison have confessed their love to each other. And now Lissa has fallen in love with Alya, and in the process escaped her otherwise inevitable downfall. If for some reason you decide you don't want to read the rest of the story, this is a good place to stop. But there's one last loose end that hasn't been tied up. Greg doesn't know about what his children have been doing behind his back. That one detail is going to shape the rest of the story, for better or for worse.
Settling In To A New Life
This chapter talks about Lissa and Alya settling down into their new lifestyle. It's sort of an obligatory montage of scenes that doesn't really tell you anything you wouldn't have figured out anyway. Lissa and Alya are still together, their roommates find out and are happy for them, etc. etc. Plus it ends with a decent lesbian sex scene.
Exposure
In this one, one of Jeff's friends discovers the website from Chapter 26 with some interesting pictures of Allison. He thinks it's good blackmail material, but he didn't figure on dealing with a strong personality like Allison's. The titular "Exposure" has a triple meaning here, applying to both Allison and Jesse, but also referring to the photographic theme that dominates this chapter.
For fun, read this chapter twice. The first time, you don't know what exactly is going on until it happens. The second time, pay particular attention to what Allison and Jeff tell Jesse, and notice how not one thing they tell him is technically a lie.
This story arc had potential, and I could have expanded it to more than a chapter, but I came up with the idea late in the development of the story so there really wasn't anywhere to squeeze in anything longer.
Discovery
This is where things really start going downhill. When I first started writing this story, the original plan was to have the infamous sailing scene from earlier in the story be a sign of a full incestuous relationship between Greg and Lissa, with Allison filling out the threesome of course. Then when Jeff and Brit found out, they became a part of the arrangement. Then I realized that I hadn't used up all of my fantasies yet in planning the story, so I had to draw the whole thing out, in fact writing most of the story after Jeff and Brit saw those pictures. In doing so, I had to change things between Greg and Lissa, turning the photoshoot into just some naughty yet mostly harmless fun. So when Greg discovered what Jeff and Brit had been doing, his natural reaction would be fury. Jeff manages to defuse the situation by bringing up that sailing trip, but things are going to be kind of gloomy here for a while. Don't worry. It's only temporary, then things will get better again.
Family Crisis
Here we see the fallout of Greg's discovery of Jeff's and Brit's relationship, and it's not pleasant. This is really just a filler chapter for the sake of pacing; nothing really happens here except that the siblings start returning to their old ways of bickering and fighting. This is going to hit rock bottom in a couple more chapters, but if you'll have patience and wait it out, things will eventually turn around.
The point of these chapters is to show the contrast between what happens when Jeff and Brit are allowed to love each other, and when they aren't. If the theme of the story is that deviant sexual relationships are good, then this shows it from a different angle: that denying such relationships is bad. It also shows how far this family has come from its origins, and that it's impossible to return to that innocent state.
Speaking of innocence, you could say that Allison and the Primdales is a metaphor for the Garden of Eden, involving a fall and redemption, a change from innocence to wickedness but also from ignorance to wisdom. But that would make Allison the devil figure in the story, so I guess it's not good to analyze it too much. See? I did pay attention in Sunday School after all. My teachers would probably be proud of me if they could see me now. On second thought, probably not.
No More Secrets
We leave the melancholy at the Primdale household and return to Lissa. She at least is enjoying herself. And who wouldn't, with a girlfriend like Alya and pretty much everything going right for her? A phone call from her father interrupts her bliss temporarily, but it doesn't spoil her mood for long, and like most of the recent chapters about her, this one ends with a nice lesbian scene between Alya and her.
Surprising Compromise
The "compromise" of the title would be the greatest thing to ever happen to Jeff, except that it's overshadowed by all of the pain and misery of his separation from Brit. Chapters 77, 78, and 80 were some of the most difficult to write because in order to really get into the minds and hearts of the characters I knew I would have to get into a bad mood. In fact, I happened on a bit of luck (if you would call it that) when I read a couple of stories from another author where he kills off a character in the second book of the series that I had fallen in love with in the first book. That put me in a gloomy melancholy for a while, so I harnessed it by finishing these darker chapters before it wore off.
They mostly get better from here on out, with the occasional road block.
I won't say much more about this chapter except that it ends on kind of a cliffhanger. If you don't think you can handle the suspense, I suggest not reading it until I upload Chapter 81.
Guardian Angels
This was actually one of my favorite chapters to write. It's very emotional, even borderline melodramatic. Once again it emphasizes that Brit is still just a little girl at heart, and that Jeff's love for her is not just as a big brother, and not just as a lover, but something more than the sum of its parts. I think that out of the whole book, this chapter makes the best argument that their incestuous relationship is not only okay, but a good thing. Even Greg begins to see that here.
The title of the chapter refers back to thirty chapters ago during the weekend with the volleyball team. Tracy told Jeff that they would be his Guardian Angels, and now they get a chance to prove it.
In a Moment of Weakness
After the Primdale kids hit rock bottom in the previous chapter, things have started to look up for them. Unfortunately, as the title of this chapter suggests, they're unable to stay strong, and suddenly things are as bad as they ever were. Don't worry; the darker parts don't dominate this chapter like they did Chapters 78 and 80. When Allison takes over later and starts pulling the family together, things won't look as bad as they do right now.
There are a couple of scenes here with characters from some of my other stories as well. I needed a motivation for Jeff to start thinking again about having a relationship with Brit, so I added these scenes to help him realize that there are other people having similar experiences. If you'd like to know the full story about these characters and haven't read them yet, take a look at New Daughter and Submissive Little Sister. It's not a requirement in order to enjoy Allison and the Primdales, but you might like them nonetheless.
Farewell Party
We say goodbye to Lissa's roommates, other than Alya of course. I would have loved to write more about Meg in particular, but unfortunately, with the school year ending, there's no way to keep Monique or her in the story. Fortunately, I leave it on a high note, with an all-girl orgy. Even Monique, the last straight girl in the apartment, gives it a try this time.
A Desperate Plan
Chapter 84 is the first chapter of the fourth and last part of Allison and the Primdales. This chapter sets up the plot for the rest of the book. Greg, the final obstacle to solving the conflict in the family, is the focus of the rest of the story.
Allison, of course, is the instigator of the devious plot, but it's up to the entire family to do their part. In a way, that's very appropriate, since she's the one who got them into the mess in the first place. From the very beginning she's been changing the family with her extremely liberated attitude, and by now it should be clear that there's no way back. The only solution is to complete the journey, and only Allison can show them the way.
After reading this chapter, you pretty much know how the story is going to end. It's no longer a matter of discovering anything new; it's now just a matter of enjoying the details.
The title of Part 4, "Family Reunion," has a double meaning. Superficially, it simply means that Lissa returns from college for the summer, and both Alya and Rachael come to visit, essentially bringing together what will eventually be one big happy family. But it also refers to the mending of the rifts that have threatened to tear the Primdale family apart.
Bathing
The plot is now fully underway, with Lissa and Allison gradually getting Greg used to nude girls in and around the house, this time with Lissa, Allison, and Greg in the tub together.
Father-Daughter Bonding
Lissa isn't the only daughter willing to flaunt her body in front of her father. Now Brit throws off her inhibitions (and her clothes). Greg still resists unfortunately, but you can tell he's starting to weaken.
A Not Entirely Welcome Guest
We bring Alya back into the story here. Greg's reaction is pretty much what you would expect, but at least he's making an effort to be openminded about things. I like the "interview" scene between Greg and Alya here; it's a nice moment between the two that shows that despite their differences, they're really not enemies. In fact, they're both interested in the same thing: Lissa's happiness.
Double Date
Alya may be visiting for the summer, but that doesn't mean that Lissa can't still have fun with her little brother. Some of the conversations in the previous chapters have already hinted that Alya isn't opposed to it, and now we start to see the results of that permissiveness.
Trading Partners
We continue the fun between Alya, Lissa, Jeff, and Kari, this time by mixing things up a little.
When I first came up with the idea of girlfriend swapping with one of the girls being the sister of one of the guys, I thought it would make a great short story. But the thought of a man sharing his girlfriend with another man didn't really appeal to me, even if he got his sister in return. So I solved that problem by having the sister involved in a lesbian relationship. That also added the potential for a third pairing which could be used as an intermediate step so that the joining of the brother and sister would be a natural followup to the first trade.
It doesn't work quite as well here because Jeff and Lissa have already fooled around quite a bit, so there's no awkwardness or shyness or even excitement at doing something so completely contrary to anything they've done before. Still, it fits this set of characters well, so I'm happy with it.
Auntie Rachael Returns
In Chapter 90, our favorite nymphomaniac comes to visit. Now we have all of the characters together who will be with us through the end of the book. This group, though made up of members of four different families, is in one sense a single family, a core of characters that are all a part of one another. This will become more clear in the last few chapters and the epilogue.
Swimwear, or Lack Thereof
Allison's plan is certainly working, and we can see the change in Greg's attitude from earlier in the book. By the end of the chapter, the whole family has pretty much turned into a bunch of nudists. Greg is a lot more permissive than he used to be, but then, who can blame him?
A Daughter's Offer
This one includes a sexy scene between Greg and Brit, with Brit turning on the charm. She's an expert at being innocent and sexy at the same time, and Greg nearly falls for it.
This is another scene that I stole from a different story I was writing but eventually abandoned. I just couldn't let this scene go to waste, so I found a place to squeeze it into Allison and the Primdales. For a guy who likes to read and write about incest, I think the most erotic words I can imagine are, "Okay, you can have sex with me, Daddy." This entire chapter is written around those words, at least the last half. The first half is a scene I squeezed in because I didn't quite have enough material in the other scene to fill a full chapter.
Unfortunately, this one's another false alarm, but on the other hand, that just means we'll be treated to another fun scene between Brit and her dad later.
The Seduction of Gregory Primdale
This is a perfect illustration of the way I write. I never write my stories straight through from beginning to end, but instead I jump all over the place. I came up with the idea for this chapter long before I had even thought up the concept of Allison and the Primdales, but it was also one of the last ones I started.
On the other hand, because I had already had the scene firmly in mind right from the very beginning, once I finally got around to it, I wrote the whole thing in one day. The only time I ever did that before was Chapter 31, which I originally wrote as one scene and then realized that it was longer than chapter length itself, so I chopped off the tail end to form the beginning of Chapter 32. It usually takes me the better part of a week for each chapter.
It went through several incarnations in my mind. At first it involved Kari instead of Rachael, and it took place either in the rec room downstairs or in Brit's bedroom. I even considered having them tie up Brit like in Chapter 54. I also had planned at one point to put it in the middle of Part 2 and have Jeff be the one to walk in on them. But the basic scene was always more or less the same.
This is definitely a fun one, and it shows just how far Greg has come from his conservative upbringing. Imagine this scenario. You catch your teenage daughter having lesbian sex with her best friend. Do you:
(a) Duck out of the room and hope she didn't see you;
(b) Give an embarrassed apology and then leave her alone with her friend;
(c) Yell at her and chase the other girl out;
or
(d) Join in?
Come on. Admit it. If the girls were willing, you would pick option (d).
Shocking Mistake
Finally, we come to the event that all of Part 4 was leading up to. Of course, Greg doesn't realize it until it's too late. Hopefully there are enough clues that the reader has it figured out earlier though.
I'll admit, this isn't the most original idea. If you read a lot of incestuous erotic literature, you will have undoubtedly come across a story or two with a similar plot. I myself used a similar device for a very brief scene in Chapter 47. But like many of the scenes in this book, the fact that you've grown familiar with the characters makes it all the more poignant when it happens.
Sexual Intervention
Chapter 95 is the beginning of the end. Not the end in any sort of tragic or violent way, just that it sets up the final chapters. Everything gets resolved here, and the rest is just good old incestuous fun. This is sort of an invervention for Greg, kind of like for an alcoholic or a druggie. But this isn't about booze or drugs; it's about sex. Or sexual inhibition, to be specific. The family all gets together to talk him into giving up his old-fashioned ways. He finally gives in, and thus ends the actual plot of the story. From here on out, all that's left is one great big orgy spanning four chapters, plus an epilogue to show that it all ends happily ever after.
The Fun Begins
With everything resolved in the previous chapter, the fun can begin, hence the title of Chapter 96. This is the payoff for all of those chapters where the family took naughty pictures of each other. I apologize if some of the sex scenes feel a little rushed in these last few chapters; I just wanted to squeeze in as many as I could. I was going for quantity vs. quality. It's an orgy after all, so there's plenty of sex for everyone.
That said, there is a bit of structure to this orgy. Chapters 96 and 99 are mostly just free-for-alls, a place for me to throw in a bunch of micro-fantasies, mostly worth a paragraph or two but not much more. Chapters 97 and 98, however, each follow a particular theme, basically a couple of games that Kari dreams up.
A Taste of Each Other
Kari, well-known for coming up with the most creative sexual games, takes charge here with a game of oral sex where everyone gets to live out their fantasy. And boy do they ever! Chapters 97 and 98 fill in some of the pairs who haven't yet gotten to have sex together. There were quite a few relationships hinted at that never did get resolved until now, and I'm not completely satisfied with how I just threw them into the middle of a bunch of other sex scenes, but unfortunately there just wasn't anywhere else to put them. I tried to make those particular pairings stand out from the rest, so hopefully it doesn't feel too cheap of an ending for them.
Fantasy Pairings
The fun and games continue, and this time the fantasies take on a more voyeuristic tone as everyone gets to decide who they want to watch having sex. Some of the relationships that were hinted at from the beginning are finally consummated here.
Guest of Honor
This is it, the final chapter of Allison and the Primdales. We conclude the story on Lissa's birthday. Actually, that happened entirely by coincidence, so there's really no special meaning there at all. As I was working out the timeline and filling in all of the various events, I realized that the story wrapped up the weekend before Lissa turned nineteen. With the orgy taking a couple of days, that put it at least overlapping Lissa's birthday, so I figured it made it a perfect place to end the story.
I could have made this story longer. I could have thrown in another five to ten chapters about the week-long orgy. I've read plenty of erotic stories that basically start where this tale ends. But as a conclusion to this book, I decided to end it early before it got stale for lack of plot. Four chapters is a good balance between a quick "now everything's resolved so let's end the tale" and a drawn-out "This is where it really gets good so here's another novel's worth."
While an epilogue wasn't strictly necessary, I decided to throw this in just for fun. It shows the family several years later, reemphasizing that what has happened to them is a good thing. The long term results are all positive. One interesting thing I did that you won't find in many stories, erotic or mainstream, is that I introduced a new character in the epilogue. Considering how much sex everyone has been having, I figured I should probably have at least one pregnancy. The new character is the result of that pregnancy.
The end of the epilogue is, of course, a kind of "wink wink nudge nudge" referring back to Kari's creativity when it comes to sex games.
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